Secondary power idea for cat noir: ‘Misfortune’. With this power, Cat Noir can temporarily bring bad luck events to whoever he targets. (I personally think it goes well with his black cat theme)
I honestly really like the rewrite. Instead of feeling a bit cliche, Marinette feels like she has more personalty. Chloe and Marinette have a better reason for their rivarly, and the fact there's no Miraculous Ladybug makes it feel like the show can't rely on that! Well done, you deserve more subs! (Btw this is just opinion)
Your voiceover is really clear and concise! Very understandable, especially for people who haven't watched the show such as myself. I like your plot point about the collateral damage being permanent and causing tension bewtween the citizens and the protags! Your rewrite is very sensible :3 I also really like the earrings turning to plain black studs - small detail, but I love small details like that. Hope to see more content from you! If you do make more videos, I hope you have fun making them!
This deserves wayyy more support, I love your redesign of her character and the rewrite of the story was really interesting and unique! The idea of creating tension with the hero’s and the citizens is amazing and way more realistic to what the show brings! ❤
Oh cool! You and I had similar ideas with the Marinette and Chloe rivarly and the student counsel gimmick. Its just that rather than people pinning on Marinette to be president they actually like chloe (later chapters) or solely voted for her so she'll be more busy with school stuff rather than bullying them. (This version of Chloe actively seeks out the leadership role and makes sure to do it in an exceptional manner which is why the teachers also agreed to her becoming president. ) However with marinette yeah she has a think with perfectionism, people pleasing, as well as obessed with her image. So basically the first teo combined. She stutters and fumbles alot and although many see her as a good person, they dont really feel like they can depend on her knowing that it wouldnt get messed up as they would for Chloe. (I changed her personality a bit) gah I began rambling sorry
I like how you changed the reason why Chloe and Marinette are at odds as well as keeping Chloe a bully because her becoming queen bee was just an excuse to sell more toys. the reincarnation angle is jarring but not a horrible idea. also wang fu not having a normal life and training for something he was never meant for in the first place, and unleashing a sentimonster, as a result, is giving me rise of the teenage mutant ninja turtles vibes
Yo this was actually really good! Keep up the good work! You know I’m working on a Miraculous rewrite as well. But I’m making quite the drastic changes: Gabriel is NOT going to have the Butterfly Miraculous, Felix is and his name is gonna be Monarch since that name is so much better than Hawk Moth. I considered using Shadow Moth but this is the Butterfly Miraculous and not the Moth Miraculous (the characters aren’t changing there names unless their using a new Miraculous, I hate that they do that thing where they change their name with their costume). Lila is going to take Nathalie’s place as Mayura. She’ll still be a liar but this time her lies are much more believable (for example in “Chameleon” instead of saying she has tinnitus, she’ll just say she has hearing problems because she attended a concert where the music was really loud and she forgot headphones. Believe it or not this same thing happened to my friend Corey) In my story, Felix and Lila are childhood friends and Felix wants the Miraculous to bring his mother back (she died). They are also going to be introduced in Season 1 right away. Emilie is alive so Gabriel is less cold and more respectful than he is in the actual show. However, her career as an actress takes her away from the house often. Chloe is NOT getting redemption arc (sorry I hate her too much lol 😂) I’m introducing Zoe in Season 2 so she can get the Bee Miraculous instantly. She’s also going to be Chloe’s cousin instead of half-sister. The New York heroes don’t exist (the characters exist as civilians but there hero personas are just comic book characters) Ships will include: Luka x Marinette (their perfect for each other sue me if you don’t agree lol 😂), Adrien x Kagami (again I think their a perfect match, I’m also making them childhood friends as well because I find it strange that their parents knew each other before the series and they never met before), Felix x Lila (I’m pretty sure everyone thought they would be a thing at least once at some point), Nino x Alya (Nino is gonna like Alya from the start so no weird crush on Marinette that came out of nowhere), Rose x Ali (who’s a millionaire and not a prince in this story), Nathaniel x Juleka (I read a bunch of cute fanfics about them and I think they could work) and Marc x Zoe (same situation with Nathaniel and Juleka, and I wanted them to have someone) Changes to some Miraculous powers as some of them are either too OP (Rooster and Rabbit), have to similar powers (Ladybug and Goat, Horse and Dog) or just don’t have enough/defined limits (Butterfly). I’m also gonna get rid of the time limit so the users can use their powers multiple times cause it’s kinda annoying how they leave the