Do NOT Submit Your Common App Without Watching This!! | 7 Deadly Sins (by Yale 2020 grad)

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  • čas přidán 5. 09. 2024
  • Not clickbait. Here are the common application essay 7 deadly sins:
    1. weak ash hooks
    2. problem-solution ratio
    3. things happening to you vs. you making things hapen
    4. lack of specificity
    5. no contribution to campus
    6. no demonstrated personal growth
    7. obvious insights
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Komentáře • 47

  • @Azizaaly
    @Azizaaly Před 3 lety +35

    These are the 7 deadly sins that I commit in my common app essay.
    You are doing great work. Thank you so much. Keep it up. You really deserve millions of subscribers.
    Usually I don't write any comments. I write comments to your videos.

  • @alejandroquinterocashore4603

    Deadly sin #3 is so tempting! At a first glance, it would seem more logical to describe the circumstances and people who got you to where you are today. The 20, 60, 20 ratio is definitely a good way to make sure that you showcase what you can bring to a college.

  • @Eli-gn3km
    @Eli-gn3km Před 3 lety +20

    I wish I had your videos when I was writing my applications lol; I'm looking back at my essays and seeing all the edits I would have made.

    • @elevatedschool
      @elevatedschool  Před 3 lety +2

      I made these same mistakes too lizzy lol somehow we slipped through the cracks haha 😇

  • @0xNightxade
    @0xNightxade Před rokem +8

    It really is clear to me now that I need to be more conscientious about being more specific and detailed in my descriptions in order to really convey my character and processes, thank you!

  • @theatregirl7851
    @theatregirl7851 Před 2 lety +3

    so helpful!! this makes me feel pretty good about my essay, all i’m struggling with is the hook. my essay is about my journey with makeup/eyeshadow palettes and how i went from someone who hid in the background to someone bold and self-confident because of my makeup. my first sentence is “i bought my first eyeshadow palette at the beginning of freshman year.” i kind of like it because it’s simplistic and unconventional, but it’s also not super exciting yk? but the rest of my essay seems to align with your advice though :)

  • @brendanc927
    @brendanc927 Před 2 lety +3

    I can't believe this doesn't have more likes; this is so helpful!!

  • @ndindakasyoka5733
    @ndindakasyoka5733 Před 3 lety +5

    I legit clicked on your video just because of the seven deadly sins but this has been surprisingly insightful
    I came looking for Copper but I found Gold!!
    Thank you so much

  • @jacob-gc8ts
    @jacob-gc8ts Před rokem +2

    Thank you Kevin! I'll make sure to watch out for these 7 Deadly Sins when I write my Common App. :)

  • @elevatedschool
    @elevatedschool  Před 2 lety +3

    Hey guys! If you found this video even mildly entertaining or helpful, it would really mean the world if you considered liking and subscribing -- the channel is very small, so everything helps! 😇

  • @Jopzip
    @Jopzip Před 2 lety +5

    I just want to say you are helping me so much with these videos. Columbia is my dream and the deadline is Nov. 1st!
    This is a long shot but maybe you could look over my essay?

    • @elevatedschool
      @elevatedschool  Před 2 lety +1

      Hey Aiden, unfortunately I'm absolutely swamped this week and won't be able to look at your essay. I am so so sorry and wish you the best of luck in your journey!!

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      Did you get in?

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  • @igntrollington5519
    @igntrollington5519 Před 3 lety +6

    Hi Kevinnn, thank you so much for your videos! Could you please maybe do one on the current Yale supplements if you have spare time? Alsooo side note, I remember reading your Quora answer about Exeter a few years back and seeing you on that Business Insider article hahahah!

    • @elevatedschool
      @elevatedschool  Před 3 lety +1

      For sure! That's a great suggestion! I think I can pump one out by this weekend

  • @ayechanphyo6672
    @ayechanphyo6672 Před 3 lety +7

    Hello, Kevin!Thank you so much for your advice. Not sure if you remember, I commented and asked you about the college app review session and you sent me a link for that. I was wondering to when I would have my essays ready and tried to register a session today but, found that I couldn’t for this month as it is full.I am sorry I know you must be busy with all the registrations but, I really needed it so I wanted to make sure if there is any possibility for a college app review for this month from u?

    • @elevatedschool
      @elevatedschool  Před 3 lety +2

      Hi Aye, unfortunately I'm all booked for sessions until the end of the year. So sorry! -Kev

    • @ayechanphyo6672
      @ayechanphyo6672 Před 3 lety

      Ah it’s okay .Thank you, Kevin!

  • @SuperDuperNonsense
    @SuperDuperNonsense Před 3 lety +3

    hey kevin! your vids have been super helpful to me and the discord server i'm in! would it be cool if we could meet again for last minute CA changes?

  • @elevatedschool
    @elevatedschool  Před 3 lety +11

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  • @makkeedahmitchell6167
    @makkeedahmitchell6167 Před 3 lety +3

    Hey Kevin I really liked your advice would you mind looking over my essay and giving me couple feed backs because honestly I have been struggling with this essay for months

  • @elevatedschool
    @elevatedschool  Před rokem +1

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