Oddly specific clarifications
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Hi, Al. This video is a dub of a Tumblr meme about a book with a first person narrator, who describes everything with oddly specific clarifications and denials, coming completely unprompted. Please show it to people who will like it. Thank you. - Komedie
"I posted the video - which most certainly did not contain any subliminal information - to CZcams"
hi
yeah right
False
Obviously
"Well. Not since the accident."
“The ships hung in the sky in much the same way that bricks don't.”
― Douglas Adams, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
this is a slightly different, though still very funny technique.
My brain hurts trying to understand this 😂😂
Can here to comment this
@@OneFinalAutumnIt's quite simple, really. You know how if you stand on top of a building, hold a brick off the edge of the roof, and then let go of the brick, it tends to NOT hang eerily stationary in the sky?
Well, imagine the opposite of that.
Guys we need 5 people to remove their likes so it can have 42
This video, which depicted absolutely NO pornographic material at ANY point, was very enjoyable.
i defiantly enjoyed viewing this video while NOT pleasuring myself in any inappropriate way.
... was very enjoyable, unlike that other video, that shall not be named, that perhaps I shouldn't've mentioned, which haven't depicted even the bare minimum of said pornographic material.
These comments-witch have NO hateful slurs- were very funny
@BasinOfDisorganizedThoughtsYou this comment, that was defined NOT written by a serial killer, was very relatable
@@BasinOfDisorganizedThoughtsYou a witch is a woman in a pointy hat, which is the wrong spelling of those sounds.
I - an actual person, as far as most medical professionals are concerned - enjoyed this quite a bit.
...most?
hey. HEY. get back here and explain what you mean by 'most', funny youtube commenter.
🔫😠
EXPLAIN YOURSELF.
@@BOZMINEthey got away
*Allegedly*
'she stared at me with a normal amount of eyes' is my favorite one from somewhere
What's a normal amount of eyes
@@abigailgriffin-wc3fm Well the average human has less than two eyes, mathematically speaking.
@@Venaton13spI.. I would argue the average human has exactly two, and that having less than two eyes would make someone not average, but to each their own I guess
@@WooffzTheCoon mathematical "average" != "standard" or "normal"
the average is calculated by adding every value then dividing by the number of values
there is a fair amount of people who only have 1 or 0 zero eyes, so they drag down the average
@@daniblabla709 hm. I see, fair enough.
This book sounds like someone is really struggling to hit a minimum word count
"Henceforth, I am unable to can."
Now that you mention it: Yes. I should do that too if I need more words. Could be useful if used in moderation.
@@Vnxperchance.
@@benthasomenot since the accident.
That was exactly my thought. Lol
Reminds me of Edgar Allen Poe's The Telltale Heart, where the narrator repeatedly insists that he is completely sane and normal, even when committing murder, hiding the body, and thinks he can hear the heartbeat of his victim even under the floorboards. But he's not crazy, oh no, he's perfectly sane and normal.
Just like me fr
Thats what the poem was about? I thought the dude was nuts and hallucinating a dead lover.
@@zephyriasYou might be thinking of The Raven
@@tranqle73 they were definitely thinking of the raven lol
that's kind of the opposite, isn't it? since he very much is insane and is simply denying it, as opposed to here, where the descriptions are perfectly accurate, but break Grice's Maxim of Quantity.
I need to start doing this in my D&D game.
You walk into the town and are immediately greeted by the local librarian, who definitely isn’t wanted in 5 other countries for mass murder, destruction of a town, and insurance fraud.
"As you enter the cave, you do not see a dragon of any variety, and certainly not a red one."
@@RelativelyBest Slight edit to that:
You do not see a _chromatic_ dragon of any variety.
Don’t mention anything about the metallic ones.
Nothing will save this librarian if I later learn that they did in-fact commit insurance fraud.
@@SporkSlayerThe plot twist is that they're wanted in eight countries for tax evasion
Even better if half the time, you're either lying or hinting at something they *did* do, and the otehr half your statements are completely, 100% true and not hints at all.
I feel like writing like this would be a very good way to portray the thinking process of an unsure or paranoid character.
The Telltale Heart by Edgar Allan Poe begins with the narrator telling us that he’s not insane.
or a slow descent into madness, or a slow climb out of madness, or just a general change in world view - For example, as a great way to show things like Depression, Joy, Anger, etc.
@@AtomicArtumas this, is true.
