I Re-wrote the courtroom scene from VELMA because I had to.
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- A courtroom scene without a SINGLE Ace Attorney reference? Not on my watch…
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This way Velma isn't an awful person and Fred gets to be a himbo but not incompetent
this video really demonstrates that this show did not have to suck at all
and I think the best way make the show better is to just hire *Phill lord* and *Criss Miller* and have *Jamie De Jonge* as the writer and there we get ourselves an actually great show that tackles social issues in a very mature mannered way
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@@BestOneEver247 Or hire any other people besides Mindy. Heck, your average fanfic writer can do better, at least the outcome will probably be mediocre
IMO, Velma herself was only an awful person because it portrays Mindy Kaling (since I heard that Velma is a "self-insert" of Mindy.)
Fred having ADHD is perfection. I wish Jamie written this show instead
I relate
Girl, same
Agree, it gives me 2010s vibes
This is a version of Fred I can get behind lol
yup
SPOILERS:
1:40 The mention of DNA evidence is also a subtle and brilliant way to foreshadow Fred’s mom being the culprit. In the show, there’s nothing that even hints at her being the killer until the last two episodes. Having Fred mention that the victim was found near his home, where his DNA could have gotten on them another way, is also a great way to misdirect the audience so we wouldn’t immediately assume it was him or one of his parents.
With Fred’s new characterization, I would change his mother’s motivations. She still wants to take out the brains of teenage girls so that she can replace her son’s brain with them. That is because she sees Fred’s innocence and naivety as weaknesses that make him unfit to lead the company. She would call Fred a softhearted imbecile who does not have the guts and ruthlessness to take charge like she does. Fred would be heartbroken that his mother sees his compassion as weakness and almost give up. However that is when Velma and the others refute his mother’s statements, saying he is not weak at all. If anything he is stronger than she would ever be because he is willing to change for the better and care for other people besides himself.
Victoria Jones would almost get killed by a falling stalagmite but Fred would tackle her out of the way and save her. Even though she is a serial killer, she is still his mother. Victoria Jones ends up getting arrested and outed as the serial killer.
Fred would be depressed at this turn of events only for the Mystery Gang to comfort him and remind him that he still has them. This is how the Mystery Gang ends up being formed with Fred and Velma as the leaders of the group.
holy fuck you guys are so much better at writing than the people writing velma its insane
@@CapitanJorge24
Not that high of a bar to be honest
@@avidagamegerl1081 ik but still
Sucks that it would’ve still been pretty obvious that one of his parents were the killers though. Since the audience knows for a fact that Fred is innocent, the immediate assumption would be that the killer was one or both of his parents.
I like the idea of Velma not being the one to accuse Fred of murder but actually trying to defend him. There is comedy gold of Velma being a cynical socially awkward nerd and Fred being an oblivious positive Himbo.
Something about Mindy Khaling tells me you can attend college and still be an absolute moron.
I like the idea of Velma accusing Fred, but only because she let her assumptions of him paint her judgement, only to see that she's wrong about him.
A great way to learn to never jump to conclusions, and how baseless accusations can do real damage. The kinds of skills a detective needs.
@@jordanloux3883 and also make sure these lessons stick with Velma throughout each episode instead of constantly forgetting and making the same mistakes.
Velma would start off as a bad detective hampered by her lack of experience and lack of confidence in herself. However she grows over time until she becomes the brains of the mystery gang we all know and love!!
I will take these scenes as canon over the garbage we got and no one will convince me otherwise!
@@justinguyos5476 Would have made the show actually good if they did that though so its a shame but it would ave never happened.
@@justinguyos5476 Or at least through the entirety of an episode. She goes back being an arrogant self-absorbed jerk after apologizing to Norville and taking the majority of the credit and not feeling bad about Fred in the slightest when he did try to save their lives. That scene would've been good growth for Fred too with him gaining more independence and trying to be selfless in risking his life.
@@jordanloux3883No
I love how Fred just YEETS himself out the window in the background. I have ADHD and Fred is a mood
Saaaame, I really liked the turn to the typical "squirrell" joke by having Fred calmly throwing himself of a window, we ASHDers know how to pretend not to be easily distracted!