battle to de-transform and such. 1. The Rabbit now grants the power to view the timeline not travel through it. (I HATE time travel, the Snake does it right). However, they can only see a few minutes into the future (5 minutes max) and if they don’t know the time/date something happened they can’t view it (that’s why Monarch can’t find the heroes identities with it since for all he knows they could have had their Miraculouses for years) 2. The Rooster now allows the user to use the quill (this is the only way I can understand the tool being a quill) to write a symbol on a paper talisman that, once placed on their body, will grant them any one enhanced physical ability of their choice (strength, speed, intelligence, making themselves a skilled painter/builder/hacker etc.) 3. The Goat now grants the power to heal any negative effect (injuries, damage to objects or alterations caused by a villain such as swapped personalities, mind control or transformations). It can’t be used to revive the dead or repair something that’s completely destroyed. Also can’t be used to release an akuma since, by nature, akumas aren’t evil or harmful. 4. The Dragon now allows the user to control all elements (I know it sounds op but they can only use one element at a time so it’s balanced, at least I hope lol 😂) 5. The Pig now grants the power of “Influence” (basically hypnosis) since its canon version is basically a mix of the Fox and Bee. 6. The Peacock and Tiger’s powers are the same but their now called “Avatar” and “Collision” respectively. 7. The Butterfly’s power is now called “Metamorphosis” and has set limits. It will be established that Monarch can’t choose the powers his villains will have. The powers will be dependent on the target’s emotions. Also it will be clarified that these people’s emotions will be amplified, causing them to not think rationally (I hate how they see the Butterfly doesn’t grant mind control when that’s clearly how it’s portrayed in the show) so when they are de-akumatized they are hit with a sense of guilt and sadness and will be seen trying to make up for what they did. It also can’t grant an exact replica of the Miraculous powers (Copycat will be a loophole since in my story, he‘ll have the power to copy anyone he sees a picture of and chooses to stay as Cat Noir and Anti-Bug will just have the power to create weapons). Also I’m getting rid of the whole Ladybug purifying akumas thing (since it makes no sense that Ladybug only has that power) and going with the movie’s plot where the akumas infect people’s hearts (also to not make it as similar as the Peacock) and the villains need to be dealt significant damage for the akumas to be released. 8. I’m also getting rid of Ladybug’s repair everything power since that just means there is no consequences. 9. Minor change but the Snake’s power can now only be used 100 times before the marked point is automatically reset. 10. Another minor change but to make the Dog not as similar to the Horse, instead of teleporting an object to themself the user telekinetically summons the item. I came up with a cool idea where unifying two Miraculouses will grant a special “fusion power” which is basically a new power that’s esstinally a combination of the unified Miraculouses powers. We know the Ladybug and Cat Miraculouses have that so why not the others? For example unifying the Cat and Horse will allow the user to make a black hole, the mouse and dragon will allow the user to make small storms and the goat and ladybug will grant essentially a weaker version of Canon Ladybug’s repair everything power. I also figured I’d give secondary powers based on the animal to the holders seeing as how Cat Noir has night vision and stuff. The Turtle makes the user more durable, the Horse makes the user faster, the Rabbit allows the user to jump great distances, the Ox makes them stronger and the Dog grants the user enhanced senses. Those are the main ones I came up with. I don’t really know what secondary powers the Pig, Goat, Rooster etc. would have. The heroes are also going to get an official team name. I’m not very good with that stuff so I’m just calling them “Team Miraculous” since that’s what TV Tropes calls them. I’ll also be changing some of the hero names: Max is “Stallion”, Ivan is “Minotaur” and Mylene is “Multimouse” (its not fair that Marinette gets the better name). Also I’m just switching Kim’s name around to “Monkey King” since King Monkey sounds kinda weird. I’ve seen people on reddit saying they’d change the games of Vesperia and Pigella but I honestly like those names. Another major change is that the Kwamis aren’t embodiments of concepts and instead are pure magical creations that the mage who created the Miraculous made to be mentors for the Miraculous holders. Also, to raise the stakes a bit, the Miraculous will bond to the person who wears them, meaning that only that person can use said Miraculous unless they die or willingly renounce it. The miraculous can still be stolen but the thief won’t be able to use it. Another thing I’m gonna try to do is have more continuity and such. Like every episode will have at least two references: one for an upcoming episode and one for a previous episode. Im also gonna try to develop the other holders more (especially Nathaniel and Marc).
