The Common App Essay That Got Me Into Yale and Featured on the New York Times! (Part 1) | Jeffrey Yu

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    About Jeffrey Yu: Yale '23 (Computer Science and East Asian Studies)
    Jeff is a senior at Yale double majoring in Computer Science and East Asian Studies with a concentration on China. His college admissions essay was featured in the New York Times, and he specializes in essay writing, college admissions strategy, and life coaching. He has served as a Student Ambassador to the Yale Admissions Office, written extensively about college admissions on Quora and has taught courses on motivation, passion, and leadership while sponsored by the US Embassy in Tokyo.
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Komentáře • 17

  • @HeyKevinYT
    @HeyKevinYT Před 7 měsíci +70

    If this is your essay that got you into Yale, my essays that got me into Princeton sound like jokes 😭 this is impressive

    • @ezgamer2569
      @ezgamer2569 Před 7 měsíci +5

      Could you please tell me what you wrote. im just writing mine.

  • @fatamy8597
    @fatamy8597 Před 10 měsíci +37

    is there any way you can share a PDF version of this??

  • @elevatedschool
    @elevatedschool  Před 10 měsíci +29

    Hi everyone! In the two years since we started this channel, we've helped more than 70+ students get into every single Ivy League School, Stanford, MIT and more! If you're interested in working with us, please visit our website: www.elevated.school/getstarted. And if you'd like your essay edited by a member of our team, visit www.elevated.school/editmyessay . Also, please note that we do take on exceptional low-income students every year, so if you identify as part of that group and would like a scholarship, let us know! I hope you found this video helpful and are having a wonderful day 😇

  • @neeeeeaae4736
    @neeeeeaae4736 Před 8 měsíci +21

    Amazing hook!!!

  • @yugissavage1025
    @yugissavage1025 Před 9 měsíci +11

    Hi Jeffery, I appreciate that you were able to share your common app essay with us. I am a sophomore in high school and is aiming to get into the Ivy League. Can you help mentor me or could we set up a quick zoom call

    • @elevatedschool
      @elevatedschool  Před 9 měsíci +2

      Sure! Please visit our website: www.elevated.school

  • @JoyJoke
    @JoyJoke Před 9 měsíci +23

    I just don’t understand what the difference is between a good essay and a great essay. From this hook alone, it sounds like the essay is about your dad, but isn’t the essay supposed to be about your qualities?

    • @serignefadillou8893
      @serignefadillou8893 Před 9 měsíci +12

      I agree this essay sounds like it’s focusing on his dad but not on him but maybe that’s just the introduction

    • @povwriter
      @povwriter Před 9 měsíci +15

      Actually, college essays are to state why they should accept you or why you are different from the crowd. Tend to stay away from your accomplishments and talk about why you're important to have on campus. Why are you a good fit for the student body, not the academic body.

    • @neeeeeaae4736
      @neeeeeaae4736 Před 8 měsíci

      Mathis is just his intro nothisfull.

    • @worldtraveler721
      @worldtraveler721 Před 3 měsíci

      I thought the same thing. I thought the intro focused too much on his dad.

  • @brandonampang2199
    @brandonampang2199 Před 3 měsíci +1

    what should i put at the beginning of my college essay? it needs to be something luring the college admission to read your essay.

  • @dolumdoli7621
    @dolumdoli7621 Před 8 měsíci +11

    We live in a world where you have to learn English literature to do physics….. what is next?? Get admitted by winning an mma fight?

  • @MichiganUSASingaporeSEAsia
    @MichiganUSASingaporeSEAsia Před 9 měsíci +2

    "Western Michigan University", a doctoral research university with the largest donation in public university history, is the best. If you get admitted they have tons of generous scholarships and they even pay for your internship and in some cases, for your dorm. Vc