Here are some tips for storytelling: make sure your dialogue isn’t bland, the dialogue is supposed to tell the story, you want feeling and emotion. Also, provide more information on the characters. Why does Davin like Jasmine? How did Davin and Jasmine become friends? How did Oscar and Jasmine meet? The characters also need their own distinct personalities. Is Davin flirty and funny? Is Jasmine sweet and naive? Is Oscar unfaithful and cunning? Personality makes the character who they are. Another thing I observed why watching this GLMM is that the characters kept switching viewpoints or personalities. Like Jasmine would get mad when Oscar would hang to other girls, criticize her clothes, and get defensive, yet she doesn’t do anything or care when he when he hangs around other girls. Does she care or does she not care? Oscar also does the same thing. He acts nice with Jasmine and wants to spend time with her on her last day but then he likes to cheat and criticize her. Does he like or not like her? Another thing I want to add is that when you’re making a love story, you want the audience to be enticed. You have to build up the 2 love interest’s relationship. I want to see them slowing falling for each other, or one slowly falling for the other. I want the cute scenes where they do cute things and start to blush. When 2 love interests kiss, I want to be excited! I want to say, “FINALLY! THEY GET TOGETHER!”. Take these tips in mind! ❤️
The title is funny! Imaging being pregnant and then when he or she is born your like- hey! Wanna be besties? The best part BABIES CANT SAY NO 😀 Edit: school sucks 😢 Edit: thanks for the likes I really appreciate it 😊
The fact that while she was buying her stuff and there was a couple behind the cashier and I was paying attention to them then they suddenly broke up- but I'm not really sure if it was a break up tho-
O. M. G. This is the mini movie that I looking for!! I'm trying to do mini movies to!! And I'm not wrong a lot of searching I finally found a super amazing mini movie!! I recommend this, u work hard for it and ur so creative u deserve more subscribers✨✨✨ and also I'm ur new subscriber! And ofc everyone will like it! Cause ur so amazing in editing! 💖
ur FIRSY vid... THIS IS AMAZING GIRLY I LUV IT! your editing is amazing i cant even do that! probly cuz i have a computer with alot of restrictions cuz of school but this is amazing!❤ edit: plus u have a NEW SUUUBBB!!!
OMG I have a brother named Davin and somehow all the girls like him yet he only wants to be friends with them 😂❤
Oh realyyy?? I have a best friend named Davin sooo!!
@@Th3GreenMeerkatOOP. Girly what if he sees this
It’s so good !
@@Crazyforliebe lolll 😂
Omg same
4:29 I loved how those two persons were fighting in the back, it just is a small detail that kinda adds a spark to the story❤
I love this comment❤
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me too@@chrisalexander7022
SAME LOL
They were fighting, no one there was Nosey unlike the people in my country
i love the part when she went to the store an bought flowers the couple or whatever they are is just so good detailed love it
Same
Here are some tips for storytelling: make sure your dialogue isn’t bland, the dialogue is supposed to tell the story, you want feeling and emotion. Also, provide more information on the characters. Why does Davin like Jasmine? How did Davin and Jasmine become friends? How did Oscar and Jasmine meet? The characters also need their own distinct personalities. Is Davin flirty and funny? Is Jasmine sweet and naive? Is Oscar unfaithful and cunning? Personality makes the character who they are. Another thing I observed why watching this GLMM is that the characters kept switching viewpoints or personalities. Like Jasmine would get mad when Oscar would hang to other girls, criticize her clothes, and get defensive, yet she doesn’t do anything or care when he when he hangs around other girls. Does she care or does she not care? Oscar also does the same thing. He acts nice with Jasmine and wants to spend time with her on her last day but then he likes to cheat and criticize her. Does he like or not like her? Another thing I want to add is that when you’re making a love story, you want the audience to be enticed. You have to build up the 2 love interest’s relationship. I want to see them slowing falling for each other, or one slowly falling for the other. I want the cute scenes where they do cute things and start to blush. When 2 love interests kiss, I want to be excited! I want to say, “FINALLY! THEY GET TOGETHER!”. Take these tips in mind! ❤️
Wow your good at writing tips
@@Mochi-xv4zn thanks 😊
Uh this was long
Bro made an essay good tip though 😁👍
@@maggiebubar3392 there was a lot of tips to go through 😅
reading the title I was like “wtf why is she pregnant with a teenage man how is she gonna get that out?”
