Why your Personal Statement may get rejected (from Oxford, Sussex, Greenwich and Bangor university)
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- Admissions tutors reveal what makes them reject a personal statement. READ THE FULL ARTICLE HERE www.thestudentroom.co.uk/conte...
"Im not awarding you a degree in nepotism" 🤣
They should straight off slap Harvard in the face with this video
Eton college will be blacklisted lol
yeah that's bullshit lol
@R K Yeh but the 'donations' don't hurt... Quid pro quo n all that.
seems stupid to shut down decent or possible business
"In my free time I like socialising and hanging out with my friends. You'd be a really strange person if you didn't"
Well shit.
Finely guess i'm strange then
I'm more guiltier than a convict
Finley Lane Mcelroy 🙄
I felt the same way
🤣🤣🤣
Anyone else procrastinating writing their personal statement, by watching this video?
yes me!! it has been two months now..i finally got a word down lol
YES LOL
Me haha! It’s due in like 2 weeks fml
meeee
meeee
I bet the guy in the glasses is a legendary lecturer. 😂
I swear
That line was gold
that's a woman
edit:
nvm, see the geezer now
Fr😭😭😭
true
I just got called strange by a university professor.
Aksangel _ a doctor called me strange. Then wong entered the room
LMAO
Lucky
😂
I. Some culture being strange is a very good thing
It might get rejected because :
1- It's written for a major different than what it's been applied for
2- it extensively mentions irrelevant facts. (like what does your dad do)
3- it has grammar/spelling mistakes
Helpful
I Don't Have A CS Background In 11 And 12th , Will They Reject Me If I Apply For Bsc In CS , even though the university doesn't ask for previous experience in that field
@@jianpingdeng5564 don't forget the clichés.
Agreed!
@@kunalbang09 Maybe take some courses on a certain programming language or any cs related course, that should help
I love the second guy- I'm not giving you a degree in neputism. Best thing I've heard perfect sentence
Nepotism*
(My dad owns a dictionary publishing company)
Weapon of mass construction Very underrated comment
sol walker
I think that what he meant is that he's looking for people who have actively sought out work experience. For example, you might want to put 'I worked with *insert company here* to gain experience', rather than a 'My dad owns *insert company here* therefore I automatically have experience in the field'. Just because you have been surrounded by a certain subject doesn't mean you have good experience.
On the other hand if he taught astrophysics he would be awarding a degree in Neptunism........
I'll get me coat.
@@weaponofmassconstruction1940 gay
Babe, I wasn’t going to apply to Oxford anyway
Literally 😭
The trouble with the personal statement that I found was the character limit and the actual line limit! It becomes less about writing and more about how to say as much as you want in as few words as possible.
That's what writing is about.
Smart people can say more in a sentence than an entire paragraph. 😎
+erzan Fuck off, loooool.
VERY late comment, but for the benefit of anyone reading, it's very important to be succinct in your essay writing. I didn't realize or grasp this for quite a while. For any beginning students out here, this'll help you immensely:
Each paragraph should have a PEEL structure.
POINT: State your, well, point here. The main concept of your paragraph. (For example: Puppies are cute.)
Evidence: What supports your point and backs up this point that you made? (A study by Andrex (2018) shows that 9/10 people faint with cuteness overload at the puppy on their advert.)
Explanation: So? How does this evidence support your point? (When asked to describe what caused them to faint, the affected participants commonly described feeling overwhelmed by feelings of joy and adoration.)
Link: Either link back to the main question that your essay is asking you, or onto the next point. (The above research would certainly support that puppies are, indeed, cute.)
That's essay writing, though. In regards to the personal statement...
I had to change big words to small ones, change sentence structure, and even entire sentences to sacrifice. I felt that talking about my research methods and numeracy skills were more important than my hobbies, so they had to go.
Hope this helps someone! Cheers!
Ashendoll I rate this ☝️ when I wrote my personal statement I more or less did this and got a couple of medicine interviews because of it (but nearly all med schools don’t read your personal statement anymore)
Who applies to Oxford as their 'I can't apply to medicine 5 times' choice? Who? Who in their right mind?
s d Are you an idiot?
lol I did and I got an offer
+Kathmandu calm down wow, that's really rude
Yh tons of people apply for biochem at oxford as their 5th
lulusun2 i think i get why, if you can’t get the prestige of being a doctor then get the prestige of an oxbridge student. I get that.