I SCREAMED when I saw that💀
yah
@@Misora7303 I have lierally stopped mid conversation to point out a squirrel. We seem to be getting a lot more in our yard lately.
@@ivorynk752 Right? I honestly can't count the number of times I've interrupted myself to whisper "Kitty!" or "Horses!" mid-sentence. And then I internally crash because one second was enough time for me to forget what I was saying. I'm currently not being medicated, though, so that might have something to do with that.
I love it! ADHD, Velma being nicer, Fred being a loveable dumbass, the Ace Attorney pose!!! Amazing.
I don’t believe Fred is in term dumb
In the past, he wasn’t until he became someone a little bit different
The key to using memes as jokes is to use the ones that never die:
1.- cat playing piano
2.- press X to doubt
3.- anything Ace attorney related
4.-" I am your father"
5.- GRAND DAD! FLEENSTOUNES!
6.-Jontron "why"
7.- it's time to stop
8.- anything Simpsons related
9.- anything SpongeBob related
10.- anything Malcolm in the middle related
@@CBMOA Fred was definitely never dumb in the knowledge sense, but most iterations have him as a bit of an airhead who was bad with social queues
@@electricfeverx976 In his first iteration he was just the one who took credit, scooby and shaggy were the ones that were the bait, Velma the damsel in distress and Daphne the trapper. When Fred grew brains and became the trapper, roles were changed, Daphne was now the bait, scooby and shaggy the damsels and Velma the one that took credit
Best references ever
As someone with ADHD, this actually is pretty accurate.
“I mean, I’m not just going to run out there like some stupid kid hyped up on sugar because I thirst for excitement or whatever.”
“...”
“But I’ll still check it out. I mean, you *already* got me curious about what might be out there.”
*And then she got distracted and didn’t return until she remembered that she should probably get back.*
Your take on this scene is miles better, no questions asked. The pacing and dialogue is much more tight, and Velma's anger feels more justified here. This is proof that Velma's story CAN work. It just needed better writing, less filler, and characters you actually want to route for.
No, what it just needs is heart and respect. Something the people at HBO Max is in desperately short supply of.
@@justinguyos5476 Honestly, both of you are right.
And no twerking on a corpse.
Or unnecessary cringe or just nasty moments...likes, who wants to see two bugs doing you know what? Like, is not even funny and shows how mature the writers are and how funny the show will be...
Also, respecting the audience would be good too.
@@justinguyos5476 sadly, an idiot named Seth MacFarlane has put the "disrespect" bar too low so any wannabe bullies and political inquisitors have their own show nowadays. I don't want to live in this planet anymore
Hey I’ll gladly take this over humiliating a guy after falsely sending him to the slammer
Yeah and this doesn't take away from the story at all either
Finally, the writing for this show is tolerable.
Seriously though, this is good.
WHY ARE YOU EVERYWHERE 😭
I wish Mindy didn’t do any of this
@@thefeintnetwork5429 They have good taste
That "Eye of the Tiger" joke was amazing, I will admit.
It’s almost like having a little bit of respect for what you’re working on helps the show actually work.
YOU ACTUALLY MADE ME FEEL BAD FOR FRED!! His expression when he was said to be guilty actually HURT my heart!! TmT
I'm so sorry xD
I fucking coughed when I saw him jump out the window
That was beautiful
I know! Me too 😂
Himbo Fred is best Fred (as long as he’s still the leader and a trap enthusiast)
@@starlight4065 YEAH YOU UNDERSTAND
I fucking lost it. I wasn’t expecting that
he just yeets himself out the fucking window XD
There was more comedy in that 2 minutes than in entire show
The part where Fred immediately going from "I don't believe you." to "I'll check it out anyways." Had me rolling.
And then he jumped out the window.
I will never recover from Fred jumping out the window. 😂
I loved how that was drawn 😂
@Cricket Fred will probably never recover from that either
Yeah that bit stopped me laughing too
window jumps are the best 😭
..I can't begin to describe how much better this is. That moment where Fred is declared guilty and he genuinely thinks he's a murderer carries so much more emotional weight than anything across all 10 episodes of Velma...