4:07 I'm not even focusing on what they're saying I'm just watching to ppl in the back do their thing .-.
“How am i supposed to know if you don’t tell me anything about it?!” 5 minutes earlier: “im leaving for a work trip for 2-3 months”
“ waht a spicy night ” got me died 💀
( 14:20 )
When he Said ‘No wonder your mom left you’ i was like OH DAMNNN BURNN
Lolll
The title is funny! Imaging being pregnant and then when he or she is born your like- hey! Wanna be besties? The best part BABIES CANT SAY NO 😀
Edit: school sucks 😢
Edit: thanks for the likes I really appreciate it 😊
😎Im the baby and I say yahhhhh!
😂😂😂😂😂😂
They can't say yes either 🤣
👁️🫦👁️💀
Literally my first thought when I saw the title-
Was I the That notice that when she went the the flower shop THERE WERE A BREAK UP IN THE BACK ROUND😂
4:18 Dont worry its just people crying😂
This jasmine girl has so much love for plants that she literally put a sakura tree in her "room".
You can see it in 3:58
Lolll
She even has. Ambush and tree in there
the hell?!?
this is so underrated god dayum
also this was an amazing mini movie !well done!
ermm
@@crocgyudile3660 ?
can we just appreciate the work that she does for us??? we should get her to 9000k subs cuz broooo her editing is just too good to see
Never have i seen such a underated glmm
For your first gacha life movie I really enjoyed it I hope you make a another one all the mouth movement were great btw❤
GIRL YOU HAVE TALENT!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! YOU DEFINITELY EARNED A NEW SUBSCRIBER
Tyysmm !!!
4:32 people are crying while jasmine is in a good mood
Fr
4:27, i see that blue head crying 🥲
i love how when she goes to buy flowers they are breaking up in the bg 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
4:32 lol love the background always intristing
Not me watching the 2 ppl in the flower shop fighting :'D
This is so underrated to be ur first vid, I'm shocked
Tyy !!!!
lol the people having a argument in the background of the flower shop
Underated this is a amazing
Lol this vid is funny and when you say your so childish😂😂😂it got me dying😂😂😂
lol i liked when the people in the club were like wat a spicy night lol😶🤭
I love the fact that in back when she went to buy flowers there was bears up 😂
The fact that while she was buying her stuff and there was a couple behind the cashier and I was paying attention to them then they suddenly broke up- but I'm not really sure if it was a break up tho-
Well idk, it's also kind of for decoration, so I didn't pay much attention to what I really did
Lydia is so iconic 😂😂
THE THUMBNAIL IS AWESOME AND VIDEO! Idc if its old either
Im a new sub i love your videos ❤❤❤🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉
Keep up the good work!
❤️❤️🌟
You did amazing on your first vid I would do really bad on my first video lol please do a part 2 it seems great! Keep it up :)
Me seeing the name: 😱😱
this is so underrated as your first vid😮😮😮😮
Fr it is
𝔼𝕩𝕒𝕔𝕥𝕝𝕪
what
This is probably one of the best videos I've seen today!!
This is soo gud, I hope you keep going with this mind-blowing 🎥
4:30 the fight in the background is all I’m interested in
As ur first I'm very impressed of how detailed it is
Bro-😂 at 4:25 the girl in the back-I’m dying💀💀
Ty!!
"No wonder why your mom left u" got my cryingggg this is so funny!😂
i love how when jasmine went to the flower shop the people in the background was yelling at each other it was so funny
I really love this as your first video i love it so much ❤❤❤❤
i loved it!you should def start uploding more!you have great contnent!!! :) ^^ ^.^
I don’t believe this is your first vid it’s so good! And you got a new subbbb
Her boyfriend doesn’t treat her well enough 😢 8:03
this 1 vid already made my day
This is so good I love all of your videos I’m a big fan!!❤
5:11 the explosion 😩🤌🏻 Perfecto!!
