I will never understand why people leave the doors unlocked until they decide to go to bed... Like... You didn't care all day but when you go to sleep, it somehow matters.
The door was locked she just put the extra safety chain on. Can't really have a chain lock on when you need to get in and out of your houose during the day. Plus her door was locked when she came home because she had to open it with a key. So the stranger must have broken in somewhere else other than the front door.
Filmmakers, please remember that most of your viewers can't see in the dark. I feel like I missed some scenes that are important to the plot. What happened at the end?
Great job! I can't believe you did all of this in just 9 hours and with 3 people! That's incredible. I like the prolonged suspenseful pacing. Nice cinematography too. Good job by the actress as well! She was likable and didn't oversell being scared or uncomfortable. I even liked the Christmas setting. Feels even more isolated. Make more movies!
Evan Parra FX I really appreciate your comment buddy! It was a brutal shoot only having 9 hours, but I am pleased overall with the outcome! I hope to make more movies soon and improve on my previous work 😁
I'm from India and I like such kinda short film I don't see any awful condition in this short film Although I like it cuz I like such kinda condition like alone, abroad home, nature etc 😄
Superb very well made,read a couple of post s below biang critical,on a couple of scenes,ignore,you know exactly what your doing and the Piace works,very scary,casting superb ,great actress,very vunrable,music outstandingly,editing perfect,the interesting thing,is,who's to say that intruder wasn't a ghost,a shadow person,possible,either way it frightening,.cheers for making,and with your next film you will hear, nominated vfor four academy in awards.
I've never imagined how in the Western culture that they leave their girls and women to live and run their lives on their own, We, the Muslims, never leave them alone. We're, the men, are responsible for them.
Don’t leave cords plugged into the outlet kids! It’s very dangerous, and a fire hazard!!!! And how does that guy walk right around her without her noticing!?
I watched a docu about real home intruders. One camera footage showed the house owners slept in front of TV showing ROBOT series. The dark figure (burglar) at the second floor balcony watching the tv downstairs. CREEPY.
First if I'm home alone l leave all the lights on! Second I loved it! Great suspence threw it all really loved the ending because you do t know what whats gonna happen! Great work! 😃😃😃😃😃
AWESOME AWESOME CLIMAX, 💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓 💓💓💓💓💓💓 ZACH SMITH, THIS MASTERPIECE IS " GHETTO FABULOUS STYLE PIMPIN WORK!!! 🫣🫣🫣🫣🫣🫣💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓😘😘😘😘😘😘😉😉😉😉😉😉 KEEP MAKING 🎥 EXACTLY ☝🏽& I'M SOO FOLLOWING U, ZACH, 🍯🍯🍯⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽🐐🐐🐐🐐🐐🐐
The first 3.5 minutes try too hard to be scary and as a result, they aren't. I'd start in the bathroom. Simple things, like removing the music and using natural sound as she walks up the house would help. It's scarier to talk into a dark house, then one full light. If we saw the snowman as she walked up to the port, they would be eerie.
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Jacob Lawrence Thank you so much! It was shot on the Blackmagic cinema camera 2.5k in 2.5k raw, with a Zeiss CP.2 25mm T2.1 and Rokinon 16mm T2.2 cinema lens!
Not bad at all! From a fellow filmmaker, I would just suggest going back and cutting your edits in a few places to pace it a little quicker. I was most saddened that it was open ended! Cool choice for the intruder, but otherwise, good work.
Gotta disagree! Too many horror shorts leave too little time between scares; this film's pace was slow enough that it let the suspense build, which really worked in the film's favor.
I imagine people will have different responses, but I liked that it was left open-ended. The protagonist usually has that point of realization--it's just a matter of when it will happen--and then the battle ensues. But leaving her completely vulnerable to the end really elevated the tension for me.
