21 Words to Cut from Your Writing
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- Cut these 21 overused and ineffective words from your writing.
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Tip - most of these apply to your narrative writing but not your dialogues. People are sloppy, people use little vocabulary, so keep that in mind.
I was looking for this comment. This is why I don't trust this "expert". He just creates this videos for views, but I don't see his work considered Award winning.
@@1993Michoacan I get it but he makes some good observations. The no.1 tip from me regarding this topic is set the tone with the language of the narrative, make a choice and stick with it. After that you should decide how formal or informal, bloated or concise your language is.
I think this was implied - words to remove from YOUR voice as the writer.
Bad - Suddenly, Avi saw a really big dog just outside
Good - “Oh my god, Sera there’s a really, really big dog that just suddenly appeared outside,” Avi said.
@@1993Michoacan It’s not like he needs to be a Pulitzer Prize winner in order to know what he’s talking about.
I'd say they can even have place in narrative writing at times. If you have different characters' points of view in a story, sometimes tinging the narration with their voice, and not just the dialogue, can work really well to keep them distinct.
I get his idea, but there are ways to use these things effectively, if the story calls for them. Sometimes you should just keep the narration neutrally voiced and concise though.
One thing I like to do in place of "suddenly" is simply cut a sentence off and jump to the interrupting action. Like, narration will be describing a scene where the characters are talking about how hard the rain-
The lights went off.
It makes the audience feel the interruption, too, you know?
Makes it more impact full, especially with the lines that separate the interrupted sentence.
yo i really like that
That one is cool, as it litteraly cut it off
That’s so cool, love this.
Daaamn. I felt that.
That was really very good.
Thanks!
@@WriterBrandonMcNulty You gave excellent advice.
"Haha" I said out loud, reflecting on the irony of this comment.
Just discovered you McNutty, really good lectures. I've always fantasized about being a writer. Most of my attempts are 1-2 page jokes, but I appreciate the thoughtful presentation.
😁
Seems that you just should not gun for the very words you just saw.
Thank you for encouraging a LOWER word count. One of the biggest mistakes I see new authors make is trying to increase their word count for no reason at all. They end up handing editors these 600-1,000 page monstrosities and getting rejected almost immediately. I have been a critique partner and beta reader for novels for a long time and I can't stand this new trend. So thank you for the tips on how to shorten things up and still have impact, much appreciated.
Could be an artifact of our education system. How many of us were raised on having to make sure a paper was [x] words long, even if we didn’t need anywhere near that much to make a point?
@@aaronreeve1414 That is a good point, thanks. At least there's some reasoning going on for that.
@@aaronreeve1414 For me it's always trying too hard to be descriptive. I let myself run wild on the second pass (first pass in my process is barebones story), and then start deleting large sections when I realize the reader probably doesn't really care about the shape of leaves on the exotic bush even if I do think the word choice is clever on subsequent passes.
Another reason for it is simply because it can be done; word processors make typo correction a trivial task. In a typewriter, eliminating a word accidentally repeated might mean retyping the rest of the chapter (or rephrasing to keep the change from affecting another page).
This is a product of the "word minimum" established from schooling, or at least that would make sense.
I think this is not only good for writing stories, but for normal, everyday writing. I can see it applying just fine to work emails.
Good call!
Agreed. I look at a text or email to see what I can eliminate. Anything unnecessary gets cut.
And speaking too.
Especially just, which is used the same as like.
This is like a really like fun way to like do things.
This is just a really just fun way to just do things.
@@protorhinocerator142 True. However, when you are speaking it's to be expected to use some filler words, such as "like" and "just", because you are speaking at the same time you are thinking. This does not apply to ANY written medium, since in those cases you have the time to organize your thoughts and express yourself appropriately.
It's fine to take some pauses when speaking to craft your speech, but there's a reasonable and practical limit to how long those can be.
2:07 I just like how you just repeat the word "Just" a lot, it's just very funny
Noticed that too 😂
THEN - I taught writing for 23 years and my students often began multiple sentences in their narratives with THEN. "Then we went to the store. Then a strange man started following us. Then he started begging for money. Then we tried to find a store employee because we didn't feel safe..."