"i'm not awarding you a degree in nepotism" fuckin savage. i love that man.
I mean I’m doing law and bullshitted my entire personal statement. Got offers from Bristol Nottingham York and Warwick. Say you like the subject, say you read some books, say you played a sport, that’s it. Oh and don’t use the word ‘passionate’
Kiwi Kiwi what uni did you go to?
Tommy Vercetti Nottingham, figured it had a good balance between student life and a decent law school, a nice student city with a good campus and sport reputations
Raul Ramirez how?
Raul Ramirez you got to remember these people read 100s of the same applications. DofE and EPQs don’t make you unique, they literally just want people who will do well on the course, and possibly in sport.
What's your reason for not using the word "passionate"?
That guy in the blue sweater: Don't tell me that you love film, who doesn't
A few moments later,
The psychology professor in the grey jacket: you love music, tell me that ! That is real enthusiasm coming from a student.
I think it was more the whole "from a young age" thing he was objecting against. If you are applying to a film or media course, it would be quite strange to not mention that you have an interest in films :P
I HAD THE SAME QUESTION WHO ARE WE SUPPOSE TO LISTEN TO
Marion Kokkinou I think it depends on the course and the skill in question. Watching a film isn’t impressive, so if you were applying to nursing and you mentioned how you like films that’s irrelevant and not going to help you. But if you are applying to a media or script writing course saying how you enjoy watching films and that you want to enhance that knowledge into behind the scenes is useful as it is directly linking into the course.
With the music one, it is technically a good skill. I feel like saying how you’ve always participated in clubs growing up like music for example can leave a good impression that you are a hard worker. Obviously don’t write a huge paragraph on music if that’s not the course you’re applying too, but you can still mention it.
I imagine the person who loved music was applying for a music degree. I doubt the other person was applying to a socialising with friends and watching films degree
@@snuffles4291 haha.."socialising with friends and watching films degree" LOL..
WAIT - you have to be a sane and quite nice person to get a place at uni? Well then, goodbye dreams of getting a degree XD
Tori Lee 😂😂😂😂
I think biggest issue today is demanding masterpiece letters which non-natives simply are not capable. On the other hand, some people who really deserve stay out of course due to ones get written their letter to freelancers or agencies. Instead who wrote letter based on natural thoughts and feelings usually ignored. I think this is little bit a injustice.
Thank god I watched this because my personal essay actually included "from when I was younger, I fell in love with film," and one of my PIQs included socializing with friends.
Bridget Sonobe Honestly it's quite hard to think of a first sentence. I think with things they've seen a lot they just skip over to the next sentence and see what you've got to say. It also depends how competitive a place you're applying to. Anyway it's usually better to get an application sent and be further up the queue than to spend a few more weeks making it "perfect".
I'm a 31 year old man who finished uni in 2012. Thanks algorithm!
😂😂
'you'd be a really strange person if you don't like socialising..' *me and other autistic people stare sadly into the distance*
But this was a genuinely helpful video, thank you!
I am not autistic but same **can feel you*
as an autistic, i did stare sadly into the distance when he said that
LMAO
"Don't try to be too clever" well shit
“I’m not awarding you a degree in nepotism” brilliant
In my statement to University of Edinburgh I was honest in what I learned, what inspired me, and what I didnt know but wanted to learn and how I felt the university would fill that role for me. It was this statement along with recs and my grades that got me in, but it took me a whole semester to get that statement to where it needed to be.
You might want to check this out czcams.com/video/5ZUgT5cgTg0/video.html
Very helpful thank you
Very interested in Edinburgh how are you liking it ? Are you still going there ?
Hi! Could you perhaps share it please?
I mean, it’s not that it’s a tough uni to get into😂
the application process in the UK has so many differences from the US. this video contradicts a lot recommendations for writing essays in the US. lol idk I just found that interesting
“Oxford, Sussex, Greenwich, Bangor”
Not exactly all in the same league there....
Jonathan L you get rejected by Bangor by using too intelligent language
😂😂😂 literally what I thought
Literally I was like huh
Are you sure most ivy league or Russell universities aren't awarding nepotism?
