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- Learn how to improve your descriptive writing. The four component of effective descriptive writing are explained: paying attention to details, using descriptive language, including multiple senses, and organisation.
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When I stepped out onto the old wooden dock, a breathtaking sight, more beautiful than any painting, lay before me. The first rays of the rising sun were shyly peeking out from behind the horizon. The ocean was stagnant, an indigo sheet of glass glittering in the morning light. I inhaled deeply and the salty fragrance of the sea filled me. I would never have been able to experience this back in the city, surrounded by the incessant beep beeping of cars and the unpleasant smell of gasoline floating in the air. I flipped open the letter that had brought me out here. The paper was slightly weathered and beat from the many times that I had read it. It contained a handwritten note from my mother, reminding me to enjoy my time because it would not last forever. It reminded me to take a break from my tedious nine-to-five job in a cubicle, to “stop and smell the roses.” And so, standing in front of a magnificent view with the feeling of gritty sand at my feet, 20,000 miles from my apartment, I drew in another deep breath and vowed to truly live.
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THATS SO GOOD :0, as a lil child I have only just felt how much I didnt get to leanr :'(
TBH this video was super!!! It helped me a lot for my exams.
This is my descriptive text on the picture prompt (Hope its good):
The calm soothing waves thrashing back and forth. As the waves lapped across the bridge made of perched wooden planks. Day and night were having a duel against each other. As the Sun was falling back down beautiful birds scurried across the sky. At the end of the pier laid a fisherman's shack drifted around by a wooden fence, lurking towards the center of the gigantic alluring sea. As the soft waves lapped on to the shore the sky manifested a shade of pink fuchsia on the soft in-rolling beach sand. The soft in-rolling waves casted a scent and taste of salt amidst the air. :)
Thanks for sharing. I like your personification of day and night!
The waves lapped softly against the shore. The rickety, deserted dock groaned in the wind. A lone bird call echoed throughout until it faded into the darkness. A salty sea breeze blew from the sea. The smell of fresh fish caught by the fisherman wafted through the air. The soft sand crumbled beneath a set of shoes. A fish jumped out of the water and landed with a splash. The slightest bit of pink peeked out of the blue-gray clouds as the sun rose. The wind died down, and a curious crab scuttled out of its burrow. Then, all went quiet.
oops didn't mean that
This is a great descriptive paragraph!
@@EasyTeachingNet thx
I'm using this
Love this👌
Boom!
Lightning streaked down from the sky, followed by the echo of a booming thunder that rang in his ears. The boat shook, trembling strenuously as it drifted along with the frantic waves.
Cold, limpid water pounced at him like prey, enveloping his entire body with its wet touch. He coughed uncontrollably, the taste of salty water lingering in his mouth as he released the liquid he accidentally sucked in.
He shivered slightly, the cool wind breezing past him as it seeped through his soaked clothing. A sense of panic, fear, and loss rose up from his chest.
He needed to get out of here. Now.
But..stranded in the middle of a sea of chaos and monsters, where would he go?
This is a great passage of descriptive writing. Well done!
@@EasyTeachingNet Thank you, I had to fix the last part though where the guy was cold, because it seemed more like it was the wind that shivered instead of him.
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This is from my student "A" who is 8 years old. We loved your video.
One day I drove with my family to the beach. My cheeks were red with excitement, and I was trembling with happiness. The beach was a calm and peaceful place. As soon as we got there, I tossed on my flippity flippers and jumped into the water. The water was warm, and I felt cozy like I was wearing a jacket of water. I could feel the algae tickling my toes, and it made me smile from ear to ear.
I jumped out of the water and wrapped myself in my velvety towel which was as smooth as creamy body butter. I could feel the sand on my toes because my feet and the sand were both wet. The sand gently rubbed against my feet like grains of salt. I could hear the seagulls squawking on the rough rock which was as rough as a brick. As heat from the sun became warmer and warmer, my mom set out cool sugary popsicles. They were as sweet as frosting! The air around us smelled of salt and happiness. As I chomped on my popsicle, I gazed at the swirly cotton candy sky. The blues, pinks, and purples moved together in the air high above me like a beautiful game of musical chairs.