Yes, that was one I thought of too... except for certain occasions, appropriate to the pov and the sequencing, where not i cluding it would feel too abrupt? But every other sentence is *not* that.
As if to prove your point, you ever see that meme where you add "Then the murders happened" to quite literally the opening line of any story? It makes it so jarring that it doesn't matter what you tack it onto. "I went to sleep with gum in my mouth and now there’s gum in my hair and when I got out of bed this morning, I tripped on the skateboard and by mistake I dropped my sweater in the sink while the water was running and I could tell it was going to be a terrible, horrible, no good, very bad day. Then the murders happened"
Yeah, this sounds very awkward today, unless it's for laying out explicit instructions or procedures, or describing a list of events. Even then, it's probably better to save that for dialogue or a set of instructions, and keep it out of narration in 95% of cases.
That said, it was very, very common to do it in narrative prose in older forms of English. Old English texts are full of "þa" and "þonne" (both mean "then", in slightly different senses) at the start of sentences, even if it tends to drop out in translation. If someone's trying to imitate older forms of English, it might make more sense.
All words have their places. "Really", for example, has a sour, ears-back sound that can emphasize a peeved statement. It can sound youthful and excited in other sentences. For a character, or an author adopting a persona, it tweaks the tone nicely. Very nicely.
A lot of these rules of what words to use or not use go right out the window when writing actual dialogue, I feel. You can break these rules to develop characters. Perhaps throw in a lot of "justs" into a sentence to make them seem flustered or panicked, "Just, I just got here and I swear it was just like that!" Or use a lot of "verys" or "thens" to make the character seem less intelligent by giving him less vocabulary. Or not have a character ever use contractions to give their speech an almost robotic feel, "I can not do that. It would not be proper for me to do that." Improper dialogue actually is one of my all-time favorite jokes: malapropers. Where characters use the wrong word, thinking it's the right one. Archie Bunker of All In The Family was the master of them: "Making suppository remarks about our country," "You have turned into a pyronymphiac," and "It’s a well known fact that capital punishment is a detergent to crime!"
The distinction has to be that when writing in 3rd-person omniscient style, you must be more specific and less generic in your descriptions. When handling the dialog of a person of lesser education or some ethnic traits, ALL of the listed words are fair game as needed to convey the person's characteristic behavior.
That suddenly became the most extremely helpful video I've seen on writing. I feel like I simply cannot express just how helpful it was. It will help my stories in a really big way. It's very nice, haha
That hurt
I have seen. 🙂
I'm pretty sure we all see what you did there. LOL. Good job.
I'm so glad someone did this so I can just like your comment instead of writing my own
A few disagreements with the gun/car ones. Not necessarily in principle, as I get the idea of adding specificity over vagueness. Not wasting opportunity to characterize, etc. Where I think writers need to be careful is being mindful of the POV. If the POV character is one who would notice things like the type of car or the type of gun, then I agree it's good to include it. But a lot of POV characters wouldn't notice that detail, or if they would, they might not notice it in the moment. This could actually be a good video or two itself.
I think anyone would notice the difference between a handgun and a rifle at least, and that has quite a big impact on what can or will happen with those people.
If it's in dialogue, I don't think any word is off limits. It should be tailored to the character. I avoid repetition as much as possible though.
Reminds me of adventure games where you play multiple characters and make them analyze the same items and they both make different observations
Suddenly a nice car just pulled up out outside and a dog got out with a gun. He felt that none of this seemed right. In fact, he felt that all of this really seemed very, extremely wrong.
@@TheIndieOcean it shows you have no interest in fine automobiles
I’m curious why the views are so low, he’s really good.
I am not a writer, never will be. But, I still enjoy videos like this.
Thanks for the kind words!
7:03 Hi Brandon, in Germany we say "Nett ist die kleine Schwester von Scheiße." which translates to "Nice is Shit's little sister." When I was learning my job as a journalist 40 years ago, one of my teachers would share his "3 eternal rules": 1. paint pictures in your readers' heads, 2. be precise, 3. Keep your sentences short and simple, Your writing is not about you showing off your prowess of chiseling tapeworm sentences but about your audience and how to keep them interested. Any text is pointless if nobody reads it. And it's amazing how many people, even pros, don't pay attention to this. So a big thank you from me for carrying on the torch.