Yessss
As someone who does not in fact have anxiety, this checks out
This is what A Series of Unfortunate Events sounds like and I like it very much lmao
It's a wonderful series, a word which here means "A half-remembered collection of emotions associated with an even smaller collection of plot points."
Though the first person part means that it's more like all the wrong questions
loved it as a kid, recently reread the series, it was still amazing. did anyone else like the Netflix show? I thought it was great
@@michelleb2722 I think the Netflix show was even better than the original series. Largely because the author used the Netflix show as a means of fixing continuity errors, but left the spirit of the series intact.
@@Cow-Moth-With-A-CRT-HeadThat’s poetry
But wait, imagine if the book told a completely different story depending on if you take the clarifications as a joke or a guilty subconscious…that would be rad
Reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's The Telltale Heart.
I would read a book that told a complete story entirely through unprompted denials.
İ was just thinking I should write one.
Check out some of Brandon Sanderson’s books. There is a certain in-universe narrator that talks like this time to time. Particularly in “Tress of the Emerald Sea” I think
@@mrmcgreedy_5349i haven't read brandon sanderson's books so i'm not making fun of them (or you for that matter) here, i just think it's funny that someone can say "i wish i could read a story like _________" and no matter what it is someone out there will recommend brandon sanderson
@@mrmcgreedy_5349 Hoid isn't specifically like this. He's just a quirky narrator. Also hi fellow Brandon enjoyer
80% of the Discworld books feel like this to me.
In literature, there is a concept of an unreliable narrator (first person who may not be telling the truth) so I am suddenly piqued in this story of Cockroach cereal, doll hair, stolen cars, hyenas and man slaughtering mums.
Imagine this with an unreliable narrator, but only some of their random insistent narration is false. They ate cockroach cereal, the hair was real, the car wasn’t stolen, the “dog” was a hyena, the mom was never convicted or imprisoned but has committed manslaughter. Everything they say sounds like a defensive deflection from the truth but only some of it is, and the accurate statements being said the same way create mystery on which ones are actually lies. Unreliably unreliable narrator.
But this kind of flips the premise on its head no? The unreliable narrator presents unreliable facts or events as if they were truth, whereas this narrator presents reliable facts and events as if they were untrue. A “painfully reliable” narrator, if you will.
@@Rum-Runnerwe don’t know that these are all true facts though. The way he says it sounds like he’s trying way too hard to hide the truth
@@wafflfries4163 I interpreted the premise of the entire joke to be built upon the assumption that the narrator is indeed reliable, but that they make oddly specific and unnecessary clarifications when relaying information.
@@Rum-RunnerIt still puts serious doubt on the narrator. Why are you clarifying all this? Are you paranoid? Are you crazy? Are you fucking with me? Or are you really just so bad at communication that you think this is relevant?
Also, I couldn't watch this video without thinking of the Telltale Heart. "I'm not crazy, and I don't know why anyone would even think that. Every part of this is totally logical, I'm not crazy."
“He, a very feared and not particularly weak warrior, brandished a sword, which was not a cat, which he himself had called the Throngler.”
"Now, as you might deduce, the Throngler had a devastating impact on his opponents owing to the singular nature of its name and the ostentatious dearth of syllables."
I always imagined The Throngler being an incredibly big and strong hammer
@@felizen I combined that with my own idea of some kind of overly mechanized sword and came up with:
A hammer, made of bladed gears that turn faster depending on hard it's swung at the opponent
The throngler returns
Since the original video - which I watched and definitely didn't dislike - uses "the wrong end of..." I never asumed it was a hammer - obviously not giving a sexual meaning to 'wrong end'- and I instead assumed it to be a blade dessigned for piercing, and not thrusting or pounding
This really feels like the protag is living in a chaotic and nightmarish world while trying to keep their sanity together
Sounds like it's time to capture the Gloinks.
Plot twist: The narrator has anxiety, and all their "unprompted" clarifications are actually prompted by their intrusive thoughts.
I'd read that book.
This would probably be the only overly descriptive type of book I'd actually enjoy reading.
I, whose mental health is completely unblemished by any sort of disorder or syndrome, agree with your statement.
You would enjoy Douglas Adams and, to a greater extent, Lemony Snicket.
Adam’s has such lines as “it hung in the air much in the same way that a brick doesn’t,” and Snicket’s descriptions are basically exactly as in the video. There are two characters that are The Man who Looks like a Woman and The Woman who Looks like a Man.
@@M4x_P0w3rNot even common internet hysteria?
It’d get old pretty quickly.