Please tell "A" that I really enjoyed reading his description!
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Here's mine!
The long, wooden, rickety bridge stretched out across the calm, blue sea. The faint, peaceful sound of water washing upon the shore, is so calming. The salty smell of the ocean filled the air. The feeling of the soft sand under your feet makes you feel deeply relaxed. Clouds cover the beautiful night sky. It's absolutely gorgeous.
Remember, try to keep your writing to one tense and only use another tense when absolutely necessary. This was kinda confusing to read, but good effort.
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That's good but remember to show not tell
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Thank you a lot I struggle so much with descriptive writing. Thanks a lot!!!
The purple and blue sky sat just above the edge of the waters, forming a vast rainbow that divided the clouds. The sky was peaceful and beautiful and I felt the gentle breeze of winter on my skin. I imagined running through the railings of the bay and jumping into the vast sea, swimming further and further until I couldn't find a shore to rest on.
I like your description!
You deserve more than this, You'd fit best at explaining things
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I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future!
Here's my go at the prompt:
I stretch my arms and stare into the darkening grey and blue sky. On this secluded pier, I recount the many times I've walked across the wet sand and heard the crashing waves against the shore. The memories of sandy seashells turned into necklaces, children's laughter as we build castles in the sand, and the soft yellow blanket beneath my body as I experienced my first gentle kiss under the dying sun fill my mind with warmth. This rickety pier has kept me grounded with its fraying wood beneath my tired bones all these years. As I close my eyes and inhale the salty sea, one last tranquil breath, my lips curve into a peaceful smile and I float, further and further, allowing the light breeze and lapping sea to carry me away.
Great writing!
Excellent verbs and word choice. This elaboration easily made me imagine the situation. Great job!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
@@yashasreray8428 Thanks for replaying and helping me. I really appreciate it.
@@yashasreray8428 yours was amazing, love it.
Not as great as others but had to have a go:
The cool evening breeze swirled around me as the salty scent of the sea tickled my nose. The gentle waves lapped against the sand as the wooden planks on the peer creaked and moaned. I shut my eyes and heard, beyond the sunset, the cries of seagulls swooping through the sky. The tranquillity was blissful!
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This is amazing!
nice one
GOOD!!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
This is from my student "MG" who is 11 years old. She and I really liked your video!
The darkened sky gleamed while the ocean mirrored it. The pink was like coral. The smell of the salty air was like a candle in a house, fresh & enlivening. Smoky clouds caused the sunlight to flicker through the air and dance on the glittering water. Footprints in the sand were sunken like ships that washed away into the sea. The roller coaster of a pier twisted and turned, dipped and rose precariously. Quietly the quay slowed and creaked in movement as the wind chimes rang with a peaceful sound.
What a great vocabulary she has!
She did really good!. "The darkened sky gleamed while the ocean mirrored it".
Just brilliant 👏 👌
she wrote it better than me and i am 15
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But you not@@EasyTeachingNet
Here is mine! The multicolored sky blended perfectly with the clouds, amazing you as you look around the quiet beach. The long rickety wooden bridge gently touched the water as the shack perched on top of it all. The air smells salty but you like it. Sinking your feet into the water makes you shiver and smile, this was gonna be the best beach day ever.
I enjoyed reading your description. Well done!
@@EasyTeachingNet thank you! we are doing a writing class at my school and I have to submit a descriptive writing thing and I'm still working on mine wish me luck!
Good luck!
@@EasyTeachingNet I just got my paper back! I got a one hundred! oh I forgot to mention that the descriptive writing thing was a contest. and for a grade to the people who were doing it. I got FIRST PLACE!!
I loved every minute of this tutorial .Thank you for sharing .
I stepped out on the familiar fine rocks and a sudden scent of salt had rushed towards me. The calming, trashing of the reflected liquid sky against the fine sand. I crouched down with the coolness of the breeze, the warmth of the sand against my skin. I waddled forward in a hurry to admire the scenery consisting of a wooden built pier to my left - with a small wooden shack attached to it at the end - that gave off a fresh fishy and iron stench of blood, but was overpowered by the saltiness surrounding. I then glanced towards the ominous ocean that was far away from ending. It’s ice, blizzard look gave shivers as I shuffled closer. The tints of purple,lilac, hues of blues. Breath taking it was.