Thanks for sharing this! Glad you enjoyed the video
Sometimes the most helpful videos have little views. This video made me a better written already. With the last examples, not only did you explained how to fix the "he smelled..he touched..." issue, but you actually kept your word count low as you were speaking. I appreciate you making it easy for us to understand.
Glad to hear it! Thanks for watching, and let me know if there's another writing-related subject you'd like me to cover!
"This video made me a better written already".
Whelp.....what was it like BEFORE this then????
@@killerpinkart6173 even the best writtens need editoors
@@killerpinkart6173 Oh no, somebody's reply had one grammatical error! Time to be a prick about it. Oh, and by the way, you used your fullstop past the apostrophe. Which is grammatically incorrect.
@@hodarov1564 Irregardless of you're opinion, my grammer was in fact correct.
I think that when cutting out words like three first examples in narrative is beneficial, using them with intention to distinguish characters in dialogues is great. If one of characters overuses "very" and other "just", after second chapter you don't need dialog tags and everyone knows who is speaking XD
I am a writer in Korea, righting in Korean language, which has totally different structure, but it is amazing that I can still benefit a lot from advices in this video.
what are you writing, if I may ask?
@@ArgentavisMagnificens Korean words
*writing
I like how you approved of just using the word said. I'm afraid to use it because it's too simple, so it's nice to know it's fine to use.
"Said" gets old real fast. I use different descriptors for replies and statements because an emotion can be carried by words.
Saying "he/she/they said" constantly is strange to me. How did they say what they said? Should I then write an entire paragraph describing how they said it?
Or should I have a character enter a scene during dialogue and "announce" what they are saying, instead of just saying it?
"they rudely shouted"
"he said sternly"
"she stated harshly"
There are different kinds of speech that indicate a person's state-of-mind in that moment.
When I write, what my characters are saying is just that; what they are saying. There is no need for deeper meaning behind their words unless it is intended. The way my characters act and feel is not up for debate or interpretation by the reader.
"If you can just cut the word just--"
I GET IT
Thank you. I did a word search for "That" in my manuscript. After several tedious hours I had in fact trimmed down about 50%. Spot on. Painful but worth it. The writing is much tighter now.
My 30+ page first chapter has two instances of it in dialogue. And it would be hard to replace. "Who said that?" for example.
I'll agree that these word shouldn't be used for description or in places that are not dialog. The argument is that they absolutely belong in actual dialog. We talk like that, our characters do too. It may not be grammatically correct but it's organic. It's natural. It can actually help to reflect personality, education, or quirks of your character.
Thank you for this! I hate using the words “feel” and “look” and didn’t know how to make a stronger sentence. This helps so much!
Awesome, glad it helped! Best of luck with your writing
"feel" is better used for dialogue, same with "look."
This is great. I agree with all of them except "replied." As an editor with 25 years of experience, I find this perfectly acceptable and as invisible as "said." However, I do have a problem with "responded" because that bumps me.
Thanks!
To search for a word like "very" using Word is difficult, because you'll get words like "silvery" or "every." Protip: in your search bar, type a space before and after the word "very" and then do your search.
Or use the "whole words" filter.
All "y" ending words are suspect, so that search is still valuable.
Hey, Brandon. I just discovered your videos, and I think they're great. I've been a book editor for 28 years, and you share a lot of the same ideas that I impart to my authors. In doing developmental edits, I tell my authors to give scenes the "George Bailey test." That means, ask yourself: if this scene had never been born, would anyone miss it? I get a lot of positive reactions from that concept. Keep up the good work. I'm going to subscribe to your channel.
The George Bailey test sounds brilliant (I'm a huge Wonderful Life fan). Thanks for sharing this!
The problem is: *I* as the author would miss it because I knew it was there, but had to cut it^^. But objectively, you're of course right
@@claudiag8823 My brother and I do a radio show. When we have to leave an interesting fact out about a song or artist he always says, "The audience won't know what we didn't tell them." But still, we're in love with what we wrote.
