Everything wrong with the book I wrote! - The Rise of the African Empire

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  • čas přidán 25. 04. 2024
  • I wrote my first book and today it has been a month since it was published. Let me tell you everything wrong there, and also some of the stuff I’m very proud of! I’m doing this, so I can be the first one to criticize my own work and not give anybody else the opportunity.
    I wrote “The Rise of the African Empire” because I made a video regarding all endings Germany and near the end I added a scenario regarding the German Empire leaving to Tanganyika, which is modern-day Tanzania, used to be called German East Africa. Then the Kaiser would try to return to Europe and depose the Austrian painter, ruling Germany.
    There was a good underground story regarding Kaiser beating the Germans and returning home. I would say that the plot was a 10/10 and there was a lot of drama and things that I bet you wouldn’t expect.
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Komentáře • 133

  • @rewriting-history
    @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +17

    You can buy the book from here, just use your local amazon :)
    Book - www.amazon.com/dp/B0CTHSKVWP

  • @Porphyrios.History
    @Porphyrios.History Před měsícem +91

    infinite content glitch:
    step 1: make content
    step 2: criticize your content
    step 3: repeat step 2

  • @PakBallandSami
    @PakBallandSami Před měsícem +24

    Respect for taking criticism, not a lot of people on CZcams do that🗿

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +8

      Taking criticism in the ONLY way for me to improve. I care more about improving, rather than being right i.e not taking criticism.

  • @TheIronSpartan08
    @TheIronSpartan08 Před měsícem +14

    Bro pulled an Eminem and criticised himself before the haters could.🔥🔥💯💯

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +5

      Yeah that's what I said to another comment earlier. Literally pulled a B-Rabbit

  • @yaboi3398
    @yaboi3398 Před měsícem +8

    lets wait for the film adaptation!

  • @Filip7893
    @Filip7893 Před měsícem +71

    Bro blasting his own book

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +12

      I still say it's my favorite book, there are just things wrong with it. Next one should be better!

    • @TheBlackzman
      @TheBlackzman Před měsícem +4

      ​@@rewriting-historyvery nice :)

    • @sidp5381
      @sidp5381 Před měsícem +1

      @@rewriting-history well done you should also in my opinion do a video on the Bulgarian Empire the first and second, specially, the second one which emerged during the fourth crusade thanks to Peter Theodore, who crowned himself with a golden wreath and wearing red boots and his brother Ivan asen get my hands on those red probably might give it to the Bulgarians

  • @Adolf-Schickelgruber
    @Adolf-Schickelgruber Před měsícem +41

    Bro this is like something that would be created in a HOI4 mod ,and I love it.

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +18

      Appreciate that! I also considered making it a HOI4 mod too!

    • @TheBlackzman
      @TheBlackzman Před měsícem +3

      Wow, 😮 I hope it's real lol, I remember there's a mod that is African France or smth I don't remember XD

    • @BrethenGaming
      @BrethenGaming Před měsícem +1

      It's Kaiserreich​@@TheBlackzman

    • @TheBlackzman
      @TheBlackzman Před měsícem +1

      ​@@BrethenGamingoh ok thx

  • @ChaseAustralia
    @ChaseAustralia Před měsícem +55

    Bro is his biggest hater 😭

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +16

      Must be my own first so I don't let other people take that away from me. Learned that from B-Rabbit in 8 mile

  • @TheIronSpartan08
    @TheIronSpartan08 Před měsícem +6

    7:40 This storyline would definitely be interesting
    You could make a potential storyline make a storyline for Switzerland where being the only functioning state in Europe (with everywhere else on the continent being wasteland and sparsely populated) Swiss politics begins to polarise between two factions: A conservative one that wants to maintain the status quo of the country and keep its neutrality and another that wants to take the opportunity to expand Switzerland into the surrounding territories as far as they can.
    In terms of the expansionist faction, instead of them just being motivated by 'power' you could have them genuinely believe that they should colonise these lands for the betterment of the people living there (a common ideological motivation for colonisation we see in history).
    Perhaps you could even draw a contrast to show that even the expansionist faction is divided between those who want to genuinely benefit the peoples and those who just want to capitalize on a devasted Europe. (This would be better done through two contrasting characters each acting as a foil for the other).
    Also, you could talk about how (similar to the Roman times) for every expansion they do, the locals are subjugated and forced to submit. As the expanding Swiss empire grows there'll be tensions between those who are considered 'truly Swiss' and those who aren't. Perfect tinderbox for revolts.
    Anyways these are just some ideas I had. This scenario is so vast with so many more possibilities.