Thank you, this was fun :)
Great effort!
I was really enjoy the interesting simple story .you helped a lot for my constitution day which this year 5 October 2022 that it's already past with world teachers day and our teacher asked us in grade (6) to write a story using descriptive words which I really found very had on top of it my teacher always complain me about my lazy stories that I really need someone to help me with my stories .💞💞💞💞💞
A storm simmered in a gloomy, distant sky. The long, weathered wooden Pier hung over a calm, yet eerily lifeless bay. I was instantly chilled and goose bumps creeped up my rigid spine. The hairs on my neck stood full alert to the impending doom that would incur as night crept in.
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The clouds lazily danced across a sea of royal blue and pink in the sky. The cold wind kissed my cheeks and ran its long bony fingers through my hair. I felt the sand grasped my feet , working its way like tentacles through my toes and ankles ; I felt it pulling me down to mark foot prints like sunken ships. The sea only a few inches away was a mirror reflecting the beauty of the sky; the water was like glass smooth and delicate so smooth that I felt like I could walk onto op it. I watch as the tide went in and out as if the water was trying to clasp on to land but always failing. A rush of sea salt filled my nostrils as I took a deep breath in. On my left, there was a wooden dock, its long legs were stabbing through the water as it creaked to the melody of the wind. There was a house, with only one dimly lit light on, which flickered on and off that was near the end of the dock. Everything was tranquil and still. It felt like I was tumbling through a herd of clouds into a sweet dream........
Great effort! Thanks for sharing.
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In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I really really enjoyed your description. Well done:)
I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future!
Here's my go at the prompt:
Here's mine:
The long deck creaked as I walked across. The sky was dark blue and the clouds drifted gently across the skies.When I reached the shack, it smelled of the stench of fish and alcohol. There was a powerful breeze blowing against the tiny vulnerable shack while the waves were slowly brushing against the shore. After a long day it was time to return to the sweet soft bed like the sand on the beach.
I particularly like the variance in the sentences starting with "When" and "After" --- it breaks up what could be a series of monotonous subject openers.
I also like the combination (dynamic duo!) of "tiny" and "vulnerable" in your description of the shack.
This is totally amazing
When I walked over the long deck, it creaked. The sky was dark blue, and clouds floated over it softly. When I arrived at the shack, it smelled strongly of fish and drink. A strong wind blew against the tiny vulnerable shack, and the waves gently brushed against the beach. It was time to return to the sweet fluffy bed like sand on the beach after a long day. Does it sound better now ?
Cool ideas!
Here was mine :
The dominant cool wind blending with the aurora of the horizon tampered the silent wooden bridge leeward to the vast hills with a home-like beach house in sight being prepared for a night-long film sensation.
The clouds blended with shades of pink, gives us peace and calm. The beauty of nature. A long, narrow, brown, bridge beside the sea and on top of it was a small little house. The sea looks calm and the beach attracting us to come! A great day on a beach
As soon as I opened my eyes, I saw a golden blanket which was attached to the mirror- like reflected water with a wooden bridge built over it and a heavenly beautiful house. A tranquil , salty scent of sea with a glittering yellow light over the calm waves.
This was a great video! It helped me really understand that what I see when I write needs to engage the senses and evoke feelings. Thank you!
Here's mine:
My toes curl into the damp sand with each step as I follow the purples and indigos dancing along the line of water breaking at the shore. I inhale deeply, sweet briny fresh air fills my lungs as my eyes lift to follow the stark black lines of the jetty along the horizon, painted with the same soft purples and indigo that fade into soft whites of the clouds, hanging low over head and the deep blue of the sunset. A cool evening breeze sweeps over me as I scan the shelter at the end of the jetty. I pull my cardigan tighter against my body, smiling as I remember feeling of the aging timber under my touch from many years ago. My heart swells, I have missed this place.
Well done!
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In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
The beach stretched out for miles and a man stood, his feet buried in the cold sand. He held a hand up above his face so he could see since the sun blinded him.
He lived on the beach and the morning light got into his windows. That was why he went outside in the first place.