@@normanwhite6677 yes, that's true, but nonetheless hard🙈
@@claudiag8823 "Excruciatingly hard" is the phrase I would use. 😀
Great video!
A thing about "seem", though.
Sometimes, you don't want to describe something, as it can degrade the pacing.
The word "seem" implies that a character might feel something, or might not.
For example:
He seemed angry.
Something about him seems angry, but the POV might be mistaken.
I'll still agree and urge anyone to write what exactly makes him seem angry, but again, that brings up word-count, and sometimes you just need to summiraze.
Dialogue tags are the bane of my existence when writing dialogue. I'm not sure I agree with you here though, repeated use of "said" drives me up the wall as a reader, but you certainly have a good point that trying too hard to vary the tags gets distracting.
I'm not even a writer, but your videos make me wanna create a story or something.
And I always learn something from them, thanks!
Not sure if you’re still reading the comments 3 years on, but I liked everything you had to say. I especially liked how most of your points were explained with counter-examples. I wanted to point out one that I liked that really jumped out at me.
I quite like what Stephen Sondheim did with “nice” in Into the Woods:
“You’re so nice.
You’re not good, you’re not bad
You’re just nice.
I’m not good, I’m not nice,
I’m just right.
I’m the witch.
You’re the world.”
Probably the most effective use of the word “nice” I’ve seen.
Yeah, if you can use a word in a creative way, it can score you points for sure. Thanks for watching!
my favorite is from mash, where frank burns says, "it's nice to be nice to the nice".
ultimate blandness.
One mistake I made almost at the beginning of my novel was the phrase 'He thought to himself.' A friend quickly pointed out that he could hardly have thought to anyone else!
If you had written "He thought to his friends" ... we could be in a different genre.
I just gave you a thumbs up because I just love how you just added the word "just" in just about every sentence. Just really very clever 👏
My brain just couldn't help counting just how many times you used just after the just section.
Just have to just make sure you just don’t let it just distract you from here on
Brandon-"I hate the word just".
Also brandon within 40 seconds--just X 20. 🤣🤣🤣
In both my writing and acting classes at university they'd chastise us for using "thing" the vaguest of placeholders
You do require it when you have to convey that exact sense of vagueness.
I use a lot of these words often because I'm just a beginner writer, not that I'm lazy or just want to rush the story or anything, but because sometimes I genuinely don't know any better. But this video definitely helps a lot, and I hope will improve my writing going forward.
The word "nice" can be a great way to build mystery around a character. When referred to as "nice" by a variety of people who've had a variety of experiences with this person, a reader can easily be led to the "nice" person turning out to have a shallow public face that covers some deep darkness... if it's not overused, of course.
At the risk of giving away a particular strength in my own writing, an English teacher in high school gave me one of the most impactful pieces of advice in suggesting I try to avoid using "to be verbs" whenever possible. He noted that it was much more compelling to employ "action verbs" rather than stating something like "it was ___ ". This would mean restructuring a sentence a little bit to make objects into the subjects, for example, and made for a more expansive vocabulary overall, as well as making those more concise sentences more dynamic and direct rather than passively observational. I was rewarded for making this kind of adjustment years later when a highly regarded professor returned an essay of mine with comments about it being "some of the most powerful prose I have ever read. Every line carries meaning, not a single word is wasted." Given that this particular professor was such a well-read individual, and someone who impressed one of my own favorite authors enough to be immortalized in his work with a character named after him, I took this as a particularly high compliment indeed, and one that I owed entirely to that high school teacher's picky criticisms. Stephen King is that author, and the character was John Coffee ("like the drink"), of The Green Mile, named for one of my favorite instructors at Emerson College whom he met, and that I managed to impress thanks to my high school teacher, Dr. John Wands.
Why do you enjoy King's writing? I am an avid reader and have tried several of his books and universally despised them. I cannot understand why anyone enjoys him
Vague words like 'nice' can be used to create conflict and get insight into a character.
For example, to write a self-centered character, you can have him or her reply with 'nice' to everything in a conversation, regardless of what's actually being said. It shows that he or she is not interested in listening to the other person and is probably waiting to get an opening to start talking.