    • @stargazer-elite
      @stargazer-elite Před měsícem +1

      Oh yes yes I like it

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +1

      Cool ideas, I will take it to a different turn, but your idea is also good! Thank you for writing this comment!

  • @Aziruf
    @Aziruf Před měsícem +6

    That’s really awesome dude! I hope you fix all of the issues and go on to write more books!

  • @Prussian_edits
    @Prussian_edits Před měsícem +2

    Hey! Just wanted to say. I absolutely am loving the book, as a person that’s interested in alternative German empire history this has to be the best one yet. Keep up the great work matey!

  • @wertyghg5132
    @wertyghg5132 Před měsícem +6

    I think that i don't really like the fact that you've put story over realism, but youre book really inspired me to write one by my own (mostly because it has the potential and the conflicts to be nearly perfect).
    I will try to write about the german royal family will be exile after ww1 to Namibia like Napoleon.
    After the rise of Hitler mainly churchill and the US prefer the Kaiser as new empire in germany (constitutional monarchy).
    I hope its fine for you (i will need 2-3 years and dont know if i publish without any audience like you)
    I give you're book 3.5 stars and will also buy you're next one (or I'll borrow it from a friend again)

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      Appreciate that very much. Of course you're more than welcome to do your own version in a more realistic way. Please somehow get in touch with me when it's ready, as I would love to take a look. I'm glad I could inspire other people to write, learn, and thing.

    • @wertyghg5132
      @wertyghg5132 Před měsícem

      @@rewriting-history I'm glad you see it so positively. I will of course send it to you if you want❤️

  • @indianajones4321
    @indianajones4321 Před měsícem +5

    Writing is just like making videos, the more experience you get the better the content will be. Good luck mate, also a Bulgaria winning the 2nd Balkan War book would be really cool 💪 🇧🇬

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +4

      Thank you very much! I already have a video regarding Bulgaria winning the Second Balkan War so I will release it soon :)

    • @indianajones4321
      @indianajones4321 Před měsícem +2

      @@rewriting-history epic

    • @mrcat5508
      @mrcat5508 Před měsícem

      @@rewriting-historyu said that u made typos, so with my veeeeery professional advice, just use spellcheck. Like I made 5 typos but u don’t see any cuz it automatically corrects

  • @falconia4071
    @falconia4071 Před měsícem +3

    Now I want to read it! I really love your content and knowing that you wrote a book despite the language barrier fills me with determination to continue and do the same xd.

  • @lu9asx
    @lu9asx Před měsícem +3

    Please write a sequel to it, i bout the physical copy and i loved it :D

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      I really appreciate that! I don't think I can expand the story in any meaningful way. Yes WW2 started, but there is nothing much I can do there, unless I make the second book the point of view of Stalin

  • @danielsantiagourtado3430
    @danielsantiagourtado3430 Před měsícem +3

    Very good! Keep up the good work! Love your content ❤❤❤❤❤

  • @winter2888
    @winter2888 Před měsícem +2

    Will probably buy your first book,but i have to say that the idea for the second book sounds dope.

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      Thank you very much, appreciate that you will buy the first one. Will start writing the next one very soon

  • @TheBlackzman
    @TheBlackzman Před měsícem +6

    Very good and cool keep it up, liked btw alrdy subbed long time ago lol

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      Thanks for the sub! Legend!