@Bluespirit wait, I thought the U.S. has "Innocent until proven otherwise"? I wouldn't know as a German.
@Bluespirit oh... That is very bizarre...
@Flamme 5.0.6 that's just the propaganda, it's pretty guilty until proven innocent here. A lot of people go to jail with no proof they did it if they don't have a proper alibi unfortunately.
and plus it matches his airhead personality
Being funny without being mean-spirited. Well done.
I think sometimes being mean spirited can work, but they need humanizing moments to balance it out. And Velma doesn't really have any,
@@ivorynk752 Very true, for any sort of dark comedy show there needs to be a balance, if it's just constantly being mean then it's not even really funny, all successful shows that have some extent of dark comedy have humanizing moments while Velma seems to lack those overall... Makes you think what kind of mind could come up with something like this.
@@kashiogos A hateful, spiteful mind. A mind that hated the Scooby Doo franchise and actively pushed to make a horrible adaptation.
Yup, there is a difference between being actually and being mean-spiritedly funny: Make it balanced and relatable.
“I’m…a murderer?” Nooo, he’s so innocent in this version! My poor heart!! WELL DONE!!
1:40 I love when dumb characters accidentaly say something smart that other characters never thought of, you're officially smarter than writers that get paid for writing please keep these coming
Somehow, this version actually made me feels bad for Fred going to jail cuz at the end, he's asking himself whether he's a murderer. This is a much better written version of Velma, Velma's actually a nice person and Fred is just adorable!
You didn't feel bad when he went to jail in the original?
@@muddashucka9743 no the original didn’t make me feel anything, it sucked
@@aMythologicalDriedCactus Yeah the original sucked, but Fred was sent to jail on less evidence in the original, and that was after he put his neck on the line to protect Velma from the entire school when they were convinced she was the murderer.
One of the worst things about the original is that it has some really nice and caring characters, but the show goes out of its way to shit on them for no reason.
I'm not sure if it's the same for ADHD, but people with ASD (they often go hand in hand) mostly have a very great sense for justice. However, growing up in a NT world where many of their behaviours is automatically "wrong", it makes you very paranoid -like dancing on borrowed land.
Due to this, the question "Wait...am I?" is actually very relatable. Because 1.) you don't want to be a bad person and 2.) you know you didn't, but still have the natural feeling of NTs being somehow an "authority" to you. Aka that their perception "overwrites" yours. Even if it logically doesn't make sense.
Overall: This be a great showcase of ND things.
"This is not a better version. This is just my version."
Which happens to be infinitely better than the original version.
Bro fricking lied when he said it wasnt a better version.
Imagine being so humble that you say that something you made that it's clearly better than the original is not a better version
Massive respect
Dude I really like this. Cuz the way I see it, this could have been an actually good character development for Fred. He goes to jail for something that he doesn't do. But while he's in jail, he reflects on how he's been treating people around him. He actually realizes that he's been a horrible person and wants to change. And another thing is maybe this is why he wants to solve mysteries too. He doesn't want to put the wrong person in jail. Cuz he knows how jail is and wants to put the right person in. But he knows he cant do it alone. He needs... THE MYSTERY INCORPRATED. And that's how I think Fred's character should have actually change. Instead of just reading a feminist book he actually goes through the experience and reflects on what he did.
Yo, this is it. I love the way you thought of Fred's character development because it gives fred a reason to become his characters archetype.
omg this is wonderful 🥺
1:19 Oh, I love how he's not self conscious about that. Honestly, he's such a sweetheart in this version. And your version is actually funny!
1:49 You made me care about this character more in under two minutes than the creators ever could.
yup
YESSS BECAUSE SEEING HIS FACE BROKE MY HEART. Bro just wants to have fun and listen to eye of the tiger.
in 2 season no less
“This is not a better version, just MY version.”
I think we all can agree that somethings up with that
You're right, that is a bit strange...
C'mon, gang, we've got a mystery to solve!