It's all about how we use these words.
"Just" is the most overused and improperly used word in the entire English language. The inclusion of it on this list is what earned my thumb's up!
That’s just what I was thinking.
What OTHER WORDS do you think need to be cut from our writing? Let me know!
Minimize "actually."
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@@personanongrata987 Agreed. Although "Actually" can make dialogue sound natural when used in the right spot, it's a fluff word in most cases.
I think one of my favorite quotes from another of these "words to avoid" videos was "when you use the word suddenly, you 'suddenly' take your reader out of the action." Sure enough, I removed the word from my story (for the most part) and it read so much smoother and those sudden happenings, happened that much more suddenly! 😃
On another of these subjects - taste is a tricky one but I find that you don't really have to describe taste so much as saying what was in the mouth or on the lips. Something like "wiping the blood from his lips" or "he spit the dirt from his mouth" give a description of taste without saying "it tasted like". Also remember the word flavor is a good swap too - "the dirty, metallic flavor of the coin he spit to the ground" (not sure what is happening there, but it sounds compelling...😂).
Other words that can be cut are had, also, still, actually, however, and there are times where a prepositional phrase can be removed because it ends up being redundant. For example, "She drove away from the store" can be shorted to "She drove away" if you already mentioned the character was at the store in a preceding sentence.
Suddenly, it just made sense to just cut out the word just from my writing.
Seems like a very good idea that you just had, really.
That's very, very nice.
😁
This video actually made me feel really good about myself, as I'd already realized a lot of these over trial & error. If I use generic words like this, it's often in dialogue to show that a character is just normal/basic.
Also, the word 'snotfuck' typically doesn't belong in most genres.
@@widethigh6ix9ine I like you.
Ooooh I’m definitely guilty of seems 😅
Omg the saw/sees tip is SO stellar
Great advice well delivered! I'm happy I discovered your channel!
This video was massively helpful! I was stuck in my writing and I wasn't sure why it was such a slog both to write and read it, and it turned out I was making a lot of these mistakes. Now that I know how to spot these problems it's much easier not to make them. Thank you!
Great tips. I'll try my best to remove these words from my writing.
What I find interesting is that my writing has improved significantly since I have started working with a lot of people who use English as their second or third language. The way we talk face to face can be remarkably difficult to understand when written as text and sent to someone from another country. Sentences need to be much shorter and use as few commas as possible. I grew up here, so my writing naturally contains layers of apposition that a lawyer would be comfortable reading, but an engineer from Malaysia has difficulty understanding any of it.
This is interesting because I experience the exact oposite. I'm German and because I have a difficult time explaining some things due to missing knowledge like everyday speech, my sentences tend to become very long, very constructed, very wooden. Someone whose mother language is English would express some things way different than I would (and also shorter).
As a fprmer teacher of English and Language Arts and English as a second language, I agree with you. I have found that the lessons I learned teaching the language to those not native hacve enriched my own ablilities.
I have a slight disagreement with the replied one: if a character asks a question, I find it less distracting if the reply is tagged "replied" or "answered" or the like, as when it just says "said" I'm usually distracted and have to take a moment to determine if they were answering the question or ignoring it. But other than that, yes, you should avoid using things like "replied" or "stated"
Exactly. "Said", "replied", and sometimes, "asked" convey just the perfect amount of information, while also allowing you to simply ignore them.
Brian, I wish that I would've seen this three years ago. Over the last three years I've written two manuscripts. I'm half way through the third manuscript. I started on this journey earlier than expected. I had planned to write a book after I retired. I'm 62. I never thought that I'd be working on a trilogy. I recently watched a video about the ten words writers should avoid. The person wasn't helpful. They came across as mocking anyone guilty of using the words on the list. You on the other hand are positive force! I learned so much today! I have tha story, now I need to polish it. Thank you!
In only fifteen minutes you clarified SO much. I didn't think it would be so interesting and helpful, so thank you! I'm not completely sure of alll of them, but I know for a fact that I am guilty of using the word 'seem' a considerable amount of time, while subconsciously knowing it's a weak and lazy word 😂 I'm gonna need to fix that!