Most time we see in USA and other countries where single person or two persons stay in a single building but that things may not be possible for us I think that's why they can utilise their brains fully without disturbance and they do what they want when I see that I miss it in my study period and I request that girl can you make me your partner
TURN SOME DAMN LIGHTS ON GIRRRL.. I mean damn, I'd be more afraid of running into something! And Shower 🚿 Scene: Need be more realistic.. She hops out the shower dry as hell.
Why did she draw the curtains at the bath if she was sure of being alone. And while taking out the towel too she was careful enough to extend her hand out of curtains without drawing them apart as if someone was there. Perhaps the crew of the film were there! 🤣
Sono tutti uguali. Ma qual ' è il significato? Inconscio solitudine ? E quale ruolo viene.dato a quel.c . di.cellulare onnipresente in questi.filmettini ? 🙏
not bad, reminds me of my first short except yours is much darker in term of color wise and barely dialogues. shots great, and tips for musics (only in australia), if you're using CC free musics make sure to credit them. doesnt matter if you are profitting off it. Trust me, because you don't want licensing issues and yes free music has those.
Colossus Media czcams.com/channels/so1HZBvgz5JSF37mAE2PUg.html FORSAKEN SOUL was my first one and STRANGER was my second. You’ll see what I meant if you saw the first one
Really slow with nothing much happening. Luckily the lead was attractive (enough). U should watch stuff like When A Stranger Calls. That one has lots of stuff happening without actually much happening if u catch my drift
Mah ! Tutto sembra paranoico la ragazza il suo girare continuamente senza costrutto l'ansia di guardare continuamente il cellulare .. Per me da ricovero
Your toy on itself, and you starts walk through the house, on darkness, trying to find exactly what, without knife or gun, or something to defend yourself?
1) To call a movie "horror" it must have a supernatural entity, that's what the literature says. This is obviously not horror. 2) A part of that, it lasts for 11 minutes and nothing happens for more then 9 minutes, this makes the movie slow and boring, sorry to say. Some suggestions: 1) Cut everything 2) Do some good scenes playing with some shades in the dark area of the several rooms, maybe some sinister sounds coming from somewhere in the house 3) Everybody must see that there is a monster: which can be the shade itself that slips on the walls/ceilings/doors. This will create the atmosphere 4) She is not afraid, thinks it's only her imagination 5) Slowly create the tension, like sometime let her go out of the frame and make everybody sees the shade moving on the wall right behind her. 6) Then you'll have everything set up for the big jump scary at the end, when the monster finally reveals itself to kill her just an idea to work on what you have: a big house and a loneness girl. Good luck.
Exactly! Absolutely agreed, especially on the first point! I find this short pretty boring, you are so right, nothing happened, and definitely nothing that can be described as horror.
I will never understand why people leave the doors unlocked until they decide to go to bed... Like... You didn't care all day but when you go to sleep, it somehow matters.
The door was locked she just put the extra safety chain on. Can't really have a chain lock on when you need to get in and out of your houose during the day. Plus her door was locked when she came home because she had to open it with a key. So the stranger must have broken in somewhere else other than the front door.
@@caleb700house
So true 😮
Can't defend yourself in your sleep. Maybe that's it.. maybe
Probably the same reason people smoke .
Thanks mom for teaching me to lock the doors as soon as I reach home 😎
Very good. No monster, no demons no jump scares. Just a real threat. That alone is horrifying. And to think he was there for so long.😣
I always understand I leave the door locked until I decide to go to bed like I don't care at all but when I get to sleep it somehow matters to me
If you are living alone you should keep checking your security cameras. And no matter how safe ur house is don't forget to lock your door.
Filmmakers, please remember that most of your viewers can't see in the dark. I feel like I missed some scenes that are important to the plot. What happened at the end?
NO WAIT ! She's coming out from the shower with dry hair! She's better than EVERY bond-girl ever !
You can take a shower without hairwash? Her hair is in a bun... Most women do that...
i didn't sleep well enough because i heard someone is in my closet to get-away from me
why does she keep throwing everything on the floor. 😂😂😂
I think I'll sleep with lights on tonight.