Cris Yorke this is the UK
@@felicityaeh Russel Group is in the UK
That guy is from Sussex, and Susssex isn’t a Russel Group uni
Have you got proof that they are?
Lucy Daniel Sussex isn’t Russell Group it’s part of another I think the 1994 which Loughborough is in as well
I didn't know the student room had a CZcams channel till now 😂
I wouldn’t want the guy to read my personal statement 😂
Idk why I’m watching this.. i’ve already graduated lol
What was your degree??
Nobody asked
Yet, you replied anyway. Lol.
Send me ur personal statement boo 😎
Honestly for Cambridge it needs to be extremely , if not completely academically orientated for an interview and offer. My cam interviewer also asked me questions in my statement about wider reading and supplementary writingzGood luck 🍀 I hope we can all get to our dream destinations.
I thank my parents everyday for enrolling me in a school with a KILLER university counsellor. He knows what a personal statement needs and makes them real good.
Give us some useful tips pls
Don’t say that and not give us any tips then
drop some tips
Divulge!
the professor, from the University of Sussex. WOW so succinct and precise.
6 years on and this is still VERY useful, thank you!
Best advice ever. At first I dreaded listening to this because I thought it would give negative vibes. But in fact, I feel this is another wonderful way to learn, from mistakes
Thank you "the studentroom"
Best video about writing Personal Statement. Thank you for the tips!!!
So I actually did my personal statement in the right way!! I was so worried but this video helped a lot.
That last statement was powerful. What you really want to convey.
oh my god i love the default youtuber no copyright music. genuinely.
I really like Mr. Sharif Mowlabus's personality and way of thinking. Those people are the reason why I live.
That dick?
So important to personalize your personal statement! Great info.
What are you smoking you lanky bastard. Personalise deez nuts
Thanks for this useful informatoin.
The Oxford professor seems quite scary😑
Pritika yeah and interviews are far worse than this
Their campus is scary and outdated and old too
@@behuman3801
That's exactly why kids want to go there!
im so glad I applied to sussex .... I hope to see this guy at the open day
Second guy was a full on savage. I love it.
The guy is so sarcastic and funny. I want him as a teacher
I feel as though he'd tear into you so fast but actually be there to help.
Well done my dear son...❤❤ hope you will reach greater heights in drawing in future....keep going
I know the lady from oxford - she comes to my gym. She s very nice
This was so incredibly helpful! Thank you
Apparently I'm a very strange person because I don't like socialising...
@Read This maybe instead of having a developmental disorder, she just doesn't like people. there is nothing wrong with that. to hell with autism, online autism tests, bipolar, online bipolar tests, adhd, online adhd tests, etc. there is more to life than collecting diagnoses of disorders, identifying yourself as disordered, and finding online support groups. and not liking socialising with people should not be looked at as a personality disorder, as-yet-undiagnosed. i remember back in 2006 or something, on a different YT channel i made a video talking about my personality. more than one person showed up to try to welcome me to the Aspergers community. telling me i should get tested for it. give me a break. i utterly despise our culture of disorders.
@@taiji1478 yes 👏 and for real.
@@taiji1478 Completely agreed.
Usually, I don't struggle with doing my assignment, however, I am very struggling to make suitable my personal statement. SPAG 😁
Wedi yemane ahh he’s. Good old SPaG
Same to me
agreeance, i am in greatly
One main point: Use COMMON SENSE.
Cris Yorke like J hus.
My paper was well-written . I will order more and more😍😍😍😍😍
ops I started my statement with "since I was young" to give an intro to my personality, I hope that won't affect my application
j'y ai passé beaucoup de temps et j'en suis fier
low-key wished I found this video way sooner
lmao! The guy talking about youd be a strange person if you WEREN't that way. Had me cracking me!
Thank you for such an informative video.
College or schools should be able to help out.
i didn’t need this in my recommended when i just applied to ucas 😭😭😭
jajaja same
PS. Sorry for the 1 year response. Ive applied recently
Samee🤣
The people of the world are the most Important part of any statement..
I think if you will not understand the environment and the person to whom your emailing so it could happen.there is always a situation means direct dialogue environment or indirect environment. You need to understand environment management means
This made me nervous but made laugh a lot
Ohhhhh I really wanted to start my SOP with a quotation that explains my nature and ambitions :/ what should I do now??