I was also not letting Gabe get the miraculous. I'm pretty sure one of my old drafts had Frlix with it for a similar reason. However, the book I'm focusing on the "Monarch" is Lila. And yes her lies are going yo be way better and less plot device-y
@domonicsantalucia9002 Yeah, I'm collaborating with my friend to write one. Independently writing another myself. And writing a complete rewrite of a fanfic based on miraculous I made years ago. I think I just like the idea of rewriting something 😅
Removing the miraculous lady bugs is kinda weird due to it being directly tied in with the lucky charm its kinda nerfing the power of creation but i understand as to why you would remove it i also love the redesign you adding more to her character other than her being just some random girl who got the lady bug miraculous the whole reincarnation side is a bit iffy due to there being multiple guardians all over the world and several boxes maybe rewriting the mage character who made the miraculous as a group of mages who created them and over saw the creation of the order of the guardians and training the first guardians and having marinette being a direct descendant of the head mage or the first guardian of that specific miracle box containing the lady bug and the cat (would love to see more of your ideas and rewrites cause the main story in the show is all over the place)
Thanks you! For the reincarnation part, Marinette is just the reincarnation of the mage who created the Chinese miracle box, but there were different mages around the world that created the miracle box for each part of the world! It is something I need to put more though into though. Thanks for your ideas :)
@@ivory.doodles oooo I like that Id love to see more of your rewrites especially when it comes to other characters like chole and the kawmis like the pig and dog
I do plan on doing bunnix eventually! After Adrien, I’m planning on designing Nino, Alya, Chloe and Gabriel next. After those designs are finished, I’ll likely start working on more of the minor hero’s like bunnix!
Secondary power idea for cat noir: ‘Misfortune’. With this power, Cat Noir can temporarily bring bad luck events to whoever he targets. (I personally think it goes well with his black cat theme)
I really like that idea! I might include it in my redesign as a power her gets later like how Ladybug can create anti akuma charms in season 4!
@@ivory.doodlesthough the reason for said power is utter BS.
I honestly really like the rewrite. Instead of feeling a bit cliche, Marinette feels like she has more personalty. Chloe and Marinette have a better reason for their rivarly, and the fact there's no Miraculous Ladybug makes it feel like the show can't rely on that! Well done, you deserve more subs! (Btw this is just opinion)
"Today's victim is Miraculous Ladybug." Queen quote.
Your voiceover is really clear and concise! Very understandable, especially for people who haven't watched the show such as myself. I like your plot point about the collateral damage being permanent and causing tension bewtween the citizens and the protags! Your rewrite is very sensible :3 I also really like the earrings turning to plain black studs - small detail, but I love small details like that. Hope to see more content from you! If you do make more videos, I hope you have fun making them!
Thank you!!
Alternative cover job for master Fu would be jewelar. No one would ever expect a jewelar to be the guardian
I really like that idea!
but wouldn't that lead to miraculous being mistaken for regular jewelery?
The be locked in a separate room and hidden in plainsight
This deserves wayyy more support, I love your redesign of her character and the rewrite of the story was really interesting and unique! The idea of creating tension with the hero’s and the citizens is amazing and way more realistic to what the show brings! ❤
Thank you so much!!
Oh cool! You and I had similar ideas with the Marinette and Chloe rivarly and the student counsel gimmick.
Its just that rather than people pinning on Marinette to be president they actually like chloe (later chapters) or solely voted for her so she'll be more busy with school stuff rather than bullying them. (This version of Chloe actively seeks out the leadership role and makes sure to do it in an exceptional manner which is why the teachers also agreed to her becoming president. )
However with marinette yeah she has a think with perfectionism, people pleasing, as well as obessed with her image. So basically the first teo combined. She stutters and fumbles alot and although many see her as a good person, they dont really feel like they can depend on her knowing that it wouldnt get messed up as they would for Chloe. (I changed her personality a bit)
gah I began rambling sorry
I really like your ideas! The part about Chloe wanting to be president to be seen as “exceptional” fits really well with her character!
I like how you changed the reason why Chloe and Marinette are at odds as well as keeping Chloe a bully because her becoming queen bee was just an excuse to sell more toys. the reincarnation angle is jarring but not a horrible idea. also wang fu not having a normal life and training for something he was never meant for in the first place, and unleashing a sentimonster, as a result, is giving me rise of the teenage mutant ninja turtles vibes
Yo this was actually really good! Keep up the good work! You know I’m working on a Miraculous rewrite as well. But I’m making quite the drastic changes:
Gabriel is NOT going to have the Butterfly Miraculous, Felix is and his name is gonna be Monarch since that name is so much better than Hawk Moth. I considered using Shadow Moth but this is the Butterfly Miraculous and not the Moth Miraculous (the characters aren’t changing there names unless their using a new Miraculous, I hate that they do that thing where they change their name with their costume).