I never leave the doors unlocked until I decide to go to bed like I didn't care at all day but when I get in bed it somehow matters to me
The actress is sensual and innocent at the same time
I'm ready to see something happen but the story ends suddenly! 😆 😆 😆
The buildup and suspense is definitely there...dark settings,..expected something in the basement scene!! would like to see more.⭐
Actually, I scared all along with the darkness and the thought of monster will jump out, appear at any moment in that house.
What camera are you using?
I shot this on the Blackmagic cinema camera 2.5k. The really old one. It actually worked surprisingly well!
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That house way too big and dark without lights on, thats scarey enough
Very nice work on building the mood of it. I'll definitely give the rest of your content a look!
He says right before realizing this was the only piece put out so far 😂 Ah well, consider yourself subscribed to at least!
Turn all the lights on girl
Some people who live alone can take care of themselves but some need a weapon I hope she does
Great job! I can't believe you did all of this in just 9 hours and with 3 people! That's incredible. I like the prolonged suspenseful pacing. Nice cinematography too. Good job by the actress as well! She was likable and didn't oversell being scared or uncomfortable. I even liked the Christmas setting. Feels even more isolated. Make more movies!
Evan Parra FX I really appreciate your comment buddy! It was a brutal shoot only having 9 hours, but I am pleased overall with the outcome! I hope to make more movies soon and improve on my previous work 😁
Great suspense!
I don't understand why people live alone in such big house. I would never live alone like this
Especially with cellar’s 👽👻
Shes a kid you idiot
if I could afford it I definitely would😎 but I’d like to think I’d be better about keeping the doors locked lmao
...a potem żyli długo i szczęśliwie ;)
Great suspense all the way through. Do a monster under the bed film. I think you’d do that concept a real justice
Robert Irwin really appreciate the kind words my friend! I will have to take that recommendation into consideration 😁
Distorted Entertainment I would appreciate it :)
@@zachsmith4149, Please don't. There are only a million of those cheesy videos!
I'm from India and I like such kinda short film I don't see any awful condition in this short film Although I like it cuz I like such kinda condition like alone, abroad home, nature etc 😄
Where did the snow man go off the window sill by the front door?
Jayne Cole Rewatch, it might take a few times to catch it! But it’s there 😁
Zach Smith ur rite found it lol .
I said the same thing! Where did it go???
@@zachsmith4149where? I watched it twice and it wasn’t in the window when she came up from the basement
Why make it so dark, its like seeing into a black hole. Can hardly see some scenes.
Kind of boring and depressive...The scary part was her boredom, feeling of loneliness, apathy, emptiness etc.
Exactly. This was one tedious, long-spun, insipid short.
Great work!
Not at all 👎🏽👎🏽👎🏽
Good horror film.👏👏 Love from India ❤️❤️
Superb very well made,read a couple of post s below biang critical,on a couple of scenes,ignore,you know exactly what your doing and the Piace works,very scary,casting superb ,great actress,very vunrable,music outstandingly,editing perfect,the interesting thing,is,who's to say that intruder wasn't a ghost,a shadow person,possible,either way it frightening,.cheers for making,and with your next film you will hear, nominated vfor four academy in awards.
I've never imagined how in the Western culture that they leave their girls and women to live and run their lives on their own, We, the Muslims, never leave them alone. We're, the men, are responsible for them.
I guess she's not calling her friend tomorrow after all
Don’t leave cords plugged into the outlet kids! It’s very dangerous, and a fire hazard!!!! And how does that guy walk right around her without her noticing!?
I watched a docu about real home intruders. One camera footage showed the house owners slept in front of TV showing ROBOT series. The dark figure (burglar) at the second floor balcony watching the tv downstairs. CREEPY.
I leave all the doors locked until I decided to go to bed like I care all day when i sleep so long
First if I'm home alone l leave all the lights on! Second I loved it! Great suspence threw it all really loved the ending because you do t know what whats gonna happen! Great work! 😃😃😃😃😃
Mary Baeza Much appreciated!