The beauty of ... advice like this is the fun of creating stories that break the rules.
I am 70yo, English by birth. My peeve is American writers who attempt Regency fiction not knowing there were no city blocks, sidewalks or fire escapes in Regency times. That reins were used and not straps on the bridle of a horse. Just reading one Georgette Heyer novel will fully acquaint any writer from anywhere of exactly what to put in and what terminology to use for it: for those new to Ms Heyer I recommend my personal favourite: Faro's Daughter. Am new to your channel and find it explains the shortcomings of American authors. Have just enjoyed my first Meagan Pearce "Sweet Revenge".
“I grabbed the coat hanging on the door”
“That was” is technically correct, I believe. In it’s absence, the sentence can be construed as “I grabbed the coat while I was hanging on the door.” I know it realistically wouldn’t in the modern era, but sometimes you need “that” to be grammatically correct.
This was extremely helpful. Others have gone through, saying "do this and that" but they never give examples. Your examples here made it click. So thank you.
Thanks for this! A lot of these are simple fixes that really do make a difference in the quality and strength of writing. Good stuff to be aware of in my own.
Thanks for watching!
I hear the opposite advice about “replied.” I’ve been told you want to avoid using “said” because it’s boring, and have always been advised to replace it with more varied verbs.
Ymmv but too many different verbs like "remarked" "responded" "murmured" "commented" "interjected" etc doesn't add to the narrative and can get distracting, whereas "said" is bland enough that it is basically invisible.
But otoh words that describe how someone is speaking can add tone, e.g. "whispered" "yelled" "growled" "muttered".
@@indigoziona Yeah kinda my thought as well. I think as long as they bolster the narrative, they are okay to use.
Thank you for all your advice its been a big help!
Great example with “just”. Have to keep this in mind for editing.
Thanks for your videos man, they're very helpful.
Thanks for watching!
Thanks. The presentation was informative.
Excellent video. Short and to the point
Glad it helped!
Dude, thank you. I'm going to watch this a hundred times haha. Easiest sub of my life.
Hahah thanks!
@@WriterBrandonMcNulty no thank you!
This is some solid advice :) Thank you! Its already punching up my writing :)
I'm not a writer but I find your videos fascinating!
Thrilled to hear it! Thanks for watching!
@@WriterBrandonMcNulty You are extremely clear and your examples are excellent. When I was in University writing science papers, I soon realized just how many unnecessary words we use that add nothing other than to make it less concise, redundant, and longer. I'm intrigued with how story writers land up doing the same thing. When I was in English class, 'said' was considered 'boring' or 'lazy' and we were encouraged to use other more descriptive words and change them up. For example, "replied John" might be used first followed by something else next time John says something ("he responded."). What you say in this video makes total sense and I appreciate your insight!
Replied carries a different meaning than answered. Paraphrasing Straczynski here: "Every answer is a reply, but not every reply is an answer." Someone avoiding a question is not answering it, so don't write "answered".
Thank you so much for this. I went from 256 uses of that to 110 in my current work in progress. This video is so helpful.
Thank you for this helpful video!
What an excellent list. Thank you so much.
Thanks for watching!
These principles apply to fiction, nonfiction, even documentary films and books. Excellent list with a rich range of examples. Thanks.
Good word check list for the editing process, especially for a beginning writer. Write the story out as it comes to you. Then, at the end of your session, check for each of these words, and see if you can replace the word or rework the sentence to exclude the elementary words where possible. And then the more you write and use the word list, I'm sure you'll eventually remember the word list as you go and avoid them to make less work on the editing side. Excellent video.
Thanks a ton for making such valuable content. Sending Love!
Thanks for watching!