The wind blew gustily as he stared up at the clouds passing, he felt raindrop on his finger and he stared at his finger then pinched it with his thumb on the same hand and felt that it was in fact a drop of rain.
Should’ve said the morning sun seeped through his glass windows despite the floral lace curtains
This is mine
The sky so blue hallows over the ocean also making it blue . The wooden long bridge stretched out to the ocean and a small and peaceful building sits there . As the wind blew you could almost taste the salty air . The ocean calmly drifts to the land making the sand soft and relaxing .
I hope it's good enough 😊
Great writing!
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In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
The lavender sheet of candyfloss floated close above my head. Its distinctly refreshing scent spread around me as the wind whooshed everywhere. The white, pearl-like sun peeked from behind the fluffy cloud adapting the early morning view.
Great effort! Thanks for sharing.
Very Good! Great formula that helped me organize all the thoughts. When I want to start a description exercise, I freeze and can't think of where to start. This is a big help. Thanks!
The long wooden dock stretched into the ocean leading to a small fisherman’s house. Surrounded by a cloudy grey blue sky, the smell of salt and seaweed floated from a gentle breeze. The mirror like water reflected the same grey blue sentiment above.
Great effort! Thanks for sharing!
As I stood on the shore, I looked up at the soft blue sunrise.On my left, the long wooden pier, stretched out into the tranquil salty water.A cold wind blew towards the sandy shore stained with trails of footsteps.
Well done!
This is awesome!
Wow amazing!
This was awesome! I love how interactive it is. Really helps in terms of practicing.
Thank you so much sir, this was very simple yet really informative and helpful, may god bless you!
This helps so much thanks I love reading thank you
Hello @EasyTeaching
Your video helped me understand the concept of Descriptive writing.
Thank you so much for helping everyone.
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Thanks so much it helped me a lot and it helped me learn the concept of descriptive writing!
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this took me way longer than it should have, this is a short scene out of context that i decided to make up
Snaked strands dangled from a rip-ridden cloak as it waved in the rubble and dust, revealing a rusted buckle. Dotting the leather,
grains of sand tumbled in the breeze, and resided in the crevices of a severed shirt. Buried beneath rested a grave conclusion - a burning crimson stain, pulsating with unsatisfied vengeance. But it was too late to turn back, as the traveller’s pair of embracing pupils could do nothing except stare into the solemn sunset shades one last time and disseminate their final essence before descending into slumber.
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This video was very wonderful, helpful despite being short and calm too thanks
This is awesome. I know i have some ideas but you just blew my mind with this explanation. Thank you so much
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The sky hid behind the radiant and vibrant clouds painted by the sun's rays. The light peeped from some openings blessing the lake below. On the lake below was station a cabin of wood with a tiny bridge to the shore. The water rippled and plopped and was swayed by the gentle evening Breeze. The waves crashed against the shore like a loud rumble and receeded calmly to the ocean. The friable and gritty sand rubbed against my toes which calmed me like a dream of peace. The cold winds from the sea brought out the freshness and purity within my soul. The smell of the wet sand mixed with the humidity like two fusing together and creating loamy characteristics smell which hypnotized me to sleep.
The darkening sky was splattered with the deep violet-valvet ink hiding the golden coin in its puffy cotton balls .The rippled seashore sand battering against crash of tidal waves ebbing in and out in its lapping lashes.I could not fathom or ponder or preoccupy my mind with anything other than this bliss of solitude that the happenstance gave me .The plier stretched to a small shack standing as a lighthouse .The scrumptious smoke of our evening dinner from the chimney emanated as a signal from my mother to alight from my sandy boat and bid adieu to the mellowing sun.
Sir can you please rectify my grammatical errors please please
Bravo!! Easy teaching indeed.
Thank you I finally understand I couldn't understand how much I try Its very easy to your way of saying it
I love the way you teach, you taught me a lot with this video
Glad to hear that!
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I'm glad it helped!
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The lucious blue berry sky reflected upon the grey and blue waters. The rickety,old pier meandered along the tranquil waters stretching to the fisherman's shack. You can taste the salt water in the air. The calm winds brushed through my hair softly. I could hear all the birds singing melodius tunes in the trees. The salt water in the air was most refreshing.