    • @TheBlackzman
      @TheBlackzman Před měsícem +2

      @@rewriting-history hope there's more books like this, very interesting

  • @CanadianBricks
    @CanadianBricks Před měsícem +2

    I can’t wait for your new book

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +1

      Appreciate that! I can't wait to start working on it soon

  • @maxi2786
    @maxi2786 Před měsícem +3

    OMG HAND REVEAL!?!?!?

  • @chickentenders1777
    @chickentenders1777 Před měsícem +3

    Rewriting history hand reveal lol

  • @Name-xr9qn
    @Name-xr9qn Před měsícem +2

    I would read that book in a heartbeat; I love the fallout franchise and even if it's not the same, the similar concepts interest me, and I'm excited to see how it would turn out.

  • @Yourlocalcringeman
    @Yourlocalcringeman Před měsícem +1

    Amazing

  • @paulinalevina9690
    @paulinalevina9690 Před měsícem +12

    Actually, Wilhelm "III." was an supporter of the austrian painter (as pointed out in your "What if the German Empire was restored in 1932" video)

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +7

      I am very well aware, but the plot of the book would be ruined if they became friends and ruled Germany together.

    • @kaiserfranzjoseph9311
      @kaiserfranzjoseph9311 Před měsícem +6

      he wasnt really a supporter, he just thought Hitler wanted to bring back the monarchy. Once it became obvious he had other plans, he dropped his support rather quickly

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +4

      @@kaiserfranzjoseph9311 Yeah I know, I mentioned all of this in the video that was pointed out

  • @GuestMate
    @GuestMate Před 5 dny +1

    Even tougth I don’t have the book yet i think the ideea is really cool ideea and i say that you should write more books

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před 5 dny

      I appreciate that, as I said near the end of the video, I'm thinking of starting a new one, so we shall see how that progresses

    • @GuestMate
      @GuestMate Před 5 dny

      @@rewriting-history No problem i think i would buy the next books

  • @stargazer-elite
    @stargazer-elite Před měsícem +1

    I’m definitely gonna get it when I get the chance

  • @indianajones4321
    @indianajones4321 Před měsícem +4

    RWH keeping it real!

  • @IndonesianBallProduction
    @IndonesianBallProduction Před měsícem +2

    Beat me to it man....

  • @hadesentertainment5704
    @hadesentertainment5704 Před měsícem +2

    trying to make a Harry Turtle Dove book without Harry turtle dove

  • @minetaab
    @minetaab Před měsícem +4

    I want to buy the book but money is not moneying

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      I completely understand that, don't feel any pressure to do so!

  • @janipiot
    @janipiot Před měsícem

    No problem bro, I buy it

  • @ILikeHistory1444
    @ILikeHistory1444 Před měsícem

    Offtopic but what app u used to make the maps, and animated

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      I use paint.net to make all my maps and I edit in Camtasia studio

  • @rogercroitor4962
    @rogercroitor4962 Před 26 dny +1

    Bro is a true history artist, he hates himself, he is 101% the real deal

  • @Dabosanskiaminer
    @Dabosanskiaminer Před měsícem +2

    Are you gonna make Bulgarian version of the book?

  • @Dangodda
    @Dangodda Před měsícem +1

    Damn, what a power move.

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      What do you mean exactly? That it was smart for me to criticize myself before anybody else can?

  • @GamerKarlYT
    @GamerKarlYT Před měsícem +2

    I hope you can turn that scenario into a hoi4 mod in the future!

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      I already have a HOI4 mod, maybe my next livestream I should reveal it finally. I'm down to make it into a HOI4 mod actually

    • @GamerKarlYT
      @GamerKarlYT Před měsícem

      @@rewriting-history Amazing! Will you release it on the steam workshop?

  • @Sonia_Mapper
    @Sonia_Mapper Před měsícem +1

    my flex is that i was the first one that had the book

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      Yeah I think so, that's a big one. We both have the first edition and all it's mistakes

  • @stargazer-elite
    @stargazer-elite Před měsícem +1

    7:34 if I’d have to guess this is based on Albert Einstein’s quote of “I know not with what weapons World War III will be fought but I know World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones“ ? Pretty cool

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      It is indeed based on that quote. I will get to writing soon, thank you for the positive feedback!