This was a very helpful video! I look forward to trimming the fat on my writing using these tips! 👍
You just said something that ABSOLUTELY BLEW MY MIND!!! OMG I NEVER THOUGHT OF OT THIS WAY. This is not about writing, this is life changing! Why do some people sound disingenuous? Why does talking with them feel like talking with a detached, emotionless doll? Why do people who laugh too much and too easily seem untrustworthy? Because they don’t fucking laugh. They don’t pretend to laugh. They just say “ha ha”. Who does that other than a calculating maniac who thinks he’s really fooling you with that? This says so much about them, that they don’t differentiate between laughter and saying “ha ha”. I don’t think I can see the world the same way now. There are polite people who just want to be on their way, or ones who laugh uncomfortably. But y’all know exactly what I’m talking about when I mean calculating maniacs who think they are fooling everyone with their feigned amusement “ha ha”. It’s that extra layer on top. Not just that they are clearly not actually laughing, and then that they are pretending, but they are imitating like a parrot who imitates human speech but has no understanding of it. Like the Chinese room.
I don't think I've ever heard someone use the word just more times at once than when you were talking about not using it
This is your best video yet as it's great advice for all types of writing. I do a lot of formal and technical writing and I often advise people to lose superfluous words like "I think" to start a sentence; if you're writing it, it's obvious that's what you think.
Personally, I think that using "I think" helps to separate facts from opinions.
@@me-myself-i787 if you're writing fiction it doesn't matter. If you're writing non-fiction it shouldn't be opinion unless it's a direct quote. Either way it's superfluous to write "I think" (and "personally", for that matter).
@@me-myself-i787 I've always used it that way, but have recently discovered most don't differentiate between a think versus know assertion, so have been working harder to present possible insights (versus what seem to me an unquestionable conclusion) as the probing thought stage they are. Both speech & writing, forces more thinking.
This is great advice. Thank you.
Earlier today, I finished the first chapter of a book I am working on. This video has been in my queue for a while, so I wanted to see how it compared to my writing. In this first chapter, there was 3 verys(2 well placed, 1 I then removed) and 1 really(used in dialog, did not remove). I was quite happy with myself... until I checked on just and that. 15 and 44. Got it down to 4 and 26. Thank you for this grounded advice!
yo idk if you read comments but your videos are interesting and helpful! I've always wanted to start writing, just for fun, but despite being fluent in 2 languages I have no confidence in delivering adequate prose. I will keep your tips in mind when I finally start writing (once I've handed in my master's thesis 💀)
Love this channel!!!!
Great tip, thank you!
I enjoy this. I too am aware of word usage, often to the point of annoyance.
I think 'seems' can be fine if it's in dialogue that fits the situation, or character.
"What's it like outside?"
"It seems quiet"
It gives the image of a quick look without the need to describe every aspect, and also leaves a little suspense because it's not saying it definitely is quiet.
"car".. this is a good point... i'd include "shirt" and "house"-- maybe not fully getting rid of any of these words, but when you say we're missing an opportunity for some character building, you make a good point.
This was so freaking helpful...thank you
"So" is a word that I have to intentionally get rid of in my own writing. I don't know if it's one that other people overuse but I definitely do!
Love these videos and respect the cutting down on filler.
Nice to see a male writing advice vid. The girls are great, and I've watched many but you always get the feeling that they are very female author focused.
Quite a lot of the advice is generic to all writers but when you review the books they've written, they tend to be teenage girl romances, disguised as something else.
If you ( or anyone else) can suggest other male writers worth spending time watching, then would love to see them.
Sanderson excepted - I've watched most of his.
Great work - thanks.
Thanks for the kind words! And if you want great video essays on storytelling, check out The Closer Look or Lessons from the Screenplay. If you want vlog-style videos like mine, Tyler Mowery does some of those (although he does many video essays as well).
I think dudes tend to gravitate toward video essays. To be honest I'd love to do some more video essays like my Mandalorian video on writing antiheroes, but they are VERY time consuming. You have to write a script, gather film footage, overlay the footage over the audio, etc. On the other hand, with a vlog I can mark down a few points, speak my mind on camera, then edit things down.
I try to do a video every Thursday, so vlogging works better for me.
I'd recommend Terrible Writing Advice. He uses animations with a lot of humor and satire to give advice to various topics he wants to talk about, including novels, movies, video games, DnD campaigns, and even arguing in SocMed. XD
Also, a big plus for him is the ad section of his videos with various villain archetypes and an overarching story about them. :D
Sounds good
"the girls are great." Maybe you should start watching videos by women; you might find them challenging but at least you won't write teenage boy wish fulfillment fantasies, disguised as something else...