Thanks for sharing your description. It's great!
Thanks
It really helped, yesterday the topic had started in class, and ma'am had given hw to write about an event, the video was helpful !!
Thanks I’m having a term exam tomorrow that’s why I’m watching and you helped me aLot thanks
Swift wind picked up every strand of hair planted in my head as I walked towards the lonely cabin that sat at the end of the long rickety bridge. With the angry waters so far down and the mist barely making it possible to see, I felt so small. The thunder booming in my ears, a ringing sound lingering in my ears as the my face dampened from the rain.
Great writing!
I went on the porch , the cool air going through my hair. The trees were dancing happily as a took in the breath taking air , I felt so cozy in my fluffy jacket . I stepped on the ground outside felt the flat smooth concrete to my feet , Leaves fell like rain drops as , frogs pounced on smooth and bumpy rocks, i felt alive as the sun beamed on me.
I tried to make one I'm still practicing
The worn wood of the pier creaked under my bare feet as I stopped to absorb the ethereal sight before me. Soft, silent and still, as though I had walked into a painting where the sky's hues blended into violet and the water blurred into the shoreline. My chest rose as the softly chilled air filled my lungs with tranquility, before my feet resumed their journey across the rickety dock stretched ahead of me.
I haven't written anything in 2 years but now need to for a test. Any constructive criticism would be appreciated :)
Thanks for sharing! I enjoyed reading it and I especially liked your use of alliteration.
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In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
@@_56trapped32_ The overall description is fine,but you should improve your spelling and grammar :)
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so admirable briefing, thanks a lot, the presenter.
I learned so much thank you for teaching.
The sun faded beyond the horizon as the moon slithered it's way into the ever growing darkness that consumed everything. The waves that once tickled the sea shore, now crashed with a vengeance. The sky roared, a single flash of blue illuminated the hand like branches that stretched away from the stormy seas, almost as if they were terrified. Goosebumps riddled through me, as i continued marching through the sheet of grey. My eyes were misty as i finally felt water crash against my legs.
"What was i doing here?".
An angelic voice cooed through the storm, urging me to let the dark depths consume my form. To embrace it. A part of me felt drawn, yet it's voice was laced with something. Poison veiled with beauty, like a thorned rose bud.
I shook my head, breaking out of the trance, and bolted to the nearest house. Not looking back. The creature retreated, it's eyes lingering before slipping into icy depths.
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The wind whispered softly through my ears, as if hushing me with a lullaby. I stood there, entranced by the soundless sky, its majestic lapis blue dotted with patchy grey clouds. In the distance, a hut-like house perched on the silky ocean, connected by a sturdy, well-built bridge. As I pondered what secrets the solitary hut held, a wave surged through the caramel-soft sand, brushing against my toes. The sand glistened under the sun, and the air was rich with the scent of coconut.
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The sapphire blue sea howled, almost like it was calling me. My feet buried themselves in the soft, grainy sand as I slowly reached the reflective ocean. The smell of salt consumed my nose and the now disappearing sun made the sea turn an orangey colour. In the distance I heard the menacing creak of the dock swaying. Above the clouds birds squeaked, begging for food. A small crimson crab snapped it hands at me then scurried of back into the yellow sand.
That was all I could think of but I think its alot more descriptive then what I normally do so thanks for this video! ♡
Well done!
The chill breeze brushed through my skin , as I stood on the glistening sand . The water still and calm , reflecting perfectly the scenery before my eyes , the sun disappearing into the sea , painting the evening sky in a a beautiful tint of pink , orange and yellow .
This was really helpful, Thanks a lot!!
Here's mine
Not great
The cool breeze of the evening ruffled my hair. The seagulls were flying elegantly with their white wings spread out like an eagle . The fresh smell of the blue ocean made me ecstatic and as I walked on the coarse sand , I enjoyed the orange sunset.
Here's mine
As I walk through the enchanted forest, I am greeted with the fresh smell of scented flowers. Their bright colours glow in the sunlight.
Chirping birds happily dance around in the sky as the trees waves their arms in excitement.