@ponygirl2203 don’t
What happened to going to bed?
Lol, that snowman at the window disappeared and she didn't even notice
But from outside, it was still visible
Guess it's just a mistake lol
The snowman disappearing was intentional, but it didn’t work as well as I had hoped. But glad you caught it! Lol
Pretty cool, but when something doesn't feel right act on it no one ever has a firearm.
AWESOME AWESOME CLIMAX, 💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓 💓💓💓💓💓💓
ZACH SMITH, THIS MASTERPIECE IS " GHETTO FABULOUS STYLE PIMPIN WORK!!! 🫣🫣🫣🫣🫣🫣💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓💓😘😘😘😘😘😘😉😉😉😉😉😉
KEEP MAKING 🎥 EXACTLY ☝🏽& I'M SOO FOLLOWING U, ZACH, 🍯🍯🍯⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽✊🏽🐐🐐🐐🐐🐐🐐
Its true why american people never locked the door of thier house?
I like it! Good suspense, nice picture considering crew of only 3 people, but I think it's too long. Some detailes I would have taken away
This was good! Nice job!
No, it was not.
Lmao that laundry looks creepy as hell
The house is too large. Why always they living alone?
The first 3.5 minutes try too hard to be scary and as a result, they aren't. I'd start in the bathroom. Simple things, like removing the music and using natural sound as she walks up the house would help. It's scarier to talk into a dark house, then one full light. If we saw the snowman as she walked up to the port, they would be eerie.
The snowman in the window that she lit up coming into the house was non existent in the rest of the scenes. Where did it go?.,...ha ha ha
Raymond Keilman it’s there, you’ve just gotta pay attention to where it ended up!
She gets in shower. Gets out. No water.
DID THE KILLER GET GIRLFRIEND??? MUST MAKE PART 2 , & 3,4 IF NEED BE
ITS NOT 🚫 OVER!!!🐰🐰🐰🐰🧟♀️🧟♀️🧟♀️🧟♀️🧟♀️🧟♀️🕵🏽♀️🕵🏽♀️🕵🏽♀️🕵🏽♀️🕵🏽♀️🕵🏽♀️🔎🔎🔎🔎🔎🔎🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪🔪
This was great! What camera did you use?
Jacob Lawrence Thank you so much! It was shot on the Blackmagic cinema camera 2.5k in 2.5k raw, with a Zeiss CP.2 25mm T2.1 and Rokinon 16mm T2.2 cinema lens!
Pretty Seasons come and go
Waters in Lake are frozen, so
when time come, she will see
cute and how, deeper it can be
Good horror and good monster!
I agree😅
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i just like her sweatshirt
Not bad at all!
From a fellow filmmaker, I would just suggest going back and cutting your edits in a few places to pace it a little quicker. I was most saddened that it was open ended! Cool choice for the intruder, but otherwise, good work.
Gotta disagree! Too many horror shorts leave too little time between scares; this film's pace was slow enough that it let the suspense build, which really worked in the film's favor.
I imagine people will have different responses, but I liked that it was left open-ended. The protagonist usually has that point of realization--it's just a matter of when it will happen--and then the battle ensues. But leaving her completely vulnerable to the end really elevated the tension for me.
Most time we see in USA and other countries where single person or two persons stay in a single building but that things may not be possible for us I think that's why they can utilise their brains fully without disturbance and they do what they want when I see that I miss it in my study period and I request that girl can you make me your partner
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TURN SOME DAMN LIGHTS ON GIRRRL.. I mean damn, I'd be more afraid of running into something!
And Shower 🚿 Scene: Need be more realistic.. She hops out the shower dry as hell.
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Omg 😅
Im always alone
And
Im really alone in my life
Why did she draw the curtains at the bath if she was sure of being alone. And while taking out the towel too she was careful enough to extend her hand out of curtains without drawing them apart as if someone was there. Perhaps the crew of the film were there! 🤣
Who showers with the bath curtain open?? Water would spray EVERYWHERE.