This version IS better. Infinitely better. It's better than the writers of the show could ever hope to be
I love how even the most awful media can inspire creativity and teach people to be better writers and storytellers.
There is no force more powerful in this world than spite
Gotta love the desire to *edit*
@@jordanloux3883 The power of awful media is that it shows us what NOT to do as writers. And, if the passion is strong enough (especially if it's based on an already loved IP), it motivates some to find a way to make it better.
Never underestimate the fans.
I love the mental image that Fred reforms all the worst prisoners if he went to jail
Bro listen to yourself worst PRISONERS in JAIL
@@grinmace4834: He’s just talking with the guys who did misdemeanors! 😂😂
Wouldn't doubt that.
Honestly even in Velma it seemed like the prisoners took one look at Fred and took him under their wing due to seeing him as an excitable child.
@@alorapendrak9752: Oh, so like Avatar the Last Airbender, where aang got live advice from the prisoners. 😂😂
Jamie: explaining how she's not the Messiah for making this.
Everyone: SHE IS THE MESSIAH!
Perfect. The ADHD comedy angle, the phoenix wright reference, the wholesomeness, Velma isn't terrible and doesn't body shame, I genuinely feel bad when Fred DOES get convicted... it's too good 😊
I liked everything except the adhd comedy angle but I also have severe adhd so seeing it mocked like this hurts me. I see others ppl with adhd commenting how they like it and that’s great but that’s just my two sense as someone whose adhd was constantly diminished to easily distracted
@@luciabaran8346 I guess it’s because it’s actually kinda true, I’m Autistic, but I completely understand how you feel, even if I like the joke
"This is not a better version, just MY version."
No, no, this is definitely a better version.
An amazing Velma rewrite?!
And you even put an Ace Attorney reference in it?!
I adore it. I adore this rewrite.
Someone else noticed the Ace Attorney reference!! I agree this is overall amazing!!
OBJECTION!
Court mandates at least one ace attorney reference in any court scene showcased across the internet. I don't make the rules.
@@greenstarlover1 The original scene from Velma doesn't have an Ace Attorney reference 😔
@@alexf225 Then it shall be declared guilty.
I thought the reason he was going to be convicted anyway was because they saw him jumping out the window as an escape attempt.
You are brilliant
Maybe he also got distracted by an ice cream truck or something
I love how fast he got back into that courtroom after diving through a window.
Bonus points would be if you saw a SECOND smashed window in the background.
This made me actually interested in the scene, rather than wondering why they need to keep bringing up his tiny dong as evidence and Testimony
"Wasn't the victim found at my house? That's where my DNA is most of the time..." had me seriously giggle xD
I like this version of the characters way more!
not one single joke from velma could ever compare to watching fred jones jump out a window. this is an amazing rewrite.
These two SCENES that you have animated alone are better then the WHOLE FIRST SEASON. It’s not that hard to tone down some of the mean and still keep the show adult
Almost make me want to try rewriting a scene.
You know, your rendition of the Velma series reminds me of Rise Of The Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles in a way. As in it feels like a different but interesting take in the franchise, by changing some characters traits but making it seem organic in an imperfect high school setting. Velma being self-conscious and more down to earth, Fred being an oblivious but loveable dumbass; and I would imagine Daphne as an aspiring student who wants to be popular and Norville as like a charismatic class clown that everybody at least tolerates. It's all different but feels natural.
I love Rise!
@@MicahdreamFORREAL‼️‼️‼️
_Rise_ is so good!
AYO I LOVE ROTTMNT! I would pay money to watch Jamie’s version of Velma. I will binge watch every episode of it! Jamie’s version, not HBO’s.
Fred doesn't act like a total fool of himself and Velma actually tried to defend him because he is innocent and would never kill someone, but he is still considered guilty like in the show by that stupid lawyer. It really creates some drama and conflict.
That "eye of the tiger" comment from the judge was funnier than all of the original show
I Lost it when Fred just YEET out of the window. You are so funny 😂😂😂
Fred launching him out of the window is so perfect and the fact it’s in complete silence just adds to the comedy so much I actually laughed aloud when I first saw it
Okay I love that last scene.