Then I saw a bright blue water and the golden sand. I can smell the fresh air. When I went swimming in their I can taste the salty Water.
Your wonderful I thank you 🙏 because it helped me so much !
The soft rays of sunshine shined brightly on our faces , the clear puffy clouds floated in tranquility . The sky was mesmerizing with hints of purple , pink and dark blue . The smell of salt in the air and the sound of flowing water . A long wooden bridge reached upto the secluded rickety guesthouse with tiled roofs and bamboo walls . Faraway , a heap of hills and lush meadows could be seen . It was a perfect place of peace and calm.
Thank you so much for the clear teaching.
During the sunset, cotton candy colored, fluffy, and giant clouds had just covered the sun. When I walked across the rickety bridge, it moaned and creaked loudly. Sitting down, I felt the bridge vibrate with scuttling crabs as seagulls flew overhead. A powerful and salty wind threatened to knock down the tiny fishing shack nearby, which had dark windows. Forcefully, waves crashed against the stilts. Reflected in the water, the sky was midnight blue and royal purple. The deserted beach had footprints sunken inside but no one was there because everyone’s vacations were over. Because of this, I had the whole beach to myself.
Great description!
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a peaceful place with a long wooden bridge and a heavenly sky with cold water mixed up with the blue sky . it has a gentle breeze flowing in the surrounding and slight taste of salt in the air.
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My sentence:
The gray clouds hung low over the secluded shack, held up by a long rickety bridge perched above soft tranquil waters.
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The cool evening breeze brushes past my ears, whispering like one's lover. The water stood still as the sky mirrored itself onto it, eminating a soft blue shade.
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It was a peacefull but gloomy morning, I watched as the gentle waves lapped against the wooden post. The grey and blue clouds slowly drifted across the sky as the calm winds blew. Staring at a wooden log floating across the water, I stretched out my arms as I took in the tranquility of the seaside.
Diamond lugged her body past the weathered brown door to her home. Her cat, Mr. fuzzy, peaked from under the creaky rocking chair perched in the living room. She mumbled a greeting to her furry companion sighing in exhaustion as she tiredly hung her pink winter coat. After a long day of school she wanted nothing more than to sleep the rest of the day away, lulled by the warmth of her bed. Unfortunately, the heavy book bag resting on her shoulders said otherwise.
She dropped her book bag near the front door when the smell of freshly baked chocolate chip cookies wafted through the air. Her eyes fluttered close and she took a deep breath, inhaling the sweet aroma filling the air.
“Hey baby. How was school?” Her mother asked rousing her from her daze.
“Horrible. But after I eat some cookies I think I’ll feel better.” Diamond answered.
Her mom laughed in amusement her brown skin crinkling around her eyes.
“Okay miss thang. Let’s get you some cookies to help you feel better, and while you eat you can tell me all about your bad day.” Her mom told her heading back into the kitchen.
“Yes!” Diamond cheered following her mom into the kitchen.
She already felt much better.
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At 2 in the morning I come walking out to the beach I feel the Cool Breeze blowing on my face as water flows towards me it feels so cold I walk deeper into the water as I walk I stop a nice smile towards the Sun as I catch the birds singing I smile and I look back to my house that is 200 away from me
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As my thoughts prance around my coily dread-infested thinking cap. I peer off into the star-gazing beach ball-shaped sun and drift away with the wind. That piece is only a short and quick description of peace for me, now you know. This beautiful lavender-blueish canvas is the height of infinity and the home of all galaxies. What a beautiful sea(see)🌌🌅!!!!!
The gray sky filled with clouds moved past quickly as the wind blew them away. The sunset on the horizen was peaceful as the birds retreated to their nests. The lone cottage stood in the water, some distance away from the coast. Connected by a wooden bridge which cracked with each gust of wind. The waves going through the wooden pillars holding the brighe afloat were strong, making the bridge shake with each ram. It seemed as though the whole world was quite except for the ocean and the birds
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In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
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A cloak of clouds covered the sky Over that a plethora of birds were chirping..The sounds of shore's and bird's chirping hits together made a peaceful music.the cool wind blowing hited my face .The veiw calmed me as like I'm setting in heaven.