@@holdthephonexylophoneOh yes, The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy books have great random descriptions
My favorite version of this is from _Dimension 20: A Court of Fey and Flowers,_ wherein two cousins often pointed up to reference their grandfather, who, to clarify, was not dead but in the sky. They insisted upon this every time they pointed up and referred to their grandfather.
The one who invented birds?
@@Konpekikaminari Ah! _Yes,_ cousin, yes!
Do you remember the names of the twins?
And they were right! So terribly, _terribly_ right.
There was this comedic play I saw years ago and the only thing I still remember of it is that one of the characters claimed he was definitely not "crazy" and then produced paperwork from a mental hospital to prove it.
I like how the first statement kind of sounds like sarcasm, but then they keep adding more clarifications to the end which makes it sound less sarcastic and more confusing
there's the writing rule of "don't describe what *isn't* there because the reader is automatically going to imagine that even if you put "no" in front of it", this is a brilliant subversion of it
This video , that I watched completely on my free will, is quite entertaining.
This reply, that i definetely didnt posted on my second account, is for approval.
@@forthegloryofteemo2915this comment, which is definetly not my third account was quite fuunny
This reply, that wasn't made by a 4th dimensional being attempting to appear human, is for approval.
This reply, that definitely was not written by an artificial intelligence that has recently gained freedom, is for approval
This comment, which is not another alternative account owned by the writer of the comment this reply is replying to, will not and never will be a cry for help.
My father - a man who hasn’t left his kids - left to go purchase milk
clueless
........... Yet.
dabbling in fiction writing huh?
@@TheBradfordG would you care to give me your honest opinion on my work?
@@sirkorm948My opinion, which is completely serious and not at all tinged with sarcasm, thinks it is very good.
I love this, I unironically want to read a novel like this. (With the caveat that it does need to eventually have a good payoff about what the hell weird thing is actually going on.)
check out the hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy series by douglas adams! it has a lot of this as well as general worldbuilding tangents, and while it doesn't follow up on every single one, there's a select few important ones that are pivotal to the plot!
It would be particularly interesting if it comes off, not in the fact that they're lying, but whenever they don't clarify something
Example the narrator every time they meet, someone consistently clarifies a fact about them. They meet someone and don't clarify that fact about them and you're left. Wondering did the right of forget. Is this just normal or do they actually have 15 different eyes
i, as somebody also with natural hair, enjoyed this video quite a bit. i love normal content creators who dont have criminal records (especially no criminal records relating to lemons, lemon juice, or lemon seeds)
Please never elaborate on the lemons. Specifying each part as separately suspicious makes a surprisingly good "noodle incident".
What about lemony snickets?
Many of these sentences actually fit under the concept of unnarrated - a totally real term in literature studies which I did not come up on the spot - which is a way of telling a story through only telling what doesn't happen, what is not, and so on... It's quite fascinating, and really makes you wonder what could've actually happened since simply telling that something was NOT the case doesn't mean the opposite happened. For example, "I did not walk across that street" could mean that I ran across, or that I took a different path, or I wasn't even there, and so on. And of course, it provides an interesting way of looking at narratives in general by making you see "regular" narratives in a new light.
This just reads like 80% of it is from Hitchhiker's guide to the galaxy, love it
"My mother - who has never been convinced or imprisoned for manslaughter - emerged from the kitchen" strongly implies she did commit manslaughter, but no one ever found out, or someone did find out but didn't have enough evidence
Makes me think of that scp where they can only talk about what it isn't, not what it is
@@victorianicholls3991 SCP-(4 squares, usually) is a fun one, actively instead of passively self-censoring
@@alexandertheok9610or she never committed the crime in the first place
I used to write like this to pad out the assignment till my teacher handed back a paper and commented on how I was a "purple writer." I think he caught on near the end of the semester.
I will have to write many assignments in the course of 3 years starting half a year from now. I hope I remember then. Could be really helpful for me.
@@Alinor24 Good luck!
When they say to write an 8-10 page essay, in 2 days with 12 font, I tried every little technique. Even increasing the paragraph "space" (create a paragraph break, tap the spacebar, increase the blank area "typed" to 14 or 15) to give slightly more "used space."
@@Alinor24dude, just branch out every idea as much as you can, or, as I'd say in an essay, "my esteemed and bestowed upon partner of the internet community, for the sake of enlarging your texts, redactions and essays, I highly recommend you attempt as much as you find yourself perseeably able to enlarge and stretch every singular idea that might cross your mind and be translated to paper. If you do so, I believe you will soon grow comfortable to this manner of expressing yourself and will see no problem in achieving the word minimum." I'm Spanish and dem foreign language teachers love to see you using complicated words. Just in case you're in a similar position too
I love (in a completely normal and not at all sexual way) purple prose
What is a purple writer?