I viewed the shadow over Fred being a representation of his father (who I’m guessing is still nasty in this rewrite) showing that he feels like he’s become just like him.
still find it a bit weird because I remember in the original that Daphne and Shaggy were the extremely rich ones
Dang, poor Fred. They didn't even ask what motive he would have to kill the girl. They just assume that his DNA being there assumes he is guilty and never bring up the fact someone could have framed him.
I actually laughed at the Fred jokes this time around. Much better than the original.
I enjoy this very much.
“I just think making music is neat!”
Oh my gosh why was that adorable.
And that “I’m a murderer?” at the ending with the long shadow, like now Fred is doubting his own innocence.
And that single gasping jury member .
"This isn't a better version" honey this IS better, lol. I think everyone can agree! The Ace attorney meme was a wonderful little touch.
this literally IS better, I also love how you captured Fred's dumbness, it's perfect and it feels a lot more like the old fred
He's not the sharpest tool in the box, but he's also not mindblowingly stupid
Perfect balance
He's not the sharpest tool in the box, but he's also not mindblowingly stupid
Perfect balance
The characterization is great but I love how you use actual evidence to get Fred convicted instead of doing it just cause. And he wasn't given a weapon either. You made the court smarter! I like that!
The scene carrying on while Fred jumps through the window is such a fun visual gag. It feels like a joke from a David Zucker movie
10/10
Amazing writing
I actually liked Velma and she isn’t an annoying ass protagonist
Fred is an adorable ADHD himbo
And the last scene broke my heart for him
nono it is a better version
Thank you so much for this. A major thing that pissed me off during these episodes was that it felt like a show about solving mysteries couldn't even get the basic law right. This is a lot more believable than the version in the actual show.
Much funnier seeing fred leap out into the window instead of struggling to cut meat
Wow. I'm just. Wow. They actually feel like Scooby-Doo characters and I can totally see both Fred and Velma behaving like this. This is so great
I also can see them behaving like this
Lmao he flew out the window
Omfg the boy’s just a golden retriever
Mystery Incorporated proved that a Himbo Fred DID do wonders for the team dynamic, however I'd say the type of himbo energy you want to go for is less "actual idiot" and more "cheerfully oblivious."
The stuff he's interested in (vehicles, mechanisms, men's fashion, and whatever niche thing the writers need for this story like astrology or the circus) he understands really thoroughly. Everything else he's completely clueless about, except he usually doesn't REALIZE he's clueless and just happily blunders on without seeing all the obvious mistakes he's making.
This is also why he's never creeped out by the spooky locations the gang visits, and why he ALWAYS suggests they split up. It's also this unearned confidence that always places him as unofficial leader.
Me watching the original Velma show: "........"
Me watching this: *Giggling while kicking my feet in the air and occasionally cackling like a mad scientist*
Can we petition Jamie to rewrite this show? Please? This story is addicting and I would actually watch this masterpiece if the characters were like this.
i love the fact that fred here is not a childish moron but rather a lovable dork who even points out a falacie in the layers objection
I live for these fantastic rewrites!😍 And honestly this version is WAAAAAY better. This actually has Velma be likeable AND prove a decent point despite it being a comedy! Overall, great job!👍❤
This one rewritten scene has more humor in it than the entirety of a _SEASON_ of this show.
Well done for actually managing to polish a turd into a pearl somehow. 👏👏👏
I laughed harder during this clip than during all episodes of the actual show combined! The way Fred flew out that window 😭
"This is not a better version, this is just my version"
Well it's better than the version we got, so it's the best version!
"This is not a better version, just MY version."
Which IS better 😎😎
You are insanely good at rewriting shit heaps.
The creator should make a comic series about this. A comic or animated series if they want to about the rewrite of Velma.
I saw your HQS videos, read your webcomic and now velma you are talented! I will consume your content as much as I can
Omg thank you so much! T.T
I think this one clip alone is funnier than the entire show, all while also having high enough emotional stakes that make me care and feel for the characters.
Incredible work, as always Jamie! ♥️
(I always get so invested in your rewrites and want to see what happens next, and when I remember what show it came from I always get so disappointed, lol.)