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The waves on the beach are eerily still, as the lavender sky paints the sea a purple hue. In the distance, a frail looking pier stretches so far until it is completely swallowed by the fog.
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Beckoning me hypnotically, like the voice of a soft singing siren, the hazy water called out for me. As the sun began to fall further and further from my grasp, colours began to merge. The evening sky whistled in a saccharine, serene tone, strips of ashy grey clouds wrestled with the blotches of soulless purples and blues. Tickling my nose, the cold, crisp air penetrated my senses. Squelches of wet, sludgy, sand squirmed beneath my feet, the bitter wind laughed at my lonesomeness. As I lugged myself along the long, rickety, wooden pier, it were although even the warped wood couldn't bare my company - trembling as if it were going to break. I sat, my feet dangling into the chilling water - at that moment, staring into the mirror- like water, I realised I really was the epitome of lonely. Glacial tears fell from My face as the sinister sky spat as me.
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My version: I stood at the end of the dock with the gentle breeze splashing over my face. The sun gradually dipped down at the horizon behind the cloudy expanse of the sky giving it a cerulean tint. The dock floated on the restless water hitting it's legs gently. My curious eyes looking around in quick successions savoring the tranquil landscape on the other side of the lake.
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Humongous canopy of dark brown tree branches hung over the tangerine looking swing below it with satisfying greens and raindrops coming from it , looking out towards the beautiful colours of violet, magentas blues merged together creating a enormous colourful landscape, so satisfactory
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So uh I was doing the descriptive writing thing but it somehow just slipped into something else entirely and I'm not sure if I entirely approve-
The stillness of the sea seems to creep into everyone's heads like an unwanted, obnoxious guest. This is great! For the first night since departure, we have peace and quiet! Time to reconsider our life choices and what past crimes could have possibly led up to this. Not too fun phrased like that but nonetheless, that's just our natural reaction being salty
("That's horrible, Joseph"
"Oh hush you, Sally, it's too early in the day for flattery! You're making me blush.").
The real reason we are not ecstatic at this development is that we can't help but feel on edge when everything has this lingering sense of WRONG laced within. More than triumph, as it never is with nature, it felt like waiting. And with our impatient reckless bunch of sailors barely qualified to get on a ship, let alone pilot it, simply on board for the chance at adventure,
('' Seriously what is it WITH the puns?"
"The point, my dearest Sallybun, is that they annoy you. And annoying you makes me a very happy man indeed. You care about my happiness right?"
"Not even a little bit."
"I am heartbroken.") Let's just say patience isn't our selling point.
As has been displayed plentiful throughout the day with people trying to occupy their time with underdeveloped chatter in the most painful of ways. It seems everyone has forgotten how to converse, having favoured saving their lives over gossiping about the fisherman who found a bear in his underpants,
("Wait really?"
"Do you trust me so little as to question anything I say?"
"Can you blame me?"
"...alright that's valid") a decision I can't say I entirely approve of. YOLO and all right? Is that the slang kids use these days?
Oh, hell knows, I've been distanced from civilization for so long, I'm not sure what these days even ARE
("We literally left home 20 days ago."
"Shhhhhhh, now check the back of my head and tell me if I'm balding."
"Joseph, I'm not sure how to break this to you but your head is shaven so..."
"And does that amount to discrimination? No, no it does not."
"I refuse to be a part of this conversation.").
Anyway, the hustle and bustle in a sailor's life generally refers to life threatening situations that you never know you'd come out of alive that you look back in the later stages of your existence and smile serenely at " Ah, the good old days, running around with my friends, trying not to drown through thundering storms. Oh, the joys of youth!"
("I'm not doing that."
"At this point I am convinced you have no real reason to butt in anymore and simply are doing it to pester me."
"Oh, but the joys of youth, Joseph! Yolo, was it?"
"I regret being born."
"And so the cosmos fall into place!")