Lila is going to take Nathalie’s place as Mayura. She’ll still be a liar but this time her lies are much more believable (for example in “Chameleon” instead of saying she has tinnitus, she’ll just say she has hearing problems because she attended a concert where the music was really loud and she forgot headphones. Believe it or not this same thing happened to my friend Corey)
In my story, Felix and Lila are childhood friends and Felix wants the Miraculous to bring his mother back (she died). They are also going to be introduced in Season 1 right away.
Emilie is alive so Gabriel is less cold and more respectful than he is in the actual show. However, her career as an actress takes her away from the house often.
Chloe is NOT getting redemption arc (sorry I hate her too much lol 😂)
I’m introducing Zoe in Season 2 so she can get the Bee Miraculous instantly. She’s also going to be Chloe’s cousin instead of half-sister.
The New York heroes don’t exist (the characters exist as civilians but there hero personas are just comic book characters)
Ships will include: Luka x Marinette (their perfect for each other sue me if you don’t agree lol 😂), Adrien x Kagami (again I think their a perfect match, I’m also making them childhood friends as well because I find it strange that their parents knew each other before the series and they never met before), Felix x Lila (I’m pretty sure everyone thought they would be a thing at least once at some point), Nino x Alya (Nino is gonna like Alya from the start so no weird crush on Marinette that came out of nowhere), Rose x Ali (who’s a millionaire and not a prince in this story), Nathaniel x Juleka (I read a bunch of cute fanfics about them and I think they could work) and Marc x Zoe (same situation with Nathaniel and Juleka, and I wanted them to have someone)
Changes to some Miraculous powers as some of them are either too OP (Rooster and Rabbit), have to similar powers (Ladybug and Goat, Horse and Dog) or just don’t have enough/defined limits (Butterfly). I’m also gonna get rid of the time limit so the users can use their powers multiple times cause it’s kinda annoying how they leave the battle to de-transform and such.
1. The Rabbit now grants the power to view the timeline not travel through it. (I HATE time travel, the Snake does it right). However, they can only see a few minutes into the future (5 minutes max) and if they don’t know the time/date something happened they can’t view it (that’s why Monarch can’t find the heroes identities with it since for all he knows they could have had their Miraculouses for years)
2. The Rooster now allows the user to use the quill (this is the only way I can understand the tool being a quill) to write a symbol on a paper talisman that, once placed on their body, will grant them any one enhanced physical ability of their choice (strength, speed, intelligence, making themselves a skilled painter/builder/hacker etc.)
3. The Goat now grants the power to heal any negative effect (injuries, damage to objects or alterations caused by a villain such as swapped personalities, mind control or transformations). It can’t be used to revive the dead or repair something that’s completely destroyed. Also can’t be used to release an akuma since, by nature, akumas aren’t evil or harmful.
4. The Dragon now allows the user to control all elements (I know it sounds op but they can only use one element at a time so it’s balanced, at least I hope lol 😂)
5. The Pig now grants the power of “Influence” (basically hypnosis) since its canon version is basically a mix of the Fox and Bee.
6. The Peacock and Tiger’s powers are the same but their now called “Avatar” and “Collision” respectively.
7. The Butterfly’s power is now called “Metamorphosis” and has set limits. It will be established that Monarch can’t choose the powers his villains will have. The powers will be dependent on the target’s emotions. Also it will be clarified that these people’s emotions will be amplified, causing them to not think rationally (I hate how they see the Butterfly doesn’t grant mind control when that’s clearly how it’s portrayed in the show) so when they are de-akumatized they are hit with a sense of guilt and sadness and will be seen trying to make up for what they did. It also can’t grant an exact replica of the Miraculous powers (Copycat will be a loophole since in my story, he‘ll have the power to copy anyone he sees a picture of and chooses to stay as Cat Noir and Anti-Bug will just have the power to create weapons). Also I’m getting rid of the whole Ladybug purifying akumas thing (since it makes no sense that Ladybug only has that power) and going with the movie’s plot where the akumas infect people’s hearts (also to not make it as similar as the Peacock) and the villains need to be dealt significant damage for the akumas to be released.
8. I’m also getting rid of Ladybug’s repair everything power since that just means there is no consequences.
9. Minor change but the Snake’s power can now only be used 100 times before the marked point is automatically reset.
10. Another minor change but to make the Dog not as similar to the Horse, instead of teleporting an object to themself the user telekinetically summons the item.
I came up with a cool idea where unifying two Miraculouses will grant a special “fusion power” which is basically a new power that’s esstinally a combination of the unified Miraculouses powers. We know the Ladybug and Cat Miraculouses have that so why not the others? For example unifying the Cat and Horse will allow the user to make a black hole, the mouse and dragon will allow the user to make small storms and the goat and ladybug will grant essentially a weaker version of Canon Ladybug’s repair everything power.