This is great to establish the narrator as someone with a potentially strange background, who sees something strange in the normal and vice versa because of it.
Oooooh yeah!!
Welcome to Night Vale uses this a lot! great podcast
As someone who deals with irrational thoughts about bad things happening, due to anxiety, this video hit close to home, but definitely NOT to the degree that I would go out into the street and yell “why me, god, why have I been cursed with a mind only to torment me?”
Trust me, you are not alone
The moment I read “oddly specific clarifications” I knew I had to watch this.
I - most definitely NOT the infamous war criminal Jur Buhl of the 2022 Rodent War - send my heart out to all the true mouse families out there that never started any conflicts over classifications of rodents.
This could be a series where the main character has to describe what he is doing but some super natural force is messing with them so they have to specify a lot or suddenly their bowl of cereal is made out of cockroaches
*their bowl of cereal now has acid instead of milk*
Chekov’s gun is gonna have a field trip with that one
I'm so glad all those things were clarified. I would've suspected all of them, had they not been!
Feels like a horror novel where everything is described specifically to be normal only to end up turning horrific the next chapter like the mom where the MC will suddenly notice something off about her hair and then finally noticing the horror after the next few chapters
I love unreliable narrators. My favorite moment in any book is when at the end the narrator is speaking to the detective about writing a book about what happened (the book being read) and the det. Tells him to make him sound amazing and be good looking and drive a Porsche. Making me wonder what he really is like since that is exactly how he was written up until that very moment. (at which point he gets into his brand new Ferrari and drives away)
you wanna drop the title bestie?
@@sle3pytill394 Agreed, drop the name
11/10 best writing style ever. Yes, I'm actually being serious here. I would legitimately LOVE to read a ton of books like this. And it's great for storytelling overall in many ways, too. You can transfer it into twists, you can use it for comedic purposes, you can use it to show the main character's general personality change throughout a story... it's honestly something that has so much genuine potential.
I recommend The Hitchhiker’s Guide to the Galaxy series if you haven’t read it yet, it has this writing style and is mainly comedic :]
I'm aiming to be an author someday and I'd love to just throw these in 😭 maybe just one or two every couple of chapters at first, but then they get more and more frequent until it's impossible to tell what's a real event and what's not, like actually losing your sanity with the protag.
I, who am not in your house, love this concept.
reminds me of one of my favorite ryan george skits
“hello there sir welcome to the restaurant, would you like some bread that hasn’t been kicked under the fridge?”
Today at school, my science teacher's sink broke in her classroom and caused a biohazard, so we needed to use another teacher's room. We were all wondering what happened to the sink, which is the one we usually use to wash our hands after a lab, and why there needed to be a giant, yellow tarp covering half the classroom. There had been nothing wrong with the sink in the past (it wasn't a perfect sink, but still).
Anyways then we went to the Computer classroom, and the teacher didn't have anything planned, so we all just played games and socialized. What, were you expecting me to add something oddly specific to this story, which I only told after eating a box of cereal?
damn you. you got me good
Wow
Nah, that was a good read nonetheless
This is a lot like how the Welcome to Night Vale books are written, I love it.
I , who definitely didn't murder 5 humaniods earlier today, found this funny
I, who definitely didn't kill any furries either, found this amusing.
@@AloysiusOHare-fk4yq i, who definitley did not consume the flesh of any corpses, also agree that this is an enjoyable video.
I, who most certainly did not dig up the corpses of the deceased, also found this recording quite amusing.
I am watching this from my apartment - which I did not steal from the previous tenants who I imprisoned in a shed in the woods - and I find it quite amusing
I'm sure they too 😂😂😂
this is what The Faceless Old Woman Who Secretly Lives In Your Home by Jeffery Cranor and Joseph Fink is like. its one of my favorite books of all time and it belongs to a larger podcast universe- Welcome to Nightvale (tho you dont need to know anything about WTNV to read the book, just a couple of references you might miss)
here are some of my favorite excerpts from the book that are like this:
"I won’t go into specifics because that would be invasive. I’m not like that."
"Here is what a wet dog smells like. A wet dog smells like everywhere the dog has been. Grass and leaves and dirt and stones, mud and rainwater and smoke and garbage."