Perfect story line! 😌👍👍👍👍👍👍
OML I LOVED THIS KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK❤
GURL THIS IS SOOOO GOOD. IM PRACTICING OVER MINI MOVIES IN YEARS AND I CANT DO SOMETHING AS BEAUTIFUL AS THIS. I’m definitely a new sub.
Awwww tyyy !!! And don't worry, I'm sure that your work is ✨ Amazing ✨
Awh tyyy!! ❤️
@@StxrlayOfficial you're welcome!!
@@Th3GreenMeerkatcan we have a part 3 rlly soon i hate watching them and not have the final part even tho im late 😭😭
Underated man deserves more likes
this was literally so good i will defo be watching ur vids from now onnn
Aww it’s so nice that the blue haired girl moved on😊 13:34
4:08 those couples breaking up in the back 💀
THIS IS AMAZING I LOVED IT💗 IM GONNA WATCH PT2 RN YOU DID AMAZING THIS IS SO INTERESTING 💞
I love it!
4:05 THE PEOPLE IN THE BACKGROUND HAVING THEIR OWN MOVIE LOLLL
✨️WhAt a SpIcY nIghT✨️😏😂
This was awesome!
We need a part two please, btw i love it❤
Girl you got talent 😍🎉
O. M. G. This is the mini movie that I looking for!! I'm trying to do mini movies to!! And I'm not wrong a lot of searching I finally found a super amazing mini movie!! I recommend this, u work hard for it and ur so creative u deserve more subscribers✨✨✨ and also I'm ur new subscriber! And ofc everyone will like it! Cause ur so amazing in editing! 💖
Tysmmm !!! 💕💞
@@Th3GreenMeerkat Np! Keep it up💞
Omg you just earned u a new sub good job love ur videos!
4:12 - 4:36
Not them back there having a fight😂
girl you are amazing 😘😘😘
Girl u got new subbb and i am already big fan of ur art and u ❤❤❤❤
this is a great first gif!
THIS IS UR FIRST TIME IT'S AMAZING
PLEASE MAKE A PART 2 WE NEED IT
new sub 🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩😍😍😍😍😍😍
the detail at 3:56 is amazing :D when the people in the bg were arguing
When Jasmine buys the flowers and there's a big breakup in the back 😂😂
Loved it ❤
ur FIRSY vid... THIS IS AMAZING GIRLY I LUV IT! your editing is amazing i cant even do that!
probly cuz i have a computer with alot of restrictions cuz of school but this is amazing!❤
edit: plus u have a NEW SUUUBBB!!!
Me just watching the drama at the back of the flower shop😂😂
Her: buying flowers
Me: focusing on the conversation in the background
4:23 nah the people in the background lol good vid btw
bro it’s been 4 years sense i seen a mini gacha life movie
6:14 GOT ME SAYING.. BE AGGRESSIVE B-E AGGRESSIVE.. B-E A-G-G-R-E-S-S-I-V-E
YA YOU DESERVED MORE VIEWERS❤
Underrated!❤
Thank youu 😊✨❤️
I'm a new subscriber now this was great!
Bro i was literally say HELL NAH HELL NAH BRO GOT HER A BABY at the end 😂
Okay but like 5:08-5:13 had me weak! 😭😭😭
Also great job with this mini movie! I can tell you put a lot of effort into it! You earned a new sub ❤️
I love the vid!
This was so interesting and it was funny lol
Amazing part 2
I LOVE THIS SMM
“What a spicy night” had me dying
really good
Hey there!! This is the fifths video I watching of you and i love so much!!! You really nice
Can we take a minute to appreciate the drama behinde the lady in the flower shop 😂❤love that 4:30
love this vid
wow this really good for ur first
Love you art queen 👸
That's soo cutee, thank youu ❤️✨
4:30 Me laughing not at jasmine but the two in the back just crying 😭😅
I LOVED HOW AT 4:23 THE PPL WERE FIGHTING
Yay I'm early! Btw these are good tiktoks! (2 hours ago)