YOU'VE SAVED US ALL
I CAN LOOK AT SCOOBY DOO WITHOUT CRYING NOW
but seriously this is so good! you should've written the original lol
You simply made me love Fred you are so good
This is much better. Treating Fred with respect, Velma being a nice person who just has issues, and Fred going to jail being treated like a actual bad thing that horrible impacts him and Velma. Especially Fred who seems to be convince he is secretly the murderer and he doesn’t know it.
this is funny, and i can easily see THIS being a scooby doo spinoff XD
I haven't laughed at something so hard for a while! Just the way Fred YEETS through the window and _no one cares_ is comedy gold! Can we all just band together and make a fanmade remake? Because I'd love more of this (with some name tweaking to avoid copyright)
Ah yes Jamie, fixing what Hollywood just can't seem to get out of their system
Mark me down as interested to see were this is going -
Wonderful animation and writing work as usual!
But the judge was like, "No, he has a point." For freaking Eye of the Tiger.
Done well! I love this version better than the actual show 🤮 and thanks for making my himbo so lovely 🥰
You lied, it is the better version 👑
I love your version of Fred! He looks like the type of character that would become my favorite
I actually feel both guilty for Velma and Fred. Mainly, Fred.
I love your sense of humor in these animatics!!! 😂
I'm actually glad to see the art form of clever writing of stupid characters isn't dead. Seriously, Fred in this rewrite was hilarious and downright charming without once feeling forced or like the story is shaming/mocking him. Kudos.story.
And Velma's re-write; dude, I could kiss you. She actually has flaws, isn't a snarky or mean-spirited annoyance, and actually plays up her intelligence quite well without being condescending.
Did anyone notice how fred went head first into the window?
oh don't worry, *it is a better version*
I adore he's honestly assuming he's a murderer because of the veredict. Also that one jury gasping just, deliciously funny, subtle but poignant, just, overall better.
We all wish that this wonderful artist could make the Velma show than the peice of garbage we got. Cause this scene alone is better than what we got, PLEASE do more of these I love them to DEATHHHH- and also keep up the great work! SUPER COOL!
Dude I remember I had to pull out every ounce of willpower just to get through that episode without turning it off
but this right here did the exact opposite I was watching this throughout the whole day just because how enjoyable and entertaining it was
This video made the characters enjoyable to watch just Within 2 minutes while the show itself has 10 whole episodes still making the characters unbearable to beginning to end.
This was a awesome video keep it up
No, this is the better version. This is funny🤣
i'm so invested in these re-writes these are so damn good!
Why is it always that the fan projects are infinitely better than the ones made by corporations?
They should fire whatever writers they have on the show now and replace them with you fr
This is good, it literally much better then what we got, it felt serious but not too long, simple, and actually respect charecter
And now we just need someone to voice act these and I'd watch them 100 times over compared to the original.
I was waiting for the punchline about Fred being easily distracted I DIDN'T EXPECT HIM TO JUMP OUT THE WINDOW CINDERELLA 3 STYLE! I LOVE THIS XD
Cinderella 3 is ICONIC!!
Your version did the one thing that the original tried, tried and failed to do; made me actually LAUGH. Thank you 🙏.
Fred throwing himself out the window somehow caught me off guard in the best way possible 🤣🤣🤣🤣
I am loving this you need to write more of this!
ACE ATTORNEY POSSSSEEEE! These are so cool! Keep them up Jamie!! ❤❤❤❤
No no
This IS the better version
Also I love how Velma and her dad have the same head turn look :)
You inspire me
Just one person gasping in the jury at first and then everyone gasping and the one guy looking confused is funnier then 99% of jokes in the original series
Oh no hon this was objectively better from every angle. As a scooby doo fan it doesn’t paint the two in such negative light. It makes sense velma wants to help free Fred cause of how he stood up for her earlier in the show. From a writing sense it’s more interesting that the character is too distracted to form murder plans instead of him being too stupid to use cutlery. Not to mention that unlike the trial you had ACTUAL jokes. I legit laughed out loud when Fred jumped out the window