How To Write Better Scene Descriptions - Jill Chamberlain
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- čas přidán 15. 05. 2024
- In this Film Courage video interview, we ask Jill Chamberlain how to write better scenes in screenplays. Jill also talks about prose writing and how certain words can confuse a script reader.
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Jill Chamberlain is the founder of a screenwriting school, a script consultant, a screenwriter, and the author of The Nutshell Technique: Crack the Secret to Successful Screenwriting.
The Nutshell Technique is considered the go-to manual many professionals swear by. It's on the syllabus at film schools all over the world and has been published in Mandarin Chinese, Korean, and Italian, and in audiobook format.
As a script consultant, Jill has fixed and fine tuned scripts for Oscar-nominated screenwriters, top television showrunners, screenwriters whose movies have made over a billion dollars at the box office, award-winning independent filmmakers, and for many, many spec script writers.
In 2006, Jill founded The Screenplay Workshop with Jill Chamberlain (www.thescreenplayworkshop.org) where she has personally taught thousands of screenwriters feature film and episodic television writing. Complete beginners to Emmy-winning screenwriters and award-winning producers enroll in her classes.
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At 9:20 Jill gives one of her favorite character descriptions. What is one of your favorites?
Annie Wilkes - Misery
Luke Hobbs - Fast Five
Joni Thrombey - Knives Out
Hans Gruber - Die Hard
I also want to give a shoutout to Mr. And Mrs. Incredible age description in The Incredibles when they get older in the 15 year time jump in their 40s. Great work.
This is an intro I wrote for one of my scripts:
INT. HOTEL LOBBY - SUNSET
The flickering fluorescent lights show a ceiling with slow
water drips, walls with paint peeling, and worn furniture
held together with duct tape. RICHARD BALDWIN, 53, stumbles
out from his office with a "Manager" pin that has been
trying to fall off since he stuck it to his golf shirt
yesterday.
@@AnnoyingMoose I love the Manger falling off like. Tells me everything I need to know about this guy 👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾
I don't use ages as it limits casting and why '3'?! could he not be 50? What would the three add to anything?!
This is probably the most usable advice ever uploaded to this channel.
Thanks for this upload!
Literally about to edit the action lines of my short film now.
Perfect!
I love the idea of having a Personal Thesaurus. It helps build a better vocabulary, especially for someone whose first language is not English and keeps descriptions more interesting. Thank you so much Jill and Film Courage for these great writing tips
We hope it is useful Ewa!
@@filmcourageEverything you share on this channel is very interesting to me. Thank you so much! 😊
I'd love to have a home made thesaurus that I could use with my word processor, but I don't know how.
It definitely should be something that we research. Imagine having access to the list at the touch of a few key strokes.
Using beter verbs, is certainly wonderful advice; Dashes, darts, bolts, gazes, spies, glimpses, bursts ...such fun!
Glad you enjoyed it!
This video will make a lot of future scripts, a whole lot easier to read. Good one.
Nice!
1:40 👌👌👌
2:45 Don't Walk Challenge
5:10 Specific Verbs & Nouns
Yep. Great info. All if this applies to novel writing, as well.
A to the point video and not drawn out as so many are! She's not keen on 'looks' and then shows an example of a great stage direction (description) that includes looks.
Great advice. As a green screenwriter I need to definitely use this methodology
I never saw it that way, that your way of describing characters and their surroundings says a lot about your unique voice as a writer.
This is gold.👍🏻
Another great one 👍 👍
It’s funny. I just did find and replace on all instances of the words walk and run in my script a week before watching this video. It certainly uplifted the script
Good stuff. I dig it.
I use walks too much 😅 This video is so helpful!
informative interview
Thank you for your advice 👏🏾👏🏾
Cheers Zaiah!
He enters the room.
You got it.
The room surrounds him.
He tripped into the room rushing to be the first one to claim a seat at the head of the table he hadn't earned.
He enters. “The room” is indicated by the scene heading.
@@ellenclifford it may be a room within a room or a room off a corridor. lol
Great advice for all writers regardless of the translated medium.
Lovely advice. More of Jill please!
Here's everything we have published with Jill thus far - bit.ly/2lPYJ3i
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Great interview,very informative
Thanks RDSimpson!
@@filmcourage baught the book
Excellent..
After watching this i decide to change my writing style.if any chance to learning script writing from scratch it is very helpfull to me. Thankyou
Scene description is my issue. I just finished reading an episode of Breaking Bad’s (The Fly)… Great Writing. It’s not your typical script
He "speed walks" is an adverb with the verb "walk".
That's one way to parse it. Another way to parse it is that it is a verb (read, "speedwalks"). In any case, her point is that it is better than "walks speedily."
Rushed, strode, sped, etc.
Speed walk is stylistically a very specific type of walk to me still, due to the way leg joints will move during the sport. I feel it gets some leeway here. ;P
Her point does come across even though her examples aren't great. This is normal in an interview where the questions were not rehearsed. Besides, she even points it out when she mentions "run-walk".
Dont pause on the comma. Strive to listen to the point
Very interesting, I’ve read so much writing advice that says to not use more evocative verbs for things like “says” and she is saying the opposite.
This would just be true for scripts (I’m not sure she’s right though). But in books, you almost always use “says.” And you also don’t want to get too creative if “walks” will do.
It would be terrific if existed a dramatic writing thesaurus.
How to be a better screenwriter:
1) watch better (older, lower budgeted, non-American, and different types of) movies.
2) Read scripts
3) Billy Wilder
Saved you a lot of time and trouble.
Ready utensils .
Drug dealers don't saunter? Is Crip walk more accurate? 😂
Stop reading my random notes that I just jot down off the top of my head in literally one second .. You people are sick in the head to invade my privacy so much and THEN try to critique random things about my life STOP .. Truly horrible people 💯