  • @beans00001
    @beans00001 Před měsícem

    next book, I’ll make a critique first

  • @Teddyiscute2
    @Teddyiscute2 Před měsícem +1

    Rewriting is brilliant, if anyone wants to say bad stuff about his book he can just say I know

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      Oh yeah, that's the biggest chad move. Somebody will say that I have misspellings and I will just say "yeah I know, I made an entire video about it"

    • @Thatoneidiot001
      @Thatoneidiot001 Před měsícem

      @@rewriting-historyalso you have the excuse that you speak whatever Bulgarians speak and write whatever Bulgarians right sorry I dont know what it’s called I keep forgetting but your book sounds good I will say I think it would be more likely if the monarchy fled
      To namibia since it is more desolate and is less valuable than east Africa based on what I know and it’s harder to access

  • @andreababcock2622
    @andreababcock2622 Před měsícem

    Hey, RH, can you make a scenario where the 1917 Kingdom of Poland survives with Archduke Charles Stephen of Austria-Teschen becoming king by popular support of the Poles? This means he would stay in power after the Entente is victorious, renouncing German claims, but offering asylum for the Hohenzollerns in the Prussian Imperial Poznan castle.
    The Habsburgs would sign an early peace, retaining a larger Hungary (Vojvodina, Southern Slovakia and Bratislava; a split Banat with Romania, Szeleky lands, southern Carparthian Ruthenia, and other parts of Northern Transylavania) but not Austria after it was invaded by Germany. After the invasion, Austria and Bavaria would be split off in a High German Republic indifferent to the Habsburgs. However, the early peace allowed the last Habsburg emperor, Karl, to grant Czechoslovak and North Bukovina to the Polish state to create West Slavia. Promising the Hohenzollerns the future reinstatement of the German Imperial family, they would be given a large remainder of the German Imperial Army and the ethnic polish parts of Silesia and East Prussia.
    With so much extra power, Poland would win the Polish-Soviet war and receive all Soviet lands west of the Dniepro down to Odessa on the Black Sea (including Kiev, Lithuania, and a puppet Latvia (the latter later going to the Germans once they would be reinstalled). His heir would be assasinated on the front, though, and his second son become weak as he did in real life, leaving his third, Ukrainian nationalist son. They would be co-rulers in the Polish-Ukrainian state as the Ukrainians would get an equal share in the government.
    A second war would happen as the Poles try to save the Soviet Ukrainians from the Holodomor Genocide, lasting years longer than OTL. They (and Russian revolutionaries) would win and install a Russian republic, or less likely, a separate Habsburg kingdom, annexing all ethnic Ukrainian and Belorussian lands including the Kuban and Crimea, Rostov, and a bit beyond. Finland would be ceded a bit of Karelia in the North.
    Charles Stephens died in 1933 in OTL, giving the Polish lands to his Ukrainian counterpart/son. The Nazis would soon aim, with Italy, to overthrow Europe, starting with France while Poland is distracted, gaining only Alsace Lorraine in a feeble victory (as it is earlier). Poland would turn around later and initiate a monarchist coup in Germany, ceding the ethnic French parts of Alsace Lorraine to France and the French mainland gains Italy got back to France (not Corsica, though). Yugoslavia (which has Bulgaria this time, excluding the seaports and south that went to a Greece victorious in the Greco-Turkish war) would gain very minor border regions, not including Zara, just a bit of the Litorale.
    King Wilhelm Franz Habsburg of unified Poland and Ukraine, newly christened Vasyl Vyshyvanyi, would seek to further unify and heal the West Slavs and Ruthenians/Ukrainians/Belorusians of their enmity. He would do this by reuniting the Catholic and Orthodox Churches by marching on the Vatican during the Italian coup I mentioned earlier. Differences between the Chruches would be negotiated and healed through much forceful diplomacy. Marrying the daughter of the Neo-Byzantine Emperor, Vasyl would be crowned Emperor as of old, alongside the Byzantine Emperor.
    A Christian Renaissance would issue forth, Poland-Ukraine at the center of it all. A new national identity and name would be given: Nowa Slowiya (New Slavia), unifying the west Slavs, Lithuanians, Belorusians, and Ukrainians permanently.
    Vasyl Vyshyvanyi would be known as the greatest modern monarch, the moniker Unifier being added to his name.
    Hail, Emperor Vasyl Vyshyvanyi the Unifier of Halychyna Habsburh (Galicia-Habsburg)! Hail!