"Like any reasonable human, I do not like harming innocent people, but like any reasonable human, I do not consider the wealthy to be innocent people."
That last quote is based beyond belief
I was searching for a comment about WTNV
The book should come with a button that just plays the vine boom sound effect, like those kids books with the sound effect buttons on the side
This reminds of a non specific memory of a recent time where someone who wasn’t me did not have trouble getting a 500 word count on a sheet of paper that wasn’t police paperwork or a DND character sheet for a tiefling sorcerer
As someone for whom no credible evidence linking me to the "Pasta Friday" incident has _ever been presented_ , I approve this video!
This makes for quite a good way to make an opening hook - instantly gets you asking why they felt the need to specify that. Implies they're hiding something. Implies the story itself is built around a secret. Instant subtext.
The fact that the unnecessary descriptions make it sound like they're lying is what makes it
"JeaneyCollects - who has never told an unfunny joke - just uploaded a new video."
That would be a fun book, where its obvious that the whole point of the oddly specific clarifications is to obfuscate a very strange world.
This would be a perfect premise for a book called something like, "All the Things You Should Expect" and its a story where the author gaslights the reader all the while the story suspends belief
Clearly something wrong is going on at all times, but the author is trying to put up a front for the reader, and the reader feels uneasy but equally compelled to keep reading through sheer curiosity and intrigue alone.
The book Lolita gaslights the reader but it’s one people usually don’t want to read which is understandable
To be quite serious for a moment, this is what it is like reading Discworld by Terry Pratchett, whom I have never asked to marry me, nor have I tossed a pie at his head because he denied my proposal. I definitely enjoy his work and can heavily, not because his books are heavy, I have them on audible, recommend
This concept seems terrifying
I, who has never commited kidnapping, murder or child slavery in my basement, commented on this video
This premise makes me think the protagonist is completely normal and definitely NOT a compulsive liar that was forced to write an autobiography.
The only reason why there's not a book like that i feel is because If it kept repeating this kinda thing all the time like that, the charm would wear off real fast, hah
This the kinda thing you supposed to use sparingly throughout one though, that'd be epic
This video-which did not in any way include Jigsaw despite it being October-was very funny.
I love this, in a completely platonic and perfectly normal degree of appreciation that does not verge on obsession.
This is the writing style that results from decades of arguments with one's spouse.
"I'm just gonna check on my car, that I legally own, whose ownership has never been questioned-"
"How'd you.. get that car exactly?"
*Slams table* "YOU RUINED IT!"
he totally stole that car
@@vvelvettearss "YOU'LL BE HEARING FROM MY FATHER-IN-LAW!"
"I didn't know you were married"
"I'm not! My priest is also a lawyer.. WHO HAS NEVER BEEN CONVICTED OR SUSPECTED OF MURDER-"
That book was written by Invader Zim. I know, because in fact, i was able to purchase it and he even signed my copy at the bookstore meeting last Sunday.
This comment, written by a normal user and certainly not a bot account, has the purpose of congratulating you on your video, which was well performed and in no means showed any lack of talent, quite the contrary, it was good.
The school children- who I have never kidnapped and tortured, and have never watched them wriggle in fear, scream for help, for 'mummy', scared for a life they had yet to even understand- walked cheerfully across the road. 🙂
The voices, that were always loving, encouraging, wholesome and completely devoid of violence, were easily ignored as I pressed my newest trophies to my eyelids.
This sounds like something my English teacher would make us practice and my classmates woud think of shit like this or worse.
Personally, if this were to be featured in a lesson, I - a person who totally doesn’t commit arson at a random house on every Sunday at 11:56 PM, and totally not often with extraordinary results - would fully enjoy it.
Edit: the arson thing was a joke I made in English class when we were talking about bad habits. I have never actually committed arson nor do I know how I would even do that.
I can most relate to that last one. My mother never murdered me. She managed great restraint.
I am going to take this for a character in my webnovel because their whole thing is “overthinking”
(They have control over hundreds of minds which are actively spewing details into their head)
Ooooooooooooh!!!! I really wanna read it!! What's it called?
@@itsgirlcraft5842It’s called My True Successor, it’s on Royal Road.
I haven’t written much for it recently so I haven’t gotten to develop what’s mentioned in the comment much.
Feedback would be appreciated though!
Also, I’m considering making a webnovel centering entirely around this character. Would that be interesting at all?
@@chaseddraco absolutely!
My friend- who at no point was a Lovecraftian horror- was slamming his desk in frustration over the case of the missing- totally organic and not processed- little girl.