What horror just a comedy way
Sono tutti uguali. Ma qual ' è il significato? Inconscio solitudine ? E quale ruolo viene.dato a quel.c . di.cellulare onnipresente in questi.filmettini ? 🙏
Unnecessary suspense
Boring 5mins..( unnecessary bath shot) Can't they cut the scene in showing that the lil girl come out of bathroom, ...
what happens next? is he going to kill her or kidnap her? leaves you thinking
Dame un 💖
Gracias 😉👍💋💖
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not bad, reminds me of my first short except yours is much darker in term of color wise and barely dialogues. shots great, and tips for musics (only in australia), if you're using CC free musics make sure to credit them. doesnt matter if you are profitting off it. Trust me, because you don't want licensing issues and yes free music has those.
I composed the music for this, so they don't have anything to worry about on that side of it :)
And they did credit me, in the credits and in the video description :)
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FORSAKEN SOUL was my first one and STRANGER was my second. You’ll see what I meant if you saw the first one
Really slow with nothing much happening. Luckily the lead was attractive (enough). U should watch stuff like When A Stranger Calls. That one has lots of stuff happening without actually much happening if u catch my drift
So what the dickens was *_that_* all about?
All these horror shorts are way, way too dark. You can't see anything.
Mah ! Tutto sembra paranoico la ragazza il suo girare continuamente senza costrutto l'ansia di guardare continuamente il cellulare ..
Per me da ricovero
This women brave being by her safe if I was alone by my self I'd be scard
Harusnya judulnya bukan "Alone" dong, tapi " not alone"
She was all tatted up. That was kind of weird.
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The man is not devil or ghost . He is joker psycho human
Such a tasteful shower scene...so disappointed.
Tony Green Sorry to disappoint!
I found it boring.. just a girl with no underwear walking in the house and texting
JKT
What she doesnt wear underwear????
@kenreid6950 doesn’t
Your toy on itself, and you starts walk through the house, on darkness, trying to find exactly what, without knife or gun, or something to defend yourself?
تبنبنلننبنبنيمحاق الجعبي من الخوف العبي بقلبي قاتل النبي
Dont take a shower
Short means
5 minutes films
افلام تافه ماعندكم شىء جديد
to slow
Boring as watching grass grow.
It's interesting to note that she never wears underpants. I'm already in love!
Very Boring shit happens
Sorry to say but this film was a total waste of time.
Nooooo. Just watch that beautiful girl was satisfying enough
Time waste
1) To call a movie "horror" it must have a supernatural entity, that's what the literature says. This is obviously not horror.
2) A part of that, it lasts for 11 minutes and nothing happens for more then 9 minutes, this makes the movie slow and boring, sorry to say.
Some suggestions:
1) Cut everything
2) Do some good scenes playing with some shades in the dark area of the several rooms, maybe some sinister sounds coming from somewhere in the house
3) Everybody must see that there is a monster: which can be the shade itself that slips on the walls/ceilings/doors. This will create the atmosphere
4) She is not afraid, thinks it's only her imagination
5) Slowly create the tension, like sometime let her go out of the frame and make everybody sees the shade moving on the wall right behind her.
6) Then you'll have everything set up for the big jump scary at the end, when the monster finally reveals itself to kill her
just an idea to work on what you have: a big house and a loneness girl. Good luck.
Exactly! Absolutely agreed, especially on the first point! I find this short pretty boring, you are so right, nothing happened, and definitely nothing that can be described as horror.
Yea sorry but agree this was boring
So boring
На фига такие большие дома , одному страшно находиться
That creepy and weird and scary someone goes past her bathroom door while she's in show dont she's alone thies no 9ne with this young women
Loved the short feature by the way! I have a serious inquiry and would like to know is there a business email we can chat through?
Bored