    • @andreababcock2622
      @andreababcock2622 Před měsícem

      Please do my scenario, RH, t’would make my year! Thanks for dealing with me

  • @Kret-o
    @Kret-o Před 29 dny

    Respect for straight up dissing your own book

  • @Tobadogodogogobo
    @Tobadogodogogobo Před měsícem

    I dont know but i feel i watched a hoi4 video with a mod that tells what if the german empire fled to tanzania

  • @gavinshultz443
    @gavinshultz443 Před měsícem

    But it now! 🫵🤨

  • @Warie101
    @Warie101 Před měsícem +2

    Video idea: What if Japan didn't surrender after Hiroshima and Nagasaki

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      I like it and I have thought of making a video about it, but my audience seems not to like it so much

    • @Cannon530YTOO
      @Cannon530YTOO Před měsícem

      Just do it. Give a little warning and then… UNEXPECTED VIDEO!
      (It could even be a short if needed…)

    • @WorldAnthems197
      @WorldAnthems197 Před měsícem

      Two Words : Soviet Japan

  • @iskanderaga-ali3353
    @iskanderaga-ali3353 Před měsícem +1

    Next video "Everything wrong with "Everything wrong with the book I wrote""

  • @just_hris
    @just_hris Před měsícem +2

    Afrikareich should have been the title tbh.

  • @Soul-TiTanium
    @Soul-TiTanium Před měsícem +1

    I want to buy it but iam a kid my mom won't let me buy it

  • @ZeNpps
    @ZeNpps Před měsícem

    Short idea: what would chinas borders look like if it collapsed

  • @pac-zp2gn
    @pac-zp2gn Před měsícem +1

    >write a book
    >debunk your own book

  • @ratisgood4448
    @ratisgood4448 Před měsícem +1

    petain collaborates with zombies

  • @Som_maper
    @Som_maper Před měsícem +1

    Shit I think pirates stole it you know

  • @LindaGodfrey-or5jo
    @LindaGodfrey-or5jo Před měsícem

    Don't you dare try to time out me again timeouts are temporary and last 300 seconds

  • @rauhau_
    @rauhau_ Před měsícem +2

    :)

  • @Leatly
    @Leatly Před měsícem +1

    Hello

  • @username-oz6gz
    @username-oz6gz Před měsícem +1

    12$ is quite expensive for soft cover book

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +2

      I agree, but amazon takes more than half of it, I can price it at $5 and get like 50 cents out of it... It's all because of amazon, they take a large cut

    • @username-oz6gz
      @username-oz6gz Před měsícem +1

      @@rewriting-history i didn't know that

  • @alg3876
    @alg3876 Před měsícem

    Bulgaria = sărăcie 😂
    România mai bună

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem

      Yes Bulgaria is poor, and what can I do about that exactly?

  • @dogsittinggay7273
    @dogsittinggay7273 Před měsícem

    You already missed ur shot to be the first to criticise it look in the game chat of the last hoi4 stream someone (definitely not me) was insulting it when u were talking abt it

    • @rewriting-history
      @rewriting-history  Před měsícem +1

      I'm the first one to make a video tho

    • @dogsittinggay7273
      @dogsittinggay7273 Před měsícem

      @@rewriting-history alright fair enough also could you do a video about what if albania became the third rome

  • @FeilDayLightLight
    @FeilDayLightLight Před měsícem +1

    Amazing