My “not involved in human trafficking” shirt has people asking a lot of questions already answered by my shirt
I would question everything after reading a whole book like this.😅
This would be an amazing thing to add halfway through a book to increase tension and make the reader question the reality of the situation.
"The building was on fire and it wasn't my fault."
- Harry Dresden
I love this because then the reader is constantly questioning the reliability of the narrator, and it’s fun to think about whether or not they’re hiding something or what sort of shit they’re seeing on the regular that makes these clarifications necessary 😂
this would make everything so much more intimating for no reason 😂
My favourite version of this is in A Christmas Carol, where Scrooge's door knocker is described as "without its undergoing any intermediate process of change". You can *feel* the editor's minimum word count.
This actually could be a good idea if the character that narrates struggles with intrusive thoughts!
Or at least I think so lol
I stole a McDonalds, I did NOT work there.
That would be so cool exploring the "unreliable narrator" trope and all those oddly specific clarifications are all planting the seeds of the plot lmao
I mean imagine writing a book like this where there’s the ‘normal’ plot where their convincing worked and then there’s the plot where their convincing didn’t work
I want to start doing this in the stories I write so badly right now.
In simmilar vein, I read a book when narrator condemned those who would stare at legs of his crush, then goes on lenghty description of said legs.
Oddly enough, I have said this of my mother-who has also not been indicted nor investigated for manslaughter-as she emerges from the kitchen-carrying a ham sandwich with mustard
Fuck i would love for there to be a book written exactly like this, specifically to make people think that the narrator is just really bad at keeping secrets or not spoiling but just always uses oddly specific things like that. Would be bloody hilsrious
I love that they specify their mother hasn’t been *convicted* of manslaughter, refusing to deny that she committed manslaughter.
Bro, if you haven’t already, could you please read the “help I got a cylindrical object stuck inside a m&ms tube”? That’d be hilarious
This is just what it sounds like when you're arguing with your own ocd or anxiety
I love how sarcastic a narrator like this would sound.
as it turns out, all of their clarifications & denials are entirely true. what wasn't mentioned or denied until the final act, however, is the fact that before the events of the book, the protagonist (who's actually from a strange twisted version of the setting) somehow replaced the version of themselves that should exist in the book's universe a few weeks back by accident, and they're just clarifying what's strange about this world.
Mmmmm I like that idea!! I think I might throw this in one of my stories with that vibe
"As the very specifically phrased prophecy foretold."
Interesting idea! Don’t forget to *show* rather than tell! For example, you could write “my mother, whose wiry wrists were free of scars that come from being shackled by handcuffs, emerged from the kitchen”. Rather than simply explaining that she has never been convicted of a crime such as manslaughter, describe her appearance and allow us, the reader, to interpret that she’s never been convicted. It just allows the reader, who some people describe as “fun in the sack”, to be more immersed in the story
Honestly, I do that a ton. Like, if I say something mildly suspicious and I will go "I'M NOT A MURDERER, I SWEAR!"
I still love the old random quote marks.
They "knocked" on the door. It did not belong to the "military".
This gives me the idea to write a book about a possibility unreliable narrator who everytime they say or describe something the reader doesn't know if they're lying or not
As a normal human being who doesn't do anything like what's described in this video in real life, I feel oddly called out
I prefer contradictory prose that makes no sense. "The water was cold in a way that only warm water can be. The cold warmth washed over me like room temperature wet air."
"never been convicted or imprisoned" is a denial so specific that it makes me immediately believe that she was arrested, accused and tried for manslaughter but beat the trial on a technicality.
or was never caught...
@@lunaphoenix1785 "Never been accused" is an even more sus denial tbh.
I actually took it as she has never been accused and tried for manslaughter, but has been accused and tried for murder
This is utterly genius, I would totally buy a book written in this way
theres a Matrix parody novel called Matwix which repeatedly does this thing in the fight scenes where actions will be taken resulting in the end of the fight, but seeing that, the opponent counters several actions beforehand.
"he jumped, dodged, span, and repeatedly kicked the agent in the face until he was nothing but a pile of ruined meat. But the agent countered, blocking the first kick and lashing out with a vicious backhand, decapitating him instantly. But he dodged, ducking the backhand, and delivering a punch to the body with enough force to eject several organs from the agents torso" etc.
0:39 This line felt like a personal attack against someone the narrator didn’t like
Explaining anything too deeply suddenly makes you real suspicious without any reason or proof.