This hustle and bustle was sadly addictive for it offered a sick comfort of at least knowing what you stood against. You had the privilege of being able to delude yourself into thinking you had bottomed out and all would be fine. Because if you truly did bottom out, you'd be dead real quick after that. And we don't concern ourselves with depressing matters as such. Point is, it's a SHIP. We're SAILING. It's COOL. Ask any 7 year old and they'd tell you, I dare you. We concern ourselves with that instead. You know, the fact that prepubescent children all harbour an idol crush on us
("One more pun. Joseph, try me, just one more fucking pun and I will end you."
"Now now no need to be seaside yourself, I know you lost your hairpin and it's all very traumatizing but I don't care so-"
"That's it-"
"Ow ow ow, what the fuck Sally?! We're recording an SOS, god fuck ouch you hit hard!"
"Well then hurry up, we're recording an SOS, you said it, not a goddamned NOVEL!").
Maybe we're crazy. Who knows. Who's gonna live long enough to care, amirite?
Now back to the weather telecasting we have all so stealthily swerved from.
(" That was ALL you."
"It's rude to point fingers."
"I'll tell you how much ruder it can be to point fingers!"
"Oh dear, you sure do seem to have a lot of anger bottled up inside you. You should probably get that checked out")
Now the problem with the weather was that it felt like the calm before the storm-
(" How literal.")
-rather than a clear. Well I supposed that's how the weather works but what I mean is that it likely did not even denote a temporary respite.
That is, temporary on a long term basis.
(" You're a romantic, aren't you?"
"And what of it?"
"Lord, I have a sap in the general proximity of me. Time really is a bitch huh?"
"That's offensive."
"So's your face.")
What really sucks about it that we could never have a semblance of grasp over when the temporary started and ended. Sky's moods fluctuate from good to horrendous in a matter of minutes, something we have come to understand the hard way.
So right now, we're um-
("Somewhere in the ocean. Yeah. About as precise as we can get."
"Great, that just narrows it down to, oh I don't know, all the ocean-y parts on Earth."
"That's not a word. Ocean-y, I mean."
"That's all you got from that?"
"And that you have a terrible sense of humor."
"I wasn't JOKING, genius.")
Uh yeah, somewhere. In the ocean? Yeah. I can see some big rocks in the distance if that helps.
("...wait a fucking minute.")
No what-
(" that's-oh my god-that's not rocks is it."
"That's not a question, is it?")
Well uhm to whoever that's hearing this, um i'm SO sorry I wasted your time. I feel like i'm supposed to be yelling "ahoy land" or something like that but I honestly can't be bothered.
("Stop recording, fucker, we don't need this anymore."
"Jeez Sally, I don't remember you being this bitchy."
"Jog your memory then, I've always been here."
"...yeah-yeah.")
Bonus bits:
(" Okay I know this is the mic. You figure out the rest."
"Well how am I supposed to do THAT? Should've gone to school but NO, I wanted an adventure!")
(" Ah okay I think I got it."
"...Joseph, baby, why did you make a paper plane out of the manual?"
**Maniacal laughter**
"It's karma"
"Wait no Joseph-"
**paper plane flies away into the ocean**
"Well…I'm not swimming. What if some shark falls in love with me? I don't wanna be a heartbreaker."
"Joseph"
**nervous laughter**)
(" Uhm my name is Joseph and I just came here to report about the approaching apocalypse-"
"Be serious")
(" For the last time, we are NOT doing karaoke right now!")
("-and he was very very astonished thinking his dick was catching fish-"
"Riveting, tell me more.")
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A calm and rainbow was almost covered by majority of purplish clouds in which create a blissful and lovely picture on sight. A long, extension of bridge which stretched from the base of the moist, sandy beach to the end of the fisherman's house. Though it was a long extent, it would be a challenge for wanderers walk on the thin, wooden planks with dull colours when they stamble across while they view the lovely mother nature of the atmosphere. A glimpse of fisherman's house could be seen on the reflective pond of water. Through the pond, a light blue sea is seemingly endless that as if it was an illusion.
Jutting from the hushed coastline, a lonely shack balances on glassy water. The air is thick with a briny breeze that pierces the surrounding stillness. Lumbering clouds roll into infinity as the sun raises her sleepy head.
The clouds hovered quietly like a duvet on the salty sea. Leaving colours stripped off from the brittle wooden struts. A shack from the rims of the bay secluded and afloat filled with echoes of despair.
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