I also figured I’d give secondary powers based on the animal to the holders seeing as how Cat Noir has night vision and stuff. The Turtle makes the user more durable, the Horse makes the user faster, the Rabbit allows the user to jump great distances, the Ox makes them stronger and the Dog grants the user enhanced senses. Those are the main ones I came up with. I don’t really know what secondary powers the Pig, Goat, Rooster etc. would have.
The heroes are also going to get an official team name. I’m not very good with that stuff so I’m just calling them “Team Miraculous” since that’s what TV Tropes calls them.
I’ll also be changing some of the hero names: Max is “Stallion”, Ivan is “Minotaur” and Mylene is “Multimouse” (its not fair that Marinette gets the better name). Also I’m just switching Kim’s name around to “Monkey King” since King Monkey sounds kinda weird. I’ve seen people on reddit saying they’d change the games of Vesperia and Pigella but I honestly like those names.
Another major change is that the Kwamis aren’t embodiments of concepts and instead are pure magical creations that the mage who created the Miraculous made to be mentors for the Miraculous holders. Also, to raise the stakes a bit, the Miraculous will bond to the person who wears them, meaning that only that person can use said Miraculous unless they die or willingly renounce it. The miraculous can still be stolen but the thief won’t be able to use it.
Another thing I’m gonna try to do is have more continuity and such. Like every episode will have at least two references: one for an upcoming episode and one for a previous episode.
Im also gonna try to develop the other holders more (especially Nathaniel and Marc).
I was also not letting Gabe get the miraculous. I'm pretty sure one of my old drafts had Frlix with it for a similar reason. However, the book I'm focusing on the "Monarch" is Lila. And yes her lies are going yo be way better and less plot device-y
@@akeelahbruce1821 you making a rewrite too? Nice
@domonicsantalucia9002
Yeah, I'm collaborating with my friend to write one.
Independently writing another myself.
And writing a complete rewrite of a fanfic based on miraculous I made years ago.
I think I just like the idea of rewriting something 😅
@@akeelahbruce1821 what platform are you using Wattpad? AO3? I’d like to read it once your ready to posit it
@domonicsantalucia9002 um for the first one A03
Second one, not sure
Third one, Wattpad
This is amazing! The student counsil thing gives both Marinette and Chloe way more character
I think this needs more support, I really found your story ideas interesting.
Same! I love watching rewrites, and this one is one of the most interesting one I've seen!
Thank you so much!!
Removing the miraculous lady bugs is kinda weird due to it being directly tied in with the lucky charm its kinda nerfing the power of creation but i understand as to why you would remove it i also love the redesign you adding more to her character other than her being just some random girl who got the lady bug miraculous the whole reincarnation side is a bit iffy due to there being multiple guardians all over the world and several boxes maybe rewriting the mage character who made the miraculous as a group of mages who created them and over saw the creation of the order of the guardians and training the first guardians and having marinette being a direct descendant of the head mage or the first guardian of that specific miracle box containing the lady bug and the cat (would love to see more of your ideas and rewrites cause the main story in the show is all over the place)
Thanks you! For the reincarnation part, Marinette is just the reincarnation of the mage who created the Chinese miracle box, but there were different mages around the world that created the miracle box for each part of the world! It is something I need to put more though into though. Thanks for your ideas :)
@@ivory.doodles oooo I like that Id love to see more of your rewrites especially when it comes to other characters like chole and the kawmis like the pig and dog
Aww you're Marionette is so cute keep it up ❤
Tysm!!
i love your designs !! i'd love to hear the rest of your rewrites and see the rest of your redesigns :))
Thanks for your support!!
I really love the desing you put in ladybug, in canon I always felt like It was planes nothing more, she looks amazing in your style 🤩🤩
Thank you!!
They look so pretty, love their redesigns ❤
Thank you!!
ur art is amazing ! for cat noir, i think it would be cool if he could purify akumas with his staff thingy
Thanks for your support! I really like that idea :)
Cool Ladybug. Next up, her love interest Adrien & his alter ego Cat Noir
Thanks for the support! I should have Adrien and Cat Noir finished something this month :)
This so freaking cute 😍
Thank you so much!!
wait til you see the one ladyS knight fantanisa did
I noticed that I don't have problems trusting the process with other people but do with my own art
How bout trying a Bunnix redesign next. Not that her official design is bad, I'm just curious on you take on this of this time hoping hero.
I do plan on doing bunnix eventually! After Adrien, I’m planning on designing Nino, Alya, Chloe and Gabriel next. After those designs are finished, I’ll likely start working on more of the minor hero’s like bunnix!
In the Original show she didn’t look like she was half asain but your design dose