Would most admissions discard the SoP if it's not completely formal? As in using words like "really"?
i love it when people can effectively articulate that oxford psychologist a grade
I'm an American trying to apply to Oxford and ahhh this is so much different then the American personal statement
pauline gonzalez What's an American personal statement like?
Indirects they're more general- they like to know that you're well rounded and get involved :)
you do pick an intended major! but the personal statement is more ablout who you are and how you think rather than about your academic interests and what youve done since that is already expressed in other parts of ur application
Pauline Gonzalez taming you back to this comment two years later haha! Did you end up applying to Oxford after all?
Did you end up getting into oxford?
I decided to watch this out of pure curiosity. I managed to get 2 unconditional offers and i'm incredibly pleased. Good luck to everyone xo
I gave it a like because of the funny bald guy.
The male professor is hilarious (brutally honest) oh I love British accent!!
Problem is the word count. Some unis ask for 200 words max. What can you put and what can you omit in a 200 word statement
Very useful content. Thanks for sharing it
Amazing tips! Thanks for this video =D
Bit late now that it’s sent. Thanks CZcams Recommendations
Thank you this is great !
Some good advice, shame it didn’t come with a few poor attitude statements.
Me: just submitted my uni application.
Algorithm: Why your Personal Statement may get rejected?
It's a really good video though! Thank you for posting it!
I’m applying to two different courses: Biological anthropology and anthropology with archaeology , are these too different ?
You’ve probs already applied but not really, depends what uni you apply to & depends what they teach & focus on. I study archaeology (began arch & anth). There is a massive overlap, in some areas. So not really. Some unis only teach anthropology, some teach both check out the modules.
I’ve done bioanth & bioarch modules during my degree and study archaeology, some of my lecturers come from a bioanth background etc.
So no, not really.
oops...I started mine with a quotation 🤣
still got offers though
Too bad that I didn't come across this before I applied for Oxford three years ago.
I am planning to do my post-graduation in Biotechnology in UK. I need to take my husband with me what are the procedures and documents needed for that he only have 10th qualification. After 10th with an accident then joined for a diploma cause and dropped out. After that he went to Dubai and have been working there the truck driver in agility logistics.
Except oxford, all the other universities do not have the privilege to select students as they have problems admitting enough students.
I am applying hope it works
can i write? To whom it may concern. when i don't know who will read our intent letter or motivated letter.
Fantastic video
Stop reading comments and go write your paper
you do the same then ill do the same. gobshite
My man Sharif Mowlabus is savage AF.
Why am I watching this, im in uni...
1:33 This video IMHO really emphasizes the privilege of wealthier applicants who get better mentoring and understand many of these norms as a simple matter of being part of their own wealthier academic subculture. Many student from Eton College would know these things merely as a matter of course. Better students from other UK subcultures would not know these things.
so i cant start with quotations??
how would you write a personal statement for dentistry study ?
Ahmed Samir
www.thestudentroom.co.uk/wiki/Category:Dentistry_Personal_Statements
Take your pick, there's about 15 real dentistry personal statements here from UCAS
Fiha Fiha Thanks a lot
Lol the guy was throwing shades 🤣
Does anyone wonder how theirs was accepted ?
Interesting. I was thinking your personal statement would get rejected if it threatened the safe space of the tutors.
Not me, I’ve got an offer from Greenwich
Great! What if I write my statement in British English and send it to an American University?
Use entirely words that are the same in both languages
(Don't actually)
In my free time, I like to be in solitude, in nature. Not with people and socializing is the last thing I would do. It's called introversion. Don't judge.
I am the same. Except I spend most of my time in my room. I'm either watching videos, browsing social media, writing, gaming, or revising mathematics.
OH MY GOODNESS, this is so difficult for me
I love this vlog.
well shit lol, im currently waiting to get my offers back and ive already done the first two, love that for me :]
rip
How have ur teachers not said anything about that? WAIT OMDS DID YOU GET IN?
I Don't Have A CS Background In 11 And 12th , Will They Reject Me If I Apply For Bsc In CS
Why did my brain think "wait, Bangor has a university?"
It's Bangor in Waleesssss not County Dowwnnnn
*" ever since i was young, i love film. In my free time i like socializing and hanging out with friends"*
*you'd be a really strange person if you dont like those two things*
I agree with the first but i don't know about second