@@kiwilerner I understand what you are saying. I did try many female authors advice videos as they were the predominant ones available. So maybe 150-200 videos spread across a dozen female authors/editors.
I disagree with the 'wish fulfillment' sentiment as that's what books are. The desire to escape and immerse yourself in an other worldly environment.
Girls like this too ie: "she discovered her powers on her 16th birthday..."
Useful video. A thought about dialog tags. I often get confused reading movels because the authors, using only "said", noticed that it became repetitive and so left out lots of them. After a page or so of no tags, I find I have to go back counting odd/even dialogs to work out who's saying what. In my own novel, I also found too many "he said"s going on, but I solved it differently.
Instead of leaving it out, I changed it to description. So, instead of
"You really think so?" John said.
I might write
John smirked knowingly. "You really think so?"
Action beats. It's good for deep third or first person.
Great video! Thanks!
Thanks for watching!
I am just going write my first book. This video is big help.
I think another great exercise is to read through your writing, or use word processing to look for repetitive descriptors. Words like 'terrific' or 'awesome'. Anyone who has read 'Twilight' or 'Catcher in the Rye' might know what I mean.
It might also help to write down key descriptive information about all your characters, try and do this by scene and connect them as best as you can. Giving a character Blonde hair and Green eyes in chapter one and then referring to their raven-black tresses and smoldering eyes the color of a stormy sky on chapter 10 will really confuse your reader.
Information you give to your reader should be for a purpose. That information shouldn't change unless your purpose has, or your characters change it.
I do not write at all except for emails and short posts like this one - to me, it looks like it is all about logic - one of the examples of "how to avoid 'that'" is quite illogical - in terms of syntax it is a mix of a dangling clause and a confused pronoun reference.
What is "Twilight"?
@@brankobulovic167 Sparkly vampire stalks teen in Portland, also werewolves.
@@danlewis7707YOU ARE FAKE NEWS!
... it was Washington, not Oregon lol
It gives me great satisfaction to see Catcher in the Rye compared to Twilight. What an overrated, overwritten piece of garbage.
Great video overall. Just really very helpful.
I've gotten conflicting advice from other writers on a few things, & I'd love to know what others think.
1) I'd been taught NOT to overuse "said," basically the exact opposite advice Personally, I find a bunch of dialogue lines using "said" annoying, but would consider changing if I'm in the major minority. In my own writing, I like to avoid normal dialogue tags whenever possible, instead using an action by the speaking character ("ran his hands through his hair," "leaned forward," etc.) to break up & tag dialogue. Thoughts?
2) I had also been taught that outside of dialogue, you do not use contractions (I have stuck to this, although I personally would rather use contractions in many instances)
Would love to get additional insight on those specific ones!
Very helpful. Thank you. I think, that was just the thing, that I seemed to miss in my writing. I meant: Great advice. Thanks. I missed this in my writing.
I recently edited a novel for a friend. I was making comments with notes and realized after 15 pages I had told him to eliminate the word "that" over 40 times! I did a search and found over a 1,500 "that"s in a 400-page novel.
thank you for this observation
This was very, or even extremely, helpful. Suddenly, I just knew that this was really just what I needed. When I told my son about it, he just replied that it seemed nice but that it was just a big effort. He first heard about this while just driving around in his big car but at the time just had not found it to be very important. He was hearing a radio program that was just about guns, but he felt that something about this just smelled funny. And a really big problem at that time was that he could not bring himself to go very fast because one bug after another had splattered on his windshield. Haha!
That was just really very interesting!
your content is pure gold for me. Although as a copywriter we follow different principals. I only think the word suddenly shouldn't be in this category though.
I'm thrilled that many of these were things I independently picked up through both observation of my reading flow of others' works as well as introspection of my own. I have a rule when writing that if the narration includes an adverb, like many of the examples here, the sentence gets examined for any methods to strengthen it. So far, I've not found one that retained the adverb after such a scrutiny.
you are really nice, very big help with making that video
